The Conversation
Having a good conversation can be extremely rare these days.4 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Firstly, congratulations on your first post. Welcome to the site, and I hope you enjoy it. Secondly, let me commend you on your writing. I could sense it was autobiographical, but the first part also described me (but with a different career). I heartily concur about the lost skill of conversing. Well done. Here you have a forum where people will enjoy your work, and offer constructive criticism, and I am sure you will do the same for them.
Thanks for sharing.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Firstly, congratulations on your first post. Welcome to the site, and I hope you enjoy it. Secondly, let me commend you on your writing. I could sense it was autobiographical, but the first part also described me (but with a different career). I heartily concur about the lost skill of conversing. Well done. Here you have a forum where people will enjoy your work, and offer constructive criticism, and I am sure you will do the same for them.
Thanks for sharing.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much, Wendy. I will definitely begin reviewing other works. This seems like a great forum.
Comment from irishauthorme
Hi, Jim, and welcome to FanStory.
I have been here a while but am still an amateur. Not a grammar expert but spotted places where the FS transporter stuffed many a's and question marks into your narrative, you can edit them out.
Good story and Bob and Irene were an interesting couple.
Neat ending, amusing and intriguing.
Many great writers here, and mostly considerate, helpful reviewers, but some nitpickers and some better-than-anybody.
Enjoyed your work!
irish
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Hi, Jim, and welcome to FanStory.
I have been here a while but am still an amateur. Not a grammar expert but spotted places where the FS transporter stuffed many a's and question marks into your narrative, you can edit them out.
Good story and Bob and Irene were an interesting couple.
Neat ending, amusing and intriguing.
Many great writers here, and mostly considerate, helpful reviewers, but some nitpickers and some better-than-anybody.
Enjoyed your work!
irish
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Thanks very much, irish. I took your advice and edited them out.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Congratulations on your milestone post. I loved the twist at the end where his best conversation was with himself. That tends to reinforce the idea that most people are rather self-centered and love to hear themselves talk!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Congratulations on your milestone post. I loved the twist at the end where his best conversation was with himself. That tends to reinforce the idea that most people are rather self-centered and love to hear themselves talk!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Yes they do from my experience. Thanks for the good review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Welcome to Fanstory! Very good writing .
good at it, but it was pretty dry stuffĂ¢?"no real creativity to it.
(Something happened there after the word stuff)
characters. Of course, you can't be completely realisticĂ¢?"with all
(Spacing and an 'a' after realistic)
"Well, this has been fascinatingĂ¢?"the most enjoyable conversation I've had all night. I wish now I hadn't wasted my time in there, but I guess if you don't talk to people, you never learn anything."
(Extra letter issues)
Good story. Maybe a computer issue with the odd symbols! Good story.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Welcome to Fanstory! Very good writing .
good at it, but it was pretty dry stuffĂ¢?"no real creativity to it.
(Something happened there after the word stuff)
characters. Of course, you can't be completely realisticĂ¢?"with all
(Spacing and an 'a' after realistic)
"Well, this has been fascinatingĂ¢?"the most enjoyable conversation I've had all night. I wish now I hadn't wasted my time in there, but I guess if you don't talk to people, you never learn anything."
(Extra letter issues)
Good story. Maybe a computer issue with the odd symbols! Good story.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Thanks for your good review and for pointing out the extraneous characters. I have since edited them out.
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Good work, Jim!
