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Frigid Park Bench

4/6/7/7/6 Kakekotoba

8 total reviews 
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your poem - excellent picture presentation - so very accurate and sad. So many old lonely people with no outlets or resources. Tempting to try and make things right for them but a mistake to think you can, especially these days - I meet them everyday and count my blessing. Good job

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2022

reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy Word Weaver
Comment from karenina
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So nice to be back on site and reading you! I do love this one...that aha moment is quite the double back to the "frigid park bench" ~~ As ever, your presentation is lovely, and your forms are flawless. Far too many older folks are "invisible) these days.

Happy Thanksgiving!

Karenina

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2022

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
    Karenina, it's so good to hear from you. I miss you when you are not around.

    Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

    Happy Thanksgiving!!!

    Gypsy hugs

reply by karenina on 21-Nov-2022
    I miss you too! It's nice to be able to get back!
Comment from Barbara Peabody Pouliot
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I love this one. Beautifully written. You always seem to know exactly how to illustrate and deliver a valuable message
Thank you for sharing
Good Luck
Write On

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2022

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
    Thank you very much, Barbara. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review. Have a great week.

    Gypsy Word Weaver
reply by Barbara Peabody Pouliot on 21-Nov-2022
    YW
Comment from lyenochka
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He needs to wear a fake Bluetooth earpiece so that he will appear as normal. I like how you show that the old man is cold inside and out because of the cold bench and the cold people who don't see how lonely he is.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2022

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
    LoL the blue tooth idea is funny but true. He talks to himself because nobody else does.

    Thank you very much, big sister. Love you.

    Gypsy Word Weaver
Comment from Mrs. KT
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Such is the state of affairs for many individuals today - living but not being seen... So very tragic.
Wonderful format.

Thank you for sharing!
diane

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2022

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
    Thank you very much, Diane. Have a great week.

    Gypsy Word Weaver
Comment from Mike Stevens
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Another fine poem, Gypsy----an absolute embarrassement the way we treat the homeless; another tratment that reflects the mind set that gave us, and glorified, Trump

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2022

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
    Thank you very much, Mike.

    Gypsy Word Weaver
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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The KAKEKOTOBA POEM looks like an extremely complex affair to me. I think I will consider hard before I attempt it for myself, but I very much enjoyed reading yours. Kate xx

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2022

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
    It sounds harder than it is. It's similar to tanka, written in 31 syllables or less in one to five lines. You need a satori, an aha! Phrase at the end that makes the reader think about the double meaning of the poem. You can use any poetic device and an attractive presentation.

    I get what you mean. I can't write sonnets...any rhyme metered kind of poem. It sounds very complicated and analytical to me.

    Thank you very much, Kate.

    Gypsy Word Weaver
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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This poem made me sad because I feel we ignore our elderly way too much. They are a wealth of wisdom and deserve to be treated with nothing but respect. Thank you for sharing this with us.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2022

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
    Yes, you are right and you got the meaning of my poem right.


    Thank you very much, Barbara.

    Gypsy Word Weaver