Tanka Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 70 "Broken Heart"Romantic Tanka Poems
16 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A melancholy remembrance of someone lost to war here and the wave of grief comes whenever we recall those memories, an emotional write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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A melancholy remembrance of someone lost to war here and the wave of grief comes whenever we recall those memories, an emotional write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Thank you, dolly, I appreciate your kind review and helpfull feedback. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Hi, Gypsy.
This is an excellent Tanka poem. It is about heartache and our fragile footprints--we only have a short time to put our mark on the world.
Nice presentation, Gypsy. Thank you for the informative author's notes. Good luck.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Hi, Gypsy.
This is an excellent Tanka poem. It is about heartache and our fragile footprints--we only have a short time to put our mark on the world.
Nice presentation, Gypsy. Thank you for the informative author's notes. Good luck.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy Word Weaver
Art is the language of the heart and soul
Comment from Tom Horonzy
You know I know you have a way with words so I daringly need to ask why "red" poppies instead of the orange the second line is colored with? ....................................
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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You know I know you have a way with words so I daringly need to ask why "red" poppies instead of the orange the second line is colored with? ....................................
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy Word Weaver
Art is the language of the heart and soul
Comment from Eternal Muse
Gypsy, this is gorgeous. I recognize your touch of a master. The imagery, visuals and artistic presentation of your tanka hit the roof. I love red poppies and this was a treat for me.
Just beautiful.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Gypsy, this is gorgeous. I recognize your touch of a master. The imagery, visuals and artistic presentation of your tanka hit the roof. I love red poppies and this was a treat for me.
Just beautiful.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review, and kind words.
Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Absolutely beautiful presentation. The Different colours for the fonts on the black background looks amazing. The photo poppies in Flanders fields compliments your poem. Beautifully done.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Absolutely beautiful presentation. The Different colours for the fonts on the black background looks amazing. The photo poppies in Flanders fields compliments your poem. Beautifully done.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the exceptional six stars review and kind words. I appreciate your time and feedback. Have a lovely day.
Gypsy Word Weaver
Art is the language of the heart
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm curious why Tanka poems are mostly written by women. I doubt there's an answer, just curious. Anyway, I enjoyed this complete poetic package. The field of poppies is beautiful as is your poem and the way you used the colored font.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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I'm curious why Tanka poems are mostly written by women. I doubt there's an answer, just curious. Anyway, I enjoyed this complete poetic package. The field of poppies is beautiful as is your poem and the way you used the colored font.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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I think women are more atune to their feelings and passion. Tanka is all about that.
With haiku it's different. Haiku master, Matsuo Basho was the creator of haiku and is considered the best. Men are visual creatures. (*+*)
Why don't you join our clubs, you learn alot and there's no requirement. You only write when you want to and you are welcomed to send me drafts for feedback before you post.
Thank you for the excellent review and kind words. I appreciate your time and feedback. Have a lovely day.
Gypsy Word Weaver
Art is the language of the heart
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Once when I tried poetry I was told it read like a grocery list. I have only attempted it a few times since, but I feel they read like a child wrote it.
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It's important to join the first two lines grammatically so the poem flows better. At end of the second line you add a dash to pause before the satori (enlightens, aha! Moment)
For example
LIKE A LIST.....
sunlight through the trees
creek meanders around rocks
smooth summer song
CONNECTED....
sunlight through the trees
shines on creek and smooth rocks --
summer song
Thank you!
Gypsy
Haiku don't have to be 5-7-5 because English syllables are different than
Japanese syllables
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Thank you for the help. If it's all right I might try one privately to you and see.
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Yes, of course
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Beautifully worded Tanka. There is an elegant sadness about this poem. It reminds me of D-Day and all the soldiers who gave their lives at Normandy. The D-Day Memorial is in my hometown because we lost the most soldiers that day per capita. Thanks for sharing. Wonderful presentation per usual.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Beautifully worded Tanka. There is an elegant sadness about this poem. It reminds me of D-Day and all the soldiers who gave their lives at Normandy. The D-Day Memorial is in my hometown because we lost the most soldiers that day per capita. Thanks for sharing. Wonderful presentation per usual.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Ms Sandy
I didn't know that, thank you. The poem applies to any kind of grief. I'm happy you could relate.
Thank you for the excellent review and kind words. I appreciate your time and feedback. Have a lovely day.
Gypsy Word Weaver
Art is the language of the heart
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You are welcome. I love your writing.
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I love your writing too (*÷*)
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I love your writing too (*÷*)
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Thanks, Ms. Gypsy!
Comment from Celyn
This is beautiful poem that conjures up many memories of beach walks, but also contains a lot of broken hearted emotion - well done.
I love the idea of hourglass sand and the colour changes in the font add just a bit extra too. You write excellent Haiku's and Tanka's.
Celyn
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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This is beautiful poem that conjures up many memories of beach walks, but also contains a lot of broken hearted emotion - well done.
I love the idea of hourglass sand and the colour changes in the font add just a bit extra too. You write excellent Haiku's and Tanka's.
Celyn
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the exceptional six stars review and kind words. I appreciate your time and feedback. Have a lovely day.
Gypsy Word Weaver
Art is the language of the heart
Comment from Zue65
I enjoyed reading your poem, made more interesting visually with a black background, bed of flowers and colorful fonts. Tanka is also one poetical form I do enjoy reading and the poet did it well. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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I enjoyed reading your poem, made more interesting visually with a black background, bed of flowers and colorful fonts. Tanka is also one poetical form I do enjoy reading and the poet did it well. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the excellent review and kind words. I appreciate your time and feedback. Have a lovely day.
Gypsy Word Weaver
Art is the language of the heart
Comment from royowen
Another one of your outstanding short form poems, I'm a little in awe of your ability with these mighty posts, this is no exception Gypsy, an excellent post and a great theme, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Another one of your outstanding short form poems, I'm a little in awe of your ability with these mighty posts, this is no exception Gypsy, an excellent post and a great theme, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the excellent review and kind words. I appreciate your time and feedback. Have a lovely day.
Gypsy Word Weaver
Art is the language of the heart