First Winter Storm
It will be coming soon.27 total reviews
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a very vividly written poem. I live on the Outer banks of North Carolina. We are very familiar with noreasters. I could picture the waves and the relentless winds whipping sand and leaves through the air. Your poem was electric and moving. Well done. Gretchen
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This was a very vividly written poem. I live on the Outer banks of North Carolina. We are very familiar with noreasters. I could picture the waves and the relentless winds whipping sand and leaves through the air. Your poem was electric and moving. Well done. Gretchen
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much, Gretchen, for the marvelous praise of my poem.
Comment from Marienkiefer
Snow abounds in this winter wonderland.
Sparkling in you writing:
- Wonderfully written, glorious manifestations of snow. Unique expressions and word play.
It is a pleasure for me to read and review your work.
I enjoyed the scenes spotlighted and scenic beauty created.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Snow abounds in this winter wonderland.
Sparkling in you writing:
- Wonderfully written, glorious manifestations of snow. Unique expressions and word play.
It is a pleasure for me to read and review your work.
I enjoyed the scenes spotlighted and scenic beauty created.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Marien, for the marvelous review of my snow poem. I truly appreciate your high praise.
Comment from Moonbeams Musings 55
Your words paint such a picture of winter's storm that I feel the chill. Your drawing brings back childhood memories of growing up in the Northeast. I enjoyed this poem. Good luck in the contest.
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Your words paint such a picture of winter's storm that I feel the chill. Your drawing brings back childhood memories of growing up in the Northeast. I enjoyed this poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much, Moonbeams. I am delighted you enjoyed my poem and that it brought back memories.
Comment from zanya
These beautiful stanzas instil a sense of pending winter chills which will soon be here - some exquisite imagery 'Ma Nature's homespun quilt' a seasonal reminder
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These beautiful stanzas instil a sense of pending winter chills which will soon be here - some exquisite imagery 'Ma Nature's homespun quilt' a seasonal reminder
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Oh, zanya, thank you so much for your wonderful praise of my Storm poem and all those bright stars. I am especially pleased you love the imagery.
Comment from Sally Law
Yes, it is. In some places, it has already arrived. Possibly a white Thanksgiving? A beautifully penned and illustrated poem in rhyming form. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
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Yes, it is. In some places, it has already arrived. Possibly a white Thanksgiving? A beautifully penned and illustrated poem in rhyming form. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Hi, Sally! Thanks so much for your very kind praise of my Storm poem and your best wishes.
Comment from Frank Malley
Since this poem, "First Winter Storm," is entered in a rhyming contest, I need to keep my attention a bit focused on its rhymes. It turns out these alternating rhymes are skillful and often a bit unusual. The whole poem reads well and makes sense readily: this is about a coastal town which is not perturbed by storms because it has weathered so many. There are a few choices I might work differently; for line ten I would write "till heaped like dunes around human abodes." Not a big difference; this is an exceptional and skillful poem.
I had an unusual insight as I considered this poem. It seemed to me that its ambiance and sense might work better if each pair of line were made to be an eight-beat, longer line; I think that tetrameter brings too easily a sing-song lilt to a poem that wants a more solemn tone.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Since this poem, "First Winter Storm," is entered in a rhyming contest, I need to keep my attention a bit focused on its rhymes. It turns out these alternating rhymes are skillful and often a bit unusual. The whole poem reads well and makes sense readily: this is about a coastal town which is not perturbed by storms because it has weathered so many. There are a few choices I might work differently; for line ten I would write "till heaped like dunes around human abodes." Not a big difference; this is an exceptional and skillful poem.
I had an unusual insight as I considered this poem. It seemed to me that its ambiance and sense might work better if each pair of line were made to be an eight-beat, longer line; I think that tetrameter brings too easily a sing-song lilt to a poem that wants a more solemn tone.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Hello, Frank. Thank you so much for your wonderful review and all those bright stars. I truly appreciate your suggestions, too, and have already changed the font color and will use that simile you recommended. As for line length, I prefer short to long. Octameter seldom works for me as it gets cumbersome.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well nobody is ready for this. SNOW is a four letter word in my state!
Nice poem. I think this is a solid entry for the contest. I would have went with dark blue font or dark blue background and white font. Just my two cents as that would really "pop" your piece. People tend to vote where their eye is drawn.
Regardless, this is a nice piece. Good work!
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Well nobody is ready for this. SNOW is a four letter word in my state!
Nice poem. I think this is a solid entry for the contest. I would have went with dark blue font or dark blue background and white font. Just my two cents as that would really "pop" your piece. People tend to vote where their eye is drawn.
Regardless, this is a nice piece. Good work!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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You are right, Doug. Nobody is ready for the first big hit. I did change the font to a dark blue. Thanks for the suggestion and kind praise.
