Grim
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Comment from prettybluebirds
Well, is there going to be more to this story, or is this the end? It is one of the most peculiar stories I have ever read. I love it, though. I was a delightfully different story.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Well, is there going to be more to this story, or is this the end? It is one of the most peculiar stories I have ever read. I love it, though. I was a delightfully different story.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much! Yes, very peculiar without a doubt. There is lots more to come. I'm almost through drafting the first book of what I think will be a trilogy. I'm working on editing chapter 4 right now, so hopefully get another chapter posted soon. I'm just so glad that it's getting good reactions. :)
Should have it ready in next day or two! I'm mostly torn on which one should be #4. Lol
Thanks again!
Comment from susand3022
Hi Tara!
I'm guessing that it was her fault after all then? She must be the one related to the Gods. Either that or their marriage was really on the skids. Although, it seems to me that it's just the kind of thing a mean mother-in-law would do. Not tell that you're related to Gods, and that your baby will probably kill you being born.
Just a couple of errors to fix!
In the paragraph that begins, "The one tangible..."
Still, they couldn't (settle) on a name.
Paragraph... "What (the)?" (remove extra
punctuation also)
Getting to be interesting for sure! I wouldn't want Death living in my house! Do me a favor, if you put me in a story like that... give me a baby that's replacing a hunky god, will you? ;)
Susan :)
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Hi Tara!
I'm guessing that it was her fault after all then? She must be the one related to the Gods. Either that or their marriage was really on the skids. Although, it seems to me that it's just the kind of thing a mean mother-in-law would do. Not tell that you're related to Gods, and that your baby will probably kill you being born.
Just a couple of errors to fix!
In the paragraph that begins, "The one tangible..."
Still, they couldn't (settle) on a name.
Paragraph... "What (the)?" (remove extra
punctuation also)
Getting to be interesting for sure! I wouldn't want Death living in my house! Do me a favor, if you put me in a story like that... give me a baby that's replacing a hunky god, will you? ;)
Susan :)
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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I just absolutely lost it laughing. One hunk coming up!
You'll have to see who's related to who. And just when you think you've got it all figured out. I'm going throw you a curve ball! There's much going on behind the top layers.
Writing this book has been one of the strangest things in my entire life (and there's been some strange.) It seems to write itself almost and when I run into a plot wall, a solution just appears. I guess because when you don't restrict your writing to observed reality, the possibilities are endless. I'm still anchoring things so far though which I think is good to have a pint of reference at the least. It's more easily accepted that way. Unless you are Stephen King or the like. He can totally create a complete and distinct separate universe in about 3 sentences. Poe and Koontz are 2 others that I think mastered it as well.
Gotta tell you. I fell down the stairs twice in 3 days. I think I'm going to be laid up for a minute so I guess I'll be doing edits and working on Grim...and whatever else.
New house shoes were the culprit. They are GONE forever.
Tara
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Omg! Sounds wretched! How's the tailbone?
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Sorry for delay, I've been just miserable with my knee and stuck on 2 full time projects for work.
Meddie gets sick of the little puddles of booze Avi leaves everywhere but I think he's probably worth having around.
There is a hunky God right around the corner, but I don't think you'll like him very much! He's a pretty rotten egg. May have to write you in another one. Hoping to get a lot of writing done this weekend. Maybe I'll have some more ready for you soon!
Comment from Ricky1024
This chapter in the book Entitled, "Grim"
Was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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This chapter in the book Entitled, "Grim"
Was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much
Comment from lancellot
Well, this is a real fantasy story. I know this sounds strange considering, but I like the realism in the public, media, and everyone reaction to the skeleton baby. This is just what would happen. And we understand the parents state of mind and reasons to.
Good work.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Well, this is a real fantasy story. I know this sounds strange considering, but I like the realism in the public, media, and everyone reaction to the skeleton baby. This is just what would happen. And we understand the parents state of mind and reasons to.
Good work.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your review. Yes, I'm really trying to address this as these absurd things happen to this family that I keep it as real life as I can. Thank you for understanding and validating that. I'm over half way through the writing and resolved some plot issues yesterday that will speed things along. My intent is that this is book 1 of 3. Thanks again!
