Jewels: health and love
A crown of life11 total reviews
Comment from Zue65
It is an excellent post but the phrase "I love" is missing in one of the lines which is a requirement of the writing prompt contest. The word choice is quite effective to drive home your point. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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It is an excellent post but the phrase "I love" is missing in one of the lines which is a requirement of the writing prompt contest. The word choice is quite effective to drive home your point. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thank you for reviewing. "I love ...." is the prompt, yes, but it doesn't say those words must be included however, just must be about something you love. Many of the entries don't have "I love" but have also been accepted into the contest. Thank you though for your time and review, both are appreciated.
Comment from wierdgrace
You have hit the nail on this one, perfectly said for this contest, and I love that it's about love and health, the value is precious. I wish you luck in the contest, good luck.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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You have hit the nail on this one, perfectly said for this contest, and I love that it's about love and health, the value is precious. I wish you luck in the contest, good luck.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for your thoughtful and encouraging review. Appreciated.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Great 5/7/5 for the I Love contest. Good syllables count and grammatical connection between lines. I like the presentation too. I know what you mean, it's so nice to have beautiful jewelry. It reminds me of my aunt, who had a lot of them.
Gypsy Word Weaver
Art is the language of the heart
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Great 5/7/5 for the I Love contest. Good syllables count and grammatical connection between lines. I like the presentation too. I know what you mean, it's so nice to have beautiful jewelry. It reminds me of my aunt, who had a lot of them.
Gypsy Word Weaver
Art is the language of the heart
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much Gypsy. It was about health and love though, the jewels we treaure were metaphorical more than literal. But I do appreciate your review, and I probably didn't make it clear enough.
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Sorry, I misunderstood. :(
Comment from lyenochka
That was smart to create the full message with the title. It's health and love that enable us to enjoy life as you say, "crown life with grace and beauty." Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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That was smart to create the full message with the title. It's health and love that enable us to enjoy life as you say, "crown life with grace and beauty." Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much. A lovely review.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
A million years ago, there used to be a commercial for a product called "Geritol" which was marketed to older people. The slogan was, "If you've got your health, you've got just about everything." This was the first thing that popped into my mind when I saw this true and accurate poem of yours. Great visual you chose, too. Good luck in the polls!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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A million years ago, there used to be a commercial for a product called "Geritol" which was marketed to older people. The slogan was, "If you've got your health, you've got just about everything." This was the first thing that popped into my mind when I saw this true and accurate poem of yours. Great visual you chose, too. Good luck in the polls!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Thank you Rachelle. I appreciate your review.
Comment from royowen
Yes indeed, if we are to define true beauty, it's not the beauty of youth, that is pleasing to the eye, but what's really beautiful is what appeals to the soul, an excellent entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Yes indeed, if we are to define true beauty, it's not the beauty of youth, that is pleasing to the eye, but what's really beautiful is what appeals to the soul, an excellent entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Thank you,Roy. I appreciate your review.
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A pleasure
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, The Jewels of Health and Love, has the proper formatting and acknowledges that if you have your health and someone to love, in the end, that's what it's all about.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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This 5-7-5, The Jewels of Health and Love, has the proper formatting and acknowledges that if you have your health and someone to love, in the end, that's what it's all about.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Thank you Bill for your kind words.
Comment from Frank Malley
The gorgeous photo of a jeweled crown that sits above this 17 syllable poem is captivating, but it has political resonances that are perhaps at odds with the celebration of precious jewels with which "we are rich." 'Rare precious jewels' is a common linking of three words, and brings no kiss of new recognition to this poem; however, this noun phrase does dutifully describe a crown, which is even in the Twenty-first Century a symbol of power. "The Jewels of health and love" is a title to ponder: jewels do certify love, but do they in any way certify health? Since the title is free of syllabic restrictions, wouldn't 'splendor' be a better word than 'health'?
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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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The gorgeous photo of a jeweled crown that sits above this 17 syllable poem is captivating, but it has political resonances that are perhaps at odds with the celebration of precious jewels with which "we are rich." 'Rare precious jewels' is a common linking of three words, and brings no kiss of new recognition to this poem; however, this noun phrase does dutifully describe a crown, which is even in the Twenty-first Century a symbol of power. "The Jewels of health and love" is a title to ponder: jewels do certify love, but do they in any way certify health? Since the title is free of syllabic restrictions, wouldn't 'splendor' be a better word than 'health'?
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Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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The poem us not political and has nothing to do with power or politics. The theme is 'I love' and what I love and appreciate above all else are two things: that I am loved and have good health. Precious and rare. Like jewels, both of them. We are not rich because we have jewels; we are rich if we have love and health. There is a hint to a Biblical reference of these being like a "crown" in old age. Hence 'splendour' would nit be at all appropriate for what I was saying. Thanks for taking the time to review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Yes the real jewels in life are our health and love as we take these with us when we die and leave our personal possessions behind, a fine write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Yes the real jewels in life are our health and love as we take these with us when we die and leave our personal possessions behind, a fine write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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I am glad ou enjoyed this one. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good 5-7-5 poem on what you love. The text is a great size. However, the font selected does not fit the elegance of your message. The message is clearly stated and is one that I and many others know the importance of having especially as we age. Your visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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This is a good 5-7-5 poem on what you love. The text is a great size. However, the font selected does not fit the elegance of your message. The message is clearly stated and is one that I and many others know the importance of having especially as we age. Your visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your fine review, and the suggestion about the font. Always appreciated.
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Bingo the text elegance matches the font. You are welcome.
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Thanks, Sandra
