Kitchen Tattles
A 575 poem on women's penchant for nasty rumors.19 total reviews
Comment from royowen
There's nothing like a burnt chop or an overdone sausage or snag, with the tomato sauce running down one's chin, such joy, I suppose one could term it "orgasmic" bur nevertheless, beautifully written entry, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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There's nothing like a burnt chop or an overdone sausage or snag, with the tomato sauce running down one's chin, such joy, I suppose one could term it "orgasmic" bur nevertheless, beautifully written entry, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks for the five stars Roy. God bless you more.
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Welcome
Comment from JoannaN
This poem reminds me of one of my favourite tv series, namely Desperate Housewives. The protagonists used to spend a great part of their time organizing parties and barbecue, and one of the greatest pastime of their lives was gossiping :) I like the phrase "barbecued gossips".
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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This poem reminds me of one of my favourite tv series, namely Desperate Housewives. The protagonists used to spend a great part of their time organizing parties and barbecue, and one of the greatest pastime of their lives was gossiping :) I like the phrase "barbecued gossips".
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks a lot for the five stars. I appreciate it a lot. God bless.
Comment from Ulla
It's probably true in many cases, but not something I had taken part of really. I liked your poem and I can only feel sorry for those who have nothing else to do. All best,
Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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It's probably true in many cases, but not something I had taken part of really. I liked your poem and I can only feel sorry for those who have nothing else to do. All best,
Ulla:)))
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks a lot Ulla for dropping by and the five stars. God bless you more. Susan
Comment from Douglas Goff
The end notes definitely explained the word orgasm, because I was clueless. I was thinking "Carnivores getting luck tonight!"
Great photo and coloring. Now that I get it, this is very unique and funny
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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The end notes definitely explained the word orgasm, because I was clueless. I was thinking "Carnivores getting luck tonight!"
Great photo and coloring. Now that I get it, this is very unique and funny
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks for appreciating the pun intended in this little poem. I appreciate the five stars. God bless.
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You are very funny. Nice writing!
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a 5/7/5 Poem about woman telling stories of no regard or regret
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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This is a 5/7/5 Poem about woman telling stories of no regard or regret
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks again Doctor Ricky. Reviewing my poem is more than enough and the five stars is a bonus.
Comment from Frank Malley
"Kitchen Tattles" could be named something better; maybe "Hot Red Cutlets" would work, although it may be too suggestive. And the poets explanation names gossip at a barbecue as its topic, but it isn't addressed in this 5-7-5 poem. I think the poet failed to think through her central function in this poem.
I think line 2 would be better as " weave cutlets to orgasm." And for line 3, 'barbecued mouthfuls,' keeping the sexual overtones more present, and sacrificing the somewhat incomprehensible "gossips." I think the author needed to think more carefully about what she wished to accomplish. This poem highlights barbecued food, not the guests who enjoy it. But - that topic is certainly doable:
Sizzling meats each/skewered on rigid bamboo/ Spur non-food comments.
This one doesn't really suggest gossip adequately; maybe 'Spur guest wives comments.'
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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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"Kitchen Tattles" could be named something better; maybe "Hot Red Cutlets" would work, although it may be too suggestive. And the poets explanation names gossip at a barbecue as its topic, but it isn't addressed in this 5-7-5 poem. I think the poet failed to think through her central function in this poem.
I think line 2 would be better as " weave cutlets to orgasm." And for line 3, 'barbecued mouthfuls,' keeping the sexual overtones more present, and sacrificing the somewhat incomprehensible "gossips." I think the author needed to think more carefully about what she wished to accomplish. This poem highlights barbecued food, not the guests who enjoy it. But - that topic is certainly doable:
Sizzling meats each/skewered on rigid bamboo/ Spur non-food comments.
This one doesn't really suggest gossip adequately; maybe 'Spur guest wives comments.'
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Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks for the perceptive review. I appreciate them and will consider some editing soon.
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Be well, Nassus. Frank
Comment from Begin Again
I would hope that most fun gatherings are among good friends and not the neighborhood gossips, but I do understand that this world is filled with all kinds. Your words described the saddest version but it accomplished it well.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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I would hope that most fun gatherings are among good friends and not the neighborhood gossips, but I do understand that this world is filled with all kinds. Your words described the saddest version but it accomplished it well.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks a lot Carol for reviewing my poem and thanks too, for the five stars. God bless.
Comment from Wendy G
I guess some do, but fortunately most barbecues here are fun family events. Nevertheless your words are carefully chosen to incorporate your theme, and you have done it effectively.
Wendy
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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I guess some do, but fortunately most barbecues here are fun family events. Nevertheless your words are carefully chosen to incorporate your theme, and you have done it effectively.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks a lot Wendy for dropping by and the five stars too. God bless.
Comment from Sally Law
I wouldn't know. All my neighbors are too old to cheat on anything but their taxes. A fun on in short verse poetry. Good to see you writing! Sending you my best today as always
Sal XOs
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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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I wouldn't know. All my neighbors are too old to cheat on anything but their taxes. A fun on in short verse poetry. Good to see you writing! Sending you my best today as always
Sal XOs
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Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks a lot Sally for dropping by and the five stars too. God bless you more.
