Victorian Matchstick Girl
A quatern for the picture this club14 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well written quatern about how a poor girl wishes to live in an English manor house and be able to go to bed at a reasonable hour and be comfortable while sleeping. The last stanza gives hope of this happening in the near future.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Happy Holidays
Joan
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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This is a well written quatern about how a poor girl wishes to live in an English manor house and be able to go to bed at a reasonable hour and be comfortable while sleeping. The last stanza gives hope of this happening in the near future.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Happy Holidays
Joan
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2022
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Thank you for sharing your insights. I?m happy this poem resonated with you. I was pleasantly surprised that it placed at all! I appreciate your taking the time to read it.
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No problem, June. It is what we are here to do.
Joan
Comment from Sherry SG
A beautifully written poem about a real issue. I was moved by your writing, and even though the issue you describe is more than a century old, it's still pertinent to our times where exploitation still exists in all its varied forms -- cocoa plantations, coffee plantations, precious metal mines for smart phones... the list is endless!
I'm happy to see your writing nominated for Poem of the Month - most writing appreciated or awarded on this forum seems to be of a flippant nature, so I do hope your entry will win this time. Good luck.
My first 6 stars of the week to you! Have a great week ahead.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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A beautifully written poem about a real issue. I was moved by your writing, and even though the issue you describe is more than a century old, it's still pertinent to our times where exploitation still exists in all its varied forms -- cocoa plantations, coffee plantations, precious metal mines for smart phones... the list is endless!
I'm happy to see your writing nominated for Poem of the Month - most writing appreciated or awarded on this forum seems to be of a flippant nature, so I do hope your entry will win this time. Good luck.
My first 6 stars of the week to you! Have a great week ahead.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2022
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I do appreciate your feedback as well as the generous rating! I?m afraid my writing on this site is not that popular and was surprised to see this one nominated. As you said, the type that win are not serious in nature and are based often on friendships.
Comment from Marienkiefer
A well written poem on social conditions and child labour. So very interesting to read your authors notes that provide great insight and historical reference to your poem.
Sparkling in this poem:
-Use of refrain that read both as an appeal and a lament.
-Symbolism and imagery to convey plight of the working class and economic disparities.
My favourite line: regarding moon as the constant friend, that seems to be casting light on the situation while at the same time depicting safety, guidance and perhaps future aspirations for betterment.
A pleasure to read and review your work. I enjoyed your poem.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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A well written poem on social conditions and child labour. So very interesting to read your authors notes that provide great insight and historical reference to your poem.
Sparkling in this poem:
-Use of refrain that read both as an appeal and a lament.
-Symbolism and imagery to convey plight of the working class and economic disparities.
My favourite line: regarding moon as the constant friend, that seems to be casting light on the situation while at the same time depicting safety, guidance and perhaps future aspirations for betterment.
A pleasure to read and review your work. I enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your insightful feedback. I'm glad this poem resonated with you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Little Matchstick Girl, presented with four rhyming quatrains, gives the readers a glimpse, through the eyes of a child, the use of children in hazardous jobs in the nineteenth century.
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This poem, Little Matchstick Girl, presented with four rhyming quatrains, gives the readers a glimpse, through the eyes of a child, the use of children in hazardous jobs in the nineteenth century.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The sad thing about your fine words is that this is all true and children used to work like this June. I had no idea that this gave these children cancer. A skilful write June, well chosen words with a chilling sentiment, a fine poem for the club, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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The sad thing about your fine words is that this is all true and children used to work like this June. I had no idea that this gave these children cancer. A skilful write June, well chosen words with a chilling sentiment, a fine poem for the club, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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I?m glad this piece resonated with you. The reality of work conditions back then is heartbreaking. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and insights.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did an awesome job with your poem for the club,
June. Your presentation was great--the color scheme,
the rhymes, the smooth flow, and most importantly the
message that was related to your them and expressed in
your notes. It's amazing how little young kids were treated
then. Thankfully, laws were passed to prevent the abuse.
Thanks for participating, Jan
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You did an awesome job with your poem for the club,
June. Your presentation was great--the color scheme,
the rhymes, the smooth flow, and most importantly the
message that was related to your them and expressed in
your notes. It's amazing how little young kids were treated
then. Thankfully, laws were passed to prevent the abuse.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
Comment from BethShelby
This is a beautiful poem about those children who were forced to work long hours into the night so they could bring in a small income. I'm sure ignorance kept people from knowing how dangerous phosphorus was for those who worked with it.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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This is a beautiful poem about those children who were forced to work long hours into the night so they could bring in a small income. I'm sure ignorance kept people from knowing how dangerous phosphorus was for those who worked with it.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this piece. I appreciate your empathetic feedback.
Comment from country ranch writer
Nice piece glad kaws we passed regarding workers. Where were the rules when we were growing up working till the break of dawn doing it all over again day by day.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Nice piece glad kaws we passed regarding workers. Where were the rules when we were growing up working till the break of dawn doing it all over again day by day.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this piece. I appreciate your empathetic feedback.
Comment from royowen
The thing that struck was the story of the death of the little girl who died selling matches in the winter snow. This is an excellent quatern, written with the skill of a poetic technician, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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The thing that struck was the story of the death of the little girl who died selling matches in the winter snow. This is an excellent quatern, written with the skill of a poetic technician, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this piece. I appreciate your empathetic feedback.
Comment from Celyn
I love this poem and, in particular, the way you have repeated your first line in every stanza but in a different place each time. The poem conjures up images of a factory girl walking home late at night after a hard day's work so it goes very well with the picture. Well done
Celyn
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I love this poem and, in particular, the way you have repeated your first line in every stanza but in a different place each time. The poem conjures up images of a factory girl walking home late at night after a hard day's work so it goes very well with the picture. Well done
Celyn
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
