Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Death By Murder - Chap 11"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
19 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Oh Bennie, Bennie... what a tangled web! See? See what greed does? It's never good, I tell ya!
(OOPS, I'm lapsing into the accent now...)
I was sort of surprised Bennie came clean (in his "I might have" kind of way) to Lance about spilling the beans...
No question about it, they're both in the thick of things now!
Karenina
You use two different spellings for Benny/Bennie in this chapter... Easy to do, but I suggest you stick to one! (Laughing)
SEE: "No, don't kill me! You can have --" Benny stifled a scream."
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Oh Bennie, Bennie... what a tangled web! See? See what greed does? It's never good, I tell ya!
(OOPS, I'm lapsing into the accent now...)
I was sort of surprised Bennie came clean (in his "I might have" kind of way) to Lance about spilling the beans...
No question about it, they're both in the thick of things now!
Karenina
You use two different spellings for Benny/Bennie in this chapter... Easy to do, but I suggest you stick to one! (Laughing)
SEE: "No, don't kill me! You can have --" Benny stifled a scream."
Comment Written 28-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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I stand corrected... though the chapter isn't fixed it, the writer will get it pronto. As for Bennie coming clean, I think his fear trumped everything.
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If I had a nickel for every time I've done this...
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, it sounds like everyone's in trouble now. So much is happening, and soon the chase will be on. Leaving the note for his dad might prove to be Bennie's undoing later on. Good chapter. Looking forward to reading more.
Blessings.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Wow, it sounds like everyone's in trouble now. So much is happening, and soon the chase will be on. Leaving the note for his dad might prove to be Bennie's undoing later on. Good chapter. Looking forward to reading more.
Blessings.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Carol. I appreciate your continued support and kindness. I am so happy that you continue to enjoy the story.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting story and well proofread. You have quite a cast of characters, the list of which makes reading easier as I've just entered your book. So, you have two sets of guys, both on the run. Bennie and Lance have the jewels and Mason and Paddy intended to have them. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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This is an interesting story and well proofread. You have quite a cast of characters, the list of which makes reading easier as I've just entered your book. So, you have two sets of guys, both on the run. Bennie and Lance have the jewels and Mason and Paddy intended to have them. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your kindness and for the review. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
Unfortunately, Bennie is the weak link. On his own, as nervous as Lance is, he would probably make many mistakes, but Bennie has speeded up the process. Now, Bennie and Lance are both in danger.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Unfortunately, Bennie is the weak link. On his own, as nervous as Lance is, he would probably make many mistakes, but Bennie has speeded up the process. Now, Bennie and Lance are both in danger.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Thanks as always, Lorraine. Appreciate that you continue to read and enjoy my story. Smiles, Carol
Comment from JoannaN
Hello, it was again a joy to read. You make short scenes that concentrate on different characters instead of one large scene, but this is a proper approach to this genre. It reminds me of a crime-related tv series or movies - usually the scenes are short to make the pace quicker. Keep writing :)
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Hello, it was again a joy to read. You make short scenes that concentrate on different characters instead of one large scene, but this is a proper approach to this genre. It reminds me of a crime-related tv series or movies - usually the scenes are short to make the pace quicker. Keep writing :)
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading, enjoying and reviewing. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Oh no! Bennie is going to lead Mason and Paddy right to Lance and Blackwell's hidden stash. It doesn't look good for anyone. I sure hope that Hank and Emmy find out about them soon!
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Oh no! Bennie is going to lead Mason and Paddy right to Lance and Blackwell's hidden stash. It doesn't look good for anyone. I sure hope that Hank and Emmy find out about them soon!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Thank you as always for your thoughtfulness, and for reading and enjoying.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
Mason and Paddy, Bennie and Lance, all planning to be rich but none of them seem very smart. lol Another great chapter, Carol. Obviously there is much more to come. For now, we wait to see if Mason and Paddy catch up with Bennie and lance. Well done.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Mason and Paddy, Bennie and Lance, all planning to be rich but none of them seem very smart. lol Another great chapter, Carol. Obviously there is much more to come. For now, we wait to see if Mason and Paddy catch up with Bennie and lance. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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As always, I am behind, but I want to thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy. I appreciate it very much.
Hugs, Carol
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You're most welcome, Carol.
Comment from royowen
There doesn't seem to be anything wrong with Bennie's instincts, they sound pretty reliable. An exciting episode Carol, you always manage to write plenty of action into your stories my friend, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Typo : Not (an) athlete...
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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There doesn't seem to be anything wrong with Bennie's instincts, they sound pretty reliable. An exciting episode Carol, you always manage to write plenty of action into your stories my friend, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Typo : Not (an) athlete...
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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I feel like the tortoise and the hare.... I know I will get there at some point, but I seem so slow paced at it. I appreciate the review and your thoughts.
Hugs, Carol
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You?ll finish, you just need to be in the swing again Carol.
Comment from Wendy G
Oh no. What a place to stop. Everyone is on edge, and rightly so. Lives are at stake, and tensions are running high. You are developing your storyline abd characters very well. Looking forward to more.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Oh no. What a place to stop. Everyone is on edge, and rightly so. Lives are at stake, and tensions are running high. You are developing your storyline abd characters very well. Looking forward to more.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Wendy. Don't fall off the edge.... I appreciate your thoughts. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Thesis
It's getting more interesting and tense as the story continues. You can sense the fear and excitement as the characters fear for their lives and the stash that they have hidden. Looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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It's getting more interesting and tense as the story continues. You can sense the fear and excitement as the characters fear for their lives and the stash that they have hidden. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Wow! Three chapters in a row! I am thrilled it continued to hold your interest and that you enjoyed it. Thank you!
Smiles. Carol
