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The Sun

Relative motion

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Comment from Gloria ....
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So scientifically true, and I suppose we should develop poetic language to more aptly express the motion.

Just one point, your line one and three both have six syllables, and the contest requires five.

An easy repair I am sure, so much luck to you with the Committee.

Gloria

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022

reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
    Thank you so much, Gloria, for pointing out my syllable error. I have now corrected it.
Comment from Julie G1
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Well done. The imagery conveyed in this poem is clear and concise. This reader enjoyed your choice of language. The graphic also was effective and worked well. I hope you keep on composing such verse.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022

reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
    Your kind review is boosting.!Thank you so much. I did , however, make an error in syllable count and have since rewritten my piece.
Comment from Barbara Peabody Pouliot
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Ooo I love this. Great perception revealed with so few words.
Beautiful illustration to compliment.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep Writing and Sharing
GoodLuck
Please look for my new release tomorrow/ my B day, tried to write something special! It will not be entered in a contest. Just wrote it for fun

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022

reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
    Your lovely review is enhancing. Thank you.
    However, as someone pointed out, my syllable count in lines 1 and 3 is six instead of five. I have corrected this.
    I will look for your post xx