Tanka Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 60 "Strawberry Moon"Romantic Tanka Poems
17 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Yes, this is a delicious tanka and to form. Chocolate covered strawberries are a perfect reminder for this moon in June and the love inspired.
Very well done, Gypsy. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Yes, this is a delicious tanka and to form. Chocolate covered strawberries are a perfect reminder for this moon in June and the love inspired.
Very well done, Gypsy. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 12-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much, Gloria, it's so nice to hear from you. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from Bill Schott
This tanka, Strawberry Moon, looks good and brings in the readers understanding of skinny dipping, embracing while quivering and naked, and the delicious blend of chocolate and strawberries.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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This tanka, Strawberry Moon, looks good and brings in the readers understanding of skinny dipping, embracing while quivering and naked, and the delicious blend of chocolate and strawberries.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
I like yourTanka poem. Excellent picture presentation!! Interesting concept - reminds of strawberry's dipped in chocolate - paints a picture of desire - bathing breath?? Suggest "bated" fits the narrative better? I like the chocolate idea - good job
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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I like yourTanka poem. Excellent picture presentation!! Interesting concept - reminds of strawberry's dipped in chocolate - paints a picture of desire - bathing breath?? Suggest "bated" fits the narrative better? I like the chocolate idea - good job
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. I meant to write bathing beneath.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from J L Graves
I had never heard of tanka poetry before reading your poem. It inspires to try it out for myself, someday. As for your poem, the photo is breath-taking, and the words are descriptive while the flow lead up to an unexpected delightful ending. I enjoyed this.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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I had never heard of tanka poetry before reading your poem. It inspires to try it out for myself, someday. As for your poem, the photo is breath-taking, and the words are descriptive while the flow lead up to an unexpected delightful ending. I enjoyed this.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much, JL, It's always good to hear from people like you and I appreciate all your review. Have a wonderful weekend!
Gypsy hugs
"Love the ones who understand you and forget the ones that don't." - Nikki Rowe
Comment from Celyn
This is a very interesting and sensuous Tanka. I like the imagery but the second line could do with an 'a' at the beginning and then you could change delicious to something with fewer syllables like luscious perhaps.
Celyn
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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This is a very interesting and sensuous Tanka. I like the imagery but the second line could do with an 'a' at the beginning and then you could change delicious to something with fewer syllables like luscious perhaps.
Celyn
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Haiku, Tanka, and most Japanese poetry are written as succinctly as possible and must be 17 syllables or less. Classic haiku is supposed to be written in one breath. So we get rid of all the words we don't need but keep what must.
Thank you very much for your helpful and kind review. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine peom, Gypsy----and one about a culinary sexual confection that everybody likes, with the possible exception of Larry Limprod of Eunical Way!
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Another fine peom, Gypsy----and one about a culinary sexual confection that everybody likes, with the possible exception of Larry Limprod of Eunical Way!
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
What an excellent ekphrastic poem Gypsy, some marvellous artwork to work on, of I don't know whether it was the artwork or not, but it sure makes for a marvellous tanka, well done. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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What an excellent ekphrastic poem Gypsy, some marvellous artwork to work on, of I don't know whether it was the artwork or not, but it sure makes for a marvellous tanka, well done. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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The poem came to me before the picture. Most of the time I google pictures once I know what my poem is about. I like ekphrastic poems too. Thank you very much, Roy. I appreciate all your reviews.
Gypsy hugs
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Me too Gypsy
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Great imagery in this one. I love the phrase chocolate-covered love. Thank you for sharing this lovely Tanka poem. Good luck with your collection of tankas and, yes, I will hand over the chocolate.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Great imagery in this one. I love the phrase chocolate-covered love. Thank you for sharing this lovely Tanka poem. Good luck with your collection of tankas and, yes, I will hand over the chocolate.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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I appreciate your insightful and kind review, Theodore.
Gypsy hugs
"Love the ones who understand you and forget the ones that don't." - Nikki Rowe
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a romantic and frivolous tanka. Writing in the last line about your undying love for chocolate. This is well done and you know how to do it since you teach a class in Japanese poetry. Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem.
Jesse
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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This is a romantic and frivolous tanka. Writing in the last line about your undying love for chocolate. This is well done and you know how to do it since you teach a class in Japanese poetry. Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem.
Jesse
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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I appreciate your insightful and kind review. Have a lovely day.... or night.
Gypsy hugs
"Love the ones who understand you and forget the ones that don't." - Nikki Rowe
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I agree with the insightful quote, and thank you for the gypsy hugs!
Jesse
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I smiled at the idea of chocolate-covered love. I am pretty sure nobody can ever go wrong with chocolate. I know I've said it before and I'm pretty sure you are tired of hearing it, but I enjoyed the entire package.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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I smiled at the idea of chocolate-covered love. I am pretty sure nobody can ever go wrong with chocolate. I know I've said it before and I'm pretty sure you are tired of hearing it, but I enjoyed the entire package.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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I never get tired of your kind reviews... all of it. I appreciate your insightful and kind review. Have a lovely day.... or night.
Gypsy hugs
"Love the ones who understand you and forget the ones that don't." - Nikki Rowe