Doves
My trees are filled in winter with these beautiful birds.8 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I too love to watch the birds visiting in my garden, a gardeners pleasure, and so it was to read your Trichain poem, Annie. Just one suggestion -
(come) settle in among my trees - just a suggestion to get the iambic count right.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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I too love to watch the birds visiting in my garden, a gardeners pleasure, and so it was to read your Trichain poem, Annie. Just one suggestion -
(come) settle in among my trees - just a suggestion to get the iambic count right.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reviewing and for the helpful suggestion. I appreciate the suggestions for improvement when I get them rather than just compliments as I think that reviewing is for improvement so thank you again.
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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My friend and I love to feed our critters out back.
We have many different feeds we use for the very different and many critters.
The one day my friend was in dialysis and I noticed over a dozen doves were out feeding.
That was the most that I've ever seen in one place.
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Doves represent Peace.
Yes, and are very beautiful creatures.
Once long ago when I was a child
Curious, I went up in the tree on the ladder to look at their nest.
There was two very large white and brown spotted eggs.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
My friend and I love to feed our critters out back.
We have many different feeds we use for the very different and many critters.
The one day my friend was in dialysis and I noticed over a dozen doves were out feeding.
That was the most that I've ever seen in one place.
...
Doves represent Peace.
Yes, and are very beautiful creatures.
Once long ago when I was a child
Curious, I went up in the tree on the ladder to look at their nest.
There was two very large white and brown spotted eggs.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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You always have such an interesting review to whatever you are replying to. I love to listen to the Doves and think they have a purpose when they land and stay a while. They don't stay long and I have many other varieties of birds that do. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from damommy
Great trichain. I love doves, too. None of mine eat at a feeder. They eat from the ground, so I drop some for them, too. I, too, wonder where they nest. I have plenty of trees but have never seen their nests.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Great trichain. I love doves, too. None of mine eat at a feeder. They eat from the ground, so I drop some for them, too. I, too, wonder where they nest. I have plenty of trees but have never seen their nests.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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My feeder is a flat 20 x 20 board that we nailed atop the wooden fence so that all the birds can feed at it and it works better than the hanging ones. We get all kinds from the little birds to the doves and quail.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a great poem for the club, Annie. Your words flowed
smoothly with the correct rhymes and meter. The picture was
beautiful. Yes, all of God's creatures need help now and then
from people. I always feed the little birds year-round. I often
wonder where they go at night, too.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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What a great poem for the club, Annie. Your words flowed
smoothly with the correct rhymes and meter. The picture was
beautiful. Yes, all of God's creatures need help now and then
from people. I always feed the little birds year-round. I often
wonder where they go at night, too.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Love to watch and feed the birds year round.
Comment from Teri7
I bet it is just a lovely time of the year when you see all those doves in your trees. I remember looking out the front door one morning and seeing so many red birds and blue birds. I love to see the birds. Thank you for sharing with us. Great words and lovely picture. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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I bet it is just a lovely time of the year when you see all those doves in your trees. I remember looking out the front door one morning and seeing so many red birds and blue birds. I love to see the birds. Thank you for sharing with us. Great words and lovely picture. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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I love to watch and feed the birds year round.
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, you're a bird observer, too. So glad that they do enjoy your trees and know to avoid the cats. That's why I won't put up a feeder because it would be like a trap for the birds as all the neighbor's cats stay in our yard.
Enjoyed your trichain.
One suggestion:
Settle in among my trees
Since this has only 7 syllables, maybe: They settle in among my trees
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Ah, you're a bird observer, too. So glad that they do enjoy your trees and know to avoid the cats. That's why I won't put up a feeder because it would be like a trap for the birds as all the neighbor's cats stay in our yard.
Enjoyed your trichain.
One suggestion:
Settle in among my trees
Since this has only 7 syllables, maybe: They settle in among my trees
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Great tip and thanks. Love to watch and feed the birds year round.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I thought that perhaps you had taken this picture in your own backyard, but I see that it's from FanArt Review. I love reading poetry by others here on this site, as I would like to write more poetry but have never been formally trained. Yours is a lovely story with a nice rhyming pattern, the first three lines rhyming in each stanza, then the last line rhyming throughout.
Thanks for sharing with us.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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I thought that perhaps you had taken this picture in your own backyard, but I see that it's from FanArt Review. I love reading poetry by others here on this site, as I would like to write more poetry but have never been formally trained. Yours is a lovely story with a nice rhyming pattern, the first three lines rhyming in each stanza, then the last line rhyming throughout.
Thanks for sharing with us.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Love to watch and feed the birds year round.
Comment from Celyn
This poem is a lovely description of finding doves in your area - well done. The rhythm is good and so is the rhyming but I think that the last line could be improved upon as it sounds a bit forced. I think it's the 'will do' bit that does not seem to fit so well. Perhaps you could say something like 'If that's their final goal' instead.
Celyn
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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This poem is a lovely description of finding doves in your area - well done. The rhythm is good and so is the rhyming but I think that the last line could be improved upon as it sounds a bit forced. I think it's the 'will do' bit that does not seem to fit so well. Perhaps you could say something like 'If that's their final goal' instead.
Celyn
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Great tip. Thanks. I love to watch and feed the birds year round.
