Children
Having children is a joy that has enormous responsibilities.3 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a well-written rhyming acrostic. The text is a great size. Each line gives a reason why you feel it is important to do your best as a parent for children. I am glad you made the vertical word a different color so that it stands out.
I would expand the poem box. Drop the first line down one space. Go to the end of the last word and hit enter two or three times. Now your poem box will be larger. Your visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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This is a well-written rhyming acrostic. The text is a great size. Each line gives a reason why you feel it is important to do your best as a parent for children. I am glad you made the vertical word a different color so that it stands out.
I would expand the poem box. Drop the first line down one space. Go to the end of the last word and hit enter two or three times. Now your poem box will be larger. Your visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Thanks for the read and encouraging feedback. I will try your suggestions.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Aiona
I like this poem so much. It makes me wanna go hug my kids. I love that it rhymes. I like and admire poetry with rhyming lines or even internal rhyme. And the fact that it's also an acrostic shows even more skill.
Two lines however seemed a little awkward:
"Development of moral character, parents should role modeled
Render love and care but careful not to mollycoddled"
I think the parents "role model" whereas the kids are "role modeled."
And the second line needs "be" after "to" in order to be grammatically correct.
But to be semantically correct, I think both lines would work better and still rhyme, if they were
"Development of moral character, parents should ROLE MODEL"
Render love and care but careful not to MOLLYCODDLE."
Gonna go hug my kids now!
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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I like this poem so much. It makes me wanna go hug my kids. I love that it rhymes. I like and admire poetry with rhyming lines or even internal rhyme. And the fact that it's also an acrostic shows even more skill.
Two lines however seemed a little awkward:
"Development of moral character, parents should role modeled
Render love and care but careful not to mollycoddled"
I think the parents "role model" whereas the kids are "role modeled."
And the second line needs "be" after "to" in order to be grammatically correct.
But to be semantically correct, I think both lines would work better and still rhyme, if they were
"Development of moral character, parents should ROLE MODEL"
Render love and care but careful not to MOLLYCODDLE."
Gonna go hug my kids now!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Thanks for the suggestions. Makes more sense. I will incorporate. I'm sure they will appreciate your hug.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very lovely and well written acrostic poem about raising your children and the love you have for them and your wife. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery from the picture you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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This is a very lovely and well written acrostic poem about raising your children and the love you have for them and your wife. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery from the picture you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the read and encouraging feedback. Nice family pic.
