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Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Robot On the Ground"a collection of phenomenally mundane work.
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Comment from Ulla
Oh I love the unknown, Bill, and I love to think there's life beyond us. There must be. So that is what the 'ping' is about. Right? I know I've missed most of this story. Too much has happened in my life of late, but I'm catching up. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Oh I love the unknown, Bill, and I love to think there's life beyond us. There must be. So that is what the 'ping' is about. Right? I know I've missed most of this story. Too much has happened in my life of late, but I'm catching up. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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I hope things are better for you now, Ulla.
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Yes, thank you. At least my house is safe of falling down on me. Now I just have to find the money to have all the work done. Sigh. Work will start in January.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Bill,
Generations of aliens have been very patient, waiting for earthlings to ruin the world through pollution and nuclear wars. Now they can finally take over, terraforming the planet. But first, they send a robot to search for any sign of life, through the deepest ocean trenches to mountain peaks. I can't imagine all aquatic life ...extinct. Would that include plant life as well? And mankind wiped out? But just when the ALL CLEAR signal would be sent back to the aliens, a ping. Some form of life, somewhere. Life always tries to exist, doesn't it? What a shame that we could destroy a beautiful planet. It's like a hockey game... regulation time over, 60 full minutes of slapping that puck around, attacking, defense, protecting the goalie, overlooking the refs, fights breaking out, gloves dropped, jerseys pulled over heads and shoulders, benches cleared. Game is tied. No obvious winner! So here comes the overtime. Now where is that puck?
PING!................................ PING!............................... PING!
Nicely penned, Bill! The imagery stands out.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Hi Bill,
Generations of aliens have been very patient, waiting for earthlings to ruin the world through pollution and nuclear wars. Now they can finally take over, terraforming the planet. But first, they send a robot to search for any sign of life, through the deepest ocean trenches to mountain peaks. I can't imagine all aquatic life ...extinct. Would that include plant life as well? And mankind wiped out? But just when the ALL CLEAR signal would be sent back to the aliens, a ping. Some form of life, somewhere. Life always tries to exist, doesn't it? What a shame that we could destroy a beautiful planet. It's like a hockey game... regulation time over, 60 full minutes of slapping that puck around, attacking, defense, protecting the goalie, overlooking the refs, fights breaking out, gloves dropped, jerseys pulled over heads and shoulders, benches cleared. Game is tied. No obvious winner! So here comes the overtime. Now where is that puck?
PING!................................ PING!............................... PING!
Nicely penned, Bill! The imagery stands out.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 12-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Kimbob.
Comment from Celyn
This is quite a short chapter but it is intriguing. Where is Robot from?, what is he doing?, what is he looking for? and many more questions come to mind. The writing is fine but you need to use 'the ' more when referring to parts of the ocean, eg the South Sandwich Trench' rather than just 'South Sandwich Trench'. Also, 'resulting in a lifting of Robot..' is a bit odd. Why not use ', which resulted in Robot being lifted...'
I am looking forward to reading the next part of this story.
Celyn
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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This is quite a short chapter but it is intriguing. Where is Robot from?, what is he doing?, what is he looking for? and many more questions come to mind. The writing is fine but you need to use 'the ' more when referring to parts of the ocean, eg the South Sandwich Trench' rather than just 'South Sandwich Trench'. Also, 'resulting in a lifting of Robot..' is a bit odd. Why not use ', which resulted in Robot being lifted...'
I am looking forward to reading the next part of this story.
Celyn
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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This is the third of four chapters. Robot Saves the Day, Robot Paves the Way, Robot on the Ground, and Robots.
Comment from Wendy G
So what was the ping? Does that indicate life on earth still? An intriguing and unsettling story. It's well written too. Will there be a follow-up? Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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So what was the ping? Does that indicate life on earth still? An intriguing and unsettling story. It's well written too. Will there be a follow-up? Wendy
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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There have been four segments: Robot Saves the Day; Robot Paves the Way; Robot on the Ground; and Robots.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really interesting story. I hope Robot 3.7 didn't get dropped off on the Earth I know and love. I do hope you plan to answer what the "ping" was.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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This is a really interesting story. I hope Robot 3.7 didn't get dropped off on the Earth I know and love. I do hope you plan to answer what the "ping" was.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Carol. It does come next in "Robots".
Comment from BethShelby
Robot seems to have been programed well. This planet seem devoid of all life forms, or at least it did until something pinged. Is that an indication of life. We shall see.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Robot seems to have been programed well. This planet seem devoid of all life forms, or at least it did until something pinged. Is that an indication of life. We shall see.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thanks, Beth
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written. Nice, enticing ending.
I think the line about nothing causing a return signal needs a little elaboration since there are radio and microwave signals abounding all over the earth. Uneducated readers, such as myself, could be confused.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Well written. Nice, enticing ending.
I think the line about nothing causing a return signal needs a little elaboration since there are radio and microwave signals abounding all over the earth. Uneducated readers, such as myself, could be confused.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thanks, Wayne. I will tweak it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Then -- a ping... There is life on Earth! Good old Robot. But now he has to find what sort of life exists here. I know this is sci-fi, but the way we are going we will one be doing this, looking for life. I could be reading history in the reverse! Well done, my friend, another excellent chapter. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Then -- a ping... There is life on Earth! Good old Robot. But now he has to find what sort of life exists here. I know this is sci-fi, but the way we are going we will one be doing this, looking for life. I could be reading history in the reverse! Well done, my friend, another excellent chapter. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Sandra
Comment from Spitfire
Again, those big technical terms, but I can visualize this scene, especially Robot being lifted (by the force of helium) above everything. Since no life exists on the planet anymore, I guess alien forces are ready to start the world over.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Again, those big technical terms, but I can visualize this scene, especially Robot being lifted (by the force of helium) above everything. Since no life exists on the planet anymore, I guess alien forces are ready to start the world over.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thanks for giving this a look, Shari. You are one of a few.
Comment from sunnilicious
I learned about the Marianas Trench last month. Trenches are a exploration for a few willing to be encaged. They are natural seamed cracks in the ocean with a life all its own. Everything in that particular ecosystem works off each other. The sealife seems much more vicious but the reasons work for vampire sharks, glow in the dark fish and more... It's like over 10,000 feet deep.
I'd add a bit more to color your story. Good work.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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I learned about the Marianas Trench last month. Trenches are a exploration for a few willing to be encaged. They are natural seamed cracks in the ocean with a life all its own. Everything in that particular ecosystem works off each other. The sealife seems much more vicious but the reasons work for vampire sharks, glow in the dark fish and more... It's like over 10,000 feet deep.
I'd add a bit more to color your story. Good work.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thanks, Sunnilicious. If I ever blow this up for publication, I will dress it up more.
