Lords Of The Glen
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "King Wilsom"A A new threat arises to the north.
3 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
From one major Goglin/Giant battle into the next.
The outcome looks bleak indeed.
But the King Wizard will reappear and hopefully make the difference in the final battle.
Only time will tell with a spell?
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Another interesting and worthy chapter.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
From one major Goglin/Giant battle into the next.
The outcome looks bleak indeed.
But the King Wizard will reappear and hopefully make the difference in the final battle.
Only time will tell with a spell?
...
Another interesting and worthy chapter.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Thank you SIr!
Comment from Tara Maxfield
I noticed some editing needs as I read your piece. Examples are P2 - thrown needs to be throne. P8 - You may want to consider describing how long a field is in modern terms. P8 - Is that supposed to be Barter's? P10 is blue. I noticed more, but that's the first few, so you might want to give it a good edit. I feel like such a hypocrite every time I say that as my work frequently is flawed as well.
On to the read aspects. It read well and I was disappointed when it ended. Actually, I'm ticked off that I don't know how well or long they held, what was done about the women and children, what was up with the daft King and... You've got a new fan. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
I noticed some editing needs as I read your piece. Examples are P2 - thrown needs to be throne. P8 - You may want to consider describing how long a field is in modern terms. P8 - Is that supposed to be Barter's? P10 is blue. I noticed more, but that's the first few, so you might want to give it a good edit. I feel like such a hypocrite every time I say that as my work frequently is flawed as well.
On to the read aspects. It read well and I was disappointed when it ended. Actually, I'm ticked off that I don't know how well or long they held, what was done about the women and children, what was up with the daft King and... You've got a new fan. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thanks
That stupid blue pops up in moist of my writings on FS. No idea why??? Thanks for the review! Great edits.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Quite interesting entertaining story. Though it contains lots of descriptions and few lines of dialogue, the story is never boring. I have read a few of your fantasy chapters and I must say I am very impressed by your work.
Thank you
Mario
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
Quite interesting entertaining story. Though it contains lots of descriptions and few lines of dialogue, the story is never boring. I have read a few of your fantasy chapters and I must say I am very impressed by your work.
Thank you
Mario
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thanks Mario. It?s part of a 5 book series so I had to explain a lot of stuff. I will revisit adding some dialogue where I can. Thank you my friend!
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NP