Lords Of The Glen
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Hero Arturian"A A new threat arises to the north.
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Comment from JoannaN
This is a good scene. It begins with a duel (you could have expanded it a bit to make the fight not so easy for your hero) and it introduces another element of action with the arrival of a messenger. The scene ended with a cliffhanger. Overall: good structure, professional fight descriptions. Make the fights not so easy for Arturian :)
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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This is a good scene. It begins with a duel (you could have expanded it a bit to make the fight not so easy for your hero) and it introduces another element of action with the arrival of a messenger. The scene ended with a cliffhanger. Overall: good structure, professional fight descriptions. Make the fights not so easy for Arturian :)
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thanks! I appreciate your review. You are awesome sauce!!!
Comment from Ricky1024
This chapter in the book The Lord Of The Glen was very powerful and well written.
Rich in the theme as well as imagery..
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly
DoctorRicky
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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This chapter in the book The Lord Of The Glen was very powerful and well written.
Rich in the theme as well as imagery..
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly
DoctorRicky
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thank you my friend!
