The Story Continues
A rhyming quatrain18 total reviews
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A simple, sincere account of the Nativity story. It captures St Luke's straightforward mood in his gospel. The sense of poverty and a child born in a manger is so relevant today.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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A simple, sincere account of the Nativity story. It captures St Luke's straightforward mood in his gospel. The sense of poverty and a child born in a manger is so relevant today.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read this poem.
Comment from Eternal Muse
A lovely and well presented Christmas poem. I like the aura of Christmas magic present and your imagery, visuals and artistic presentation.
I enjoyed your rhyming and flow. A very well chosen artwork to complement the poem. A wish you a lot of luck in the contest, it should do very well.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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A lovely and well presented Christmas poem. I like the aura of Christmas magic present and your imagery, visuals and artistic presentation.
I enjoyed your rhyming and flow. A very well chosen artwork to complement the poem. A wish you a lot of luck in the contest, it should do very well.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Wendy G
A beautiful entry for the Christmas poem contest. It flows smoothly, and you have rhymed it successfully. My only suggestion is to change "was to conceive the Son of God" to "had conceived the Son of God", as she already had conceived Him and was ready to give birth. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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A beautiful entry for the Christmas poem contest. It flows smoothly, and you have rhymed it successfully. My only suggestion is to change "was to conceive the Son of God" to "had conceived the Son of God", as she already had conceived Him and was ready to give birth. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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You are so very correct thanks Wendy
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, The Story Continues, presented in five rhyming quatrains brings us to the season and the annual remembrance of the birth of mankind's redeemer.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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This poem, The Story Continues, presented in five rhyming quatrains brings us to the season and the annual remembrance of the birth of mankind's redeemer.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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thanks fpr taking the time to read and comment!
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a flowing abab quatrain poem that tells the story retold every year at this time. It is the story of Jesus's birth and how the world visited the stable and how believers try to get close to Him with praise and thanks.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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This is a flowing abab quatrain poem that tells the story retold every year at this time. It is the story of Jesus's birth and how the world visited the stable and how believers try to get close to Him with praise and thanks.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Joan, thanks!
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No problem, Jim.
Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An early Christmas poem about the nativity here and I enjoyed the sentiments and rhymes. We have decorations up in my town already and the spirit of Christmas is very much inside our words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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An early Christmas poem about the nativity here and I enjoyed the sentiments and rhymes. We have decorations up in my town already and the spirit of Christmas is very much inside our words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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The season is fast approaching. We will put the Christmas tree and lights Thanksgiving weekend, my favorite holiday nears soon.
Comment from Zue65
The story about Jesus' birth never gets old through the ages and will never will. I won't get tired reading about our Messiah, and I thank you for sharing with us a poem celebrating how great our Lord is. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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The story about Jesus' birth never gets old through the ages and will never will. I won't get tired reading about our Messiah, and I thank you for sharing with us a poem celebrating how great our Lord is. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you for this wonderful validation.
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
The Christmas story never gets old. It was a nice retelling. The rhyming was solid. I had to read it a few times to find the rhythm. If you'd like to try make the reader's job a little easier, consider cutting/adding syllables to create a more consistent meter among the lines. The poem's form is similar to a sonnet, so I think I went into it with an expectation that every line would have the same number of beats, which may be more on me than you.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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The Christmas story never gets old. It was a nice retelling. The rhyming was solid. I had to read it a few times to find the rhythm. If you'd like to try make the reader's job a little easier, consider cutting/adding syllables to create a more consistent meter among the lines. The poem's form is similar to a sonnet, so I think I went into it with an expectation that every line would have the same number of beats, which may be more on me than you.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Great input Charles.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Christian story retold. As I was reading your words I was listening to music of Silent Night. Thank you for sharing with us. Great words and imagery. Best wishes in the Christmas Poetry contest. Teri
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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This is a very well written Christian story retold. As I was reading your words I was listening to music of Silent Night. Thank you for sharing with us. Great words and imagery. Best wishes in the Christmas Poetry contest. Teri
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thanks Teri.
Comment from lyenochka
This is perfect for the Christmas poetry contest. What I liked most about the poem is how it starts in the first stanza without naming Mary and Joseph but a "small procession" and the "pregnant bride." Then you reveal who it is in the second stanza and then cover the star and Epiphany, too. Then the final stanza takes a step back to the present and how the whole Christmas story affect us over the millennia...Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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This is perfect for the Christmas poetry contest. What I liked most about the poem is how it starts in the first stanza without naming Mary and Joseph but a "small procession" and the "pregnant bride." Then you reveal who it is in the second stanza and then cover the star and Epiphany, too. Then the final stanza takes a step back to the present and how the whole Christmas story affect us over the millennia...Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your kind validation and good wishes
