The Best Time of Ohmie's Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Best Time of Ohmie's Life pt 23"Dying of cancer, Ohmie learns his parents are spie
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Comment from lyenochka
It sounds like Ohmie isn't going to last long. I liked that he had a spiritual revelation looking at the Sistine Chapel and that there was nothing between Adam and God. It was God doing all the action and man receiving His touch. It must have consoled Ohmie somehow. It's good that he and his mom and Mme Benoir all support each other lovingly.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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It sounds like Ohmie isn't going to last long. I liked that he had a spiritual revelation looking at the Sistine Chapel and that there was nothing between Adam and God. It was God doing all the action and man receiving His touch. It must have consoled Ohmie somehow. It's good that he and his mom and Mme Benoir all support each other lovingly.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thank you.
I wondered how the Chapel scene would come across.
Comment from Susan Newell
Wayne,
And so Ohmie continues to fail in health, everything becoming more difficult. I sense that we are nearing the end. I liked the Sistine Chapel part, but didn't understand the cipher. Good chapter.
Sue
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Wayne,
And so Ohmie continues to fail in health, everything becoming more difficult. I sense that we are nearing the end. I liked the Sistine Chapel part, but didn't understand the cipher. Good chapter.
Sue
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Thank you.
At this point, the second time the cipher was used to any degree, I figure most, if not all, readers would skim over it.
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Welcome. Yeah. It's a long time between chapters. I have trouble following details through multiple books at irregular intervals.
Comment from Wendy G
They are much better at deciphering code than I am. I feel for them, with so much travelling in his very weak state.don't know how he manages. (Yes, I know it's fiction!) I just want to see them all together and safe now!
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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They are much better at deciphering code than I am. I feel for them, with so much travelling in his very weak state.don't know how he manages. (Yes, I know it's fiction!) I just want to see them all together and safe now!
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the review and stars.
Comment from Judy Lawless
The adventures never end for these two, despite being spies and always in danger! I imagine being in Ohmie's place and I'm already exhausted. This is another well-written chapter, Wayne.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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The adventures never end for these two, despite being spies and always in danger! I imagine being in Ohmie's place and I'm already exhausted. This is another well-written chapter, Wayne.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the excellent review.
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You're very welcome, Wayne. :)
Comment from Douglas Goff
Gosh I love this story. Very well developed characters. Long paragraphs, but just a fun read.
I had to read one part twice because I though it was dialogue. I would consider italicizing the following part so you don't interrupt your reader's flow my friend :
"How was Dad doing? Had he found Dortch? Had he gone to the Embassy anywhere? Was he even alive?"
Just my two cents.
Great work marine.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Gosh I love this story. Very well developed characters. Long paragraphs, but just a fun read.
I had to read one part twice because I though it was dialogue. I would consider italicizing the following part so you don't interrupt your reader's flow my friend :
"How was Dad doing? Had he found Dortch? Had he gone to the Embassy anywhere? Was he even alive?"
Just my two cents.
Great work marine.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thank you.
Yes, I have difficulty with thoughts, whether to "them", or not.
Funny - I have one reviewer who tells me to chop the 'monster' (100-120 word) paragraphs down!
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Ha!
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Thank you. I'll see what I can do to fix it.
Comment from papa55mike
Well, they're cruising the great parts of the world on a secret mission. Nice job on the code. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your book!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Well, they're cruising the great parts of the world on a secret mission. Nice job on the code. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your book!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thank you.
One reviewer likes the code, but has asked to to explain it 3 times. lol
Guess I'm not a good explainer.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Everyone should be allowed to have a wish granted before they die - the Sistene Chapel isn't a bad one to have!
Mom's hugs are going to continue to be "a little too hard", and probably more frequent.
A nice chapter for Ohmie - getting to live a little before he doesn't.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Everyone should be allowed to have a wish granted before they die - the Sistene Chapel isn't a bad one to have!
Mom's hugs are going to continue to be "a little too hard", and probably more frequent.
A nice chapter for Ohmie - getting to live a little before he doesn't.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thank you for a great review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Oh, dear. I alternate between delight and confusion with this guy. Here it's that damn code that still perplexes me; don't understand why, I'm usually OK with digits, but I just can't grasp it - and I'm well aware of all the trouble you keep going to, walking me through it so slow. Once more I'm flummoxed. Kate xx
SPAG: them. "Nobody, > them. Nobody,
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Oh, dear. I alternate between delight and confusion with this guy. Here it's that damn code that still perplexes me; don't understand why, I'm usually OK with digits, but I just can't grasp it - and I'm well aware of all the trouble you keep going to, walking me through it so slow. Once more I'm flummoxed. Kate xx
SPAG: them. "Nobody, > them. Nobody,
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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smiley face here
I wish Jerry Lucas' book, 'The Memory Book' was in print. Even without absorbing the code, it's an entertaining and helpful work.
I can give you a different way to look at it if you would like, but won't here if you prefer to just let it go.
Thank you for the review.
BTW - I love the word 'flummoxed' and have an interesting anecdote about it if you are interested.
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1-82 What fun!
but 1-83???????
