Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig

Excellent

This is a good two-line poem. The message is clearly stated. However, the text is dwarfed by the large visual. Make the text larger so it is more prominent. Centering it on the visual will make it more focal too. Your gif visual is perfect.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022

Thank you very much! Enjoy the rest of this Thanksgiving Day.

reply by Sandra Nelms-Ludwig on 24-Nov-2022

You are welcome. Enjoy your Thanksgiving too!

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

This is a Teo Line Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest entry and have a Blessed Thanksgiving.
Doctor Ricky1024

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022

Thanks for the detailed review. I'm glad you enjoyed my work and I hope you enjoy the rest of this Thanksgiving Day also!

Comment from Celyn

Excellent

This is a very emotive short poem. I presume that the internal rhyme is travel and fragile, which represent a near rhyme so should be OK. However, for this competition each line is supposed to have six syllables not six words as you have done. I am sure that you will be able to alter it to fit in time.
Good luck with it
Celyn

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022

Thanks for catching that. I was able to correct it. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review!