Shades Of Blue
Rondel6 total reviews
Comment from Rena Smith
This is a beautiful poem and I like the words to the poem and I like how it talks about the sea and how everything is busy moving and doing. I like how it makes reference to an albatross and a soft breeze and then the turtle who is doing what he is doing because he wants too. Wow, such as is life, these creatures are using their gifts to do what our Heavenly Father God enabled them to do which we human beings were as willing to do, Great writing!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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This is a beautiful poem and I like the words to the poem and I like how it talks about the sea and how everything is busy moving and doing. I like how it makes reference to an albatross and a soft breeze and then the turtle who is doing what he is doing because he wants too. Wow, such as is life, these creatures are using their gifts to do what our Heavenly Father God enabled them to do which we human beings were as willing to do, Great writing!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Regina Elliott
So dreamily beauteous and
I love maritime poetry. The
deep enchanting writing and
serene use of the color blue
is mystical. My very best
wishes for the competition.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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So dreamily beauteous and
I love maritime poetry. The
deep enchanting writing and
serene use of the color blue
is mystical. My very best
wishes for the competition.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a beautifully worded rondel poem. I had to read it because blue is my favorite color. I like the repetition line~ shades of blue. I wish you had repeated it in the last stanza too. Typically, things in most poem are written in threes. The font size could be a bit larger. For better spacing in your poem box, I would drop the first line down one space. The visual looks like the ocean so it works well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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This is a beautifully worded rondel poem. I had to read it because blue is my favorite color. I like the repetition line~ shades of blue. I wish you had repeated it in the last stanza too. Typically, things in most poem are written in threes. The font size could be a bit larger. For better spacing in your poem box, I would drop the first line down one space. The visual looks like the ocean so it works well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Marienkiefer
Beautiful seascapes. Your poem conveys a watery world, movement and textures of a sea world,
-Fabulous images created by your words.
-Scintillating views of waves of water lapping against the shore and breezes blowing overhead.
A poem that appeals to the imagination.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Beautiful seascapes. Your poem conveys a watery world, movement and textures of a sea world,
-Fabulous images created by your words.
-Scintillating views of waves of water lapping against the shore and breezes blowing overhead.
A poem that appeals to the imagination.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Celyn
This is a beautiful description of the ocean and reminds me of many happy days spent by the sea. However, I think you have the format slightly wrong. The last line is supposed to be either just your very first line or the first two lines, ie it should be 'White sands softly tread' or that line plus 'Beautiful seas, shades of blue' not just 'Beautiful sea, shades of blue'.
I hope that helps
Celyn
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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This is a beautiful description of the ocean and reminds me of many happy days spent by the sea. However, I think you have the format slightly wrong. The last line is supposed to be either just your very first line or the first two lines, ie it should be 'White sands softly tread' or that line plus 'Beautiful seas, shades of blue' not just 'Beautiful sea, shades of blue'.
I hope that helps
Celyn
Comment Written 12-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thanks for your review. I saw the B in brackets so I thought I had the choice. I will re-think and see what I can do.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Shades of Blue"
Those is a Rondel Poetry Writing Contest Entry Rich in theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
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This would go well in my book Entitled,
"Beautiful Poetry from Long Beach Island New Jersey"
Doctor Ricky1024
And, good luck with this one.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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"Shades of Blue"
Those is a Rondel Poetry Writing Contest Entry Rich in theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
...
This would go well in my book Entitled,
"Beautiful Poetry from Long Beach Island New Jersey"
Doctor Ricky1024
And, good luck with this one.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you
