Magic of Snow
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Comment from Douglas Goff
Yes, it has finally come hasn't . I thought that we were going to skip a winter, but alas, it was a foolish notion
Nice work on this Faith. I think you have a good entry for the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Yes, it has finally come hasn't . I thought that we were going to skip a winter, but alas, it was a foolish notion
Nice work on this Faith. I think you have a good entry for the contest!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Happy Thanksgiving!
Comment from dragonpoet
It is true that you get a feeling of serenity when looking out over newly fallen snow.
You use line breaks well in this short free verse poem.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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It is true that you get a feeling of serenity when looking out over newly fallen snow.
You use line breaks well in this short free verse poem.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Happy Thanksgiving!
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Don't mention it, Faith.
Happy Thanksgiving
Joan
Comment from zanya
Yes this 5-7-5 captures that perennial, seasonal event - the fall of first snowflakes and their initial impact 'cover the world in quiet'-and what a superb pic to illustrate
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Yes this 5-7-5 captures that perennial, seasonal event - the fall of first snowflakes and their initial impact 'cover the world in quiet'-and what a superb pic to illustrate
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind words and the six stars! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
For sure
i wish it would snow sometimes in my brain but then I'd miss the promptings of the spirit perhaps which would be a mistake. ..............................................
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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For sure
i wish it would snow sometimes in my brain but then I'd miss the promptings of the spirit perhaps which would be a mistake. ..............................................
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Maybe all that quiet would actually allow for better hearing of the spirit because the snow would drown out all that other noise.
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. Happy Thanksgiving!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation, Faith.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery paints a good word picture
of the wintry scene.
-You also create a peaceful mood.
A good concluding line, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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-Very nice image and presentation, Faith.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery paints a good word picture
of the wintry scene.
-You also create a peaceful mood.
A good concluding line, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Happy Thanksgiving!
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You are very welcome, and Happy Thanksgiving to you, too!
Comment from Wendy G
When I first saw snow (in my twenties), it was the silence which struck me most forcibly. Everything was eerily quiet, and quite magical. As you say, that special time doesn't last. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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When I first saw snow (in my twenties), it was the silence which struck me most forcibly. Everything was eerily quiet, and quite magical. As you say, that special time doesn't last. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 22-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Hmm... snow is amazing! And extremely annoying to shovel. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is what I love most about the snow, it is the silence and the muffled sounds as noise does not travel so well when there is snow on the ground, words of truth here Faith, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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This is what I love most about the snow, it is the silence and the muffled sounds as noise does not travel so well when there is snow on the ground, words of truth here Faith, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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So glad you enjoyed it, Dolly. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
Comment from Brian Craycroft
nice. "cover the world in quiet" is a decent line.
i'd also stay away from anything cliche, like "blankets of snowfall", anything like that has been used to death, and is poetically unsatisfying. maybe something like "three nights of snowfall // ensilence her world in white"
i'd also work on the last line, another bit of a cliche, "for a time" is played out. the sentiment is good, but the phrase could be more creative.
nice work!
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nice. "cover the world in quiet" is a decent line.
i'd also stay away from anything cliche, like "blankets of snowfall", anything like that has been used to death, and is poetically unsatisfying. maybe something like "three nights of snowfall // ensilence her world in white"
i'd also work on the last line, another bit of a cliche, "for a time" is played out. the sentiment is good, but the phrase could be more creative.
nice work!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2022
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a beautifully stated 5-7-5 poem. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated. The unspoken thought is that the respite from the noisy world is NEVER lasting. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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This is a beautifully stated 5-7-5 poem. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated. The unspoken thought is that the respite from the noisy world is NEVER lasting. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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I always appreciate your thoughts. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Happy Thanksgiving!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a 5/7/5 Contest Entry about snow.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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This is a 5/7/5 Contest Entry about snow.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 22-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Happy Thanksgiving!
