Out Of The Blues
A mother's nightmare of hurting her baby after birth32 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a very relatable poem for many new moms. Postpartum blues is a major issue for many mothers. The text is an okay size. The message is clearly a cry for help, but it seems it will not be coming from the father. If this is based on a true event, hopefully the mom will get the help she needs. I would suggest you drop the poem down one space from the bottom of the visual. The title does not need to be on the poem. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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This is a very relatable poem for many new moms. Postpartum blues is a major issue for many mothers. The text is an okay size. The message is clearly a cry for help, but it seems it will not be coming from the father. If this is based on a true event, hopefully the mom will get the help she needs. I would suggest you drop the poem down one space from the bottom of the visual. The title does not need to be on the poem. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thanks for your review and for the kind advice. I will modify that asap.
Mario
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You are welcome. It is a good poem.
Comment from Ricky1024
Out of the Blues"
A Sonnet Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
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This speaks of a woman who has given birth but is left with regrets called T"he Blues".
A curse to both her and the child.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest Entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Out of the Blues"
A Sonnet Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
This speaks of a woman who has given birth but is left with regrets called T"he Blues".
A curse to both her and the child.
..
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest Entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much, Dr. Ricky.!
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A very touching poem. Postpartum depression is real and not always appreciated for its severity.
The poem flows well. The rhymes are unforced. Glad to see the word myrrh--too many people avoid unusual words in poetry. The images are well-defined. The narrative stays on point. The concluding couplet sums up the poem well.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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A very touching poem. Postpartum depression is real and not always appreciated for its severity.
The poem flows well. The rhymes are unforced. Glad to see the word myrrh--too many people avoid unusual words in poetry. The images are well-defined. The narrative stays on point. The concluding couplet sums up the poem well.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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I am so honored for the generous 6 stars. You're right, this is so real and touches more women than we think.
Thank you so much!
Mario
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well well well that is an interesting take on postpartum depression.
Hope most guys aren't whistling jerks like the bloke in this piece.
Nice work. I always enjoy your unique perceptions Mario! Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Well well well that is an interesting take on postpartum depression.
Hope most guys aren't whistling jerks like the bloke in this piece.
Nice work. I always enjoy your unique perceptions Mario! Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much Douglas. Your review and encouragement mean a lot to me.
Thanks
Mario
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Good work my friend.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Are you a male or female? Mario is normally associated being masculine but in today's world, no one can be sure. As for this writ. Wow. If you wrote it from a woman's perspective as a man, I only hope you are a male and that the mother who holds the child. What darken thoughts are so expressed, it is worrisome.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Are you a male or female? Mario is normally associated being masculine but in today's world, no one can be sure. As for this writ. Wow. If you wrote it from a woman's perspective as a man, I only hope you are a male and that the mother who holds the child. What darken thoughts are so expressed, it is worrisome.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Yes, I'm a man, and yes, these days we need to ask...
Thanks so much for your thoughts!!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness this is such a very sad sonnet filled with anxiety and hopelessness. This Mother needs a lot of help and support, a well worded, rhymed and metered poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Oh my goodness this is such a very sad sonnet filled with anxiety and hopelessness. This Mother needs a lot of help and support, a well worded, rhymed and metered poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Lovely to meet again, dear Dolly...!!
I have seen first hand the dramatic results of this unseen but how much prevalent syndrome. I wish all partners of women who endure this after birth, could be educated and not just dismiss it as a mere "hormone thing".
Thank you for your kind review!
Mario
Comment from Marienkiefer
A very compelling topic and serious issue dealing with postpartum depression. Disturbing images reflecting what some women, men and families face.
Important to sensitize on this issue with your author's voice and through poetry. This does, however, appear to hover somewhat close to the edge of infanticide.
On the other hand, could this, perhaps, mobilize more voices to speak out, rallying for help around an issue some may face? Was that your intention?
All the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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A very compelling topic and serious issue dealing with postpartum depression. Disturbing images reflecting what some women, men and families face.
Important to sensitize on this issue with your author's voice and through poetry. This does, however, appear to hover somewhat close to the edge of infanticide.
On the other hand, could this, perhaps, mobilize more voices to speak out, rallying for help around an issue some may face? Was that your intention?
All the best in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Hello,
Thank you so much for your elaborate review and the 5-stars. You are right, we don't want to play around such a prickly subject. I agree with you about the extreme wish to kill, but, I have seen first hand how women did things which baffled even the closest ones. When my wife gave birth to our third child, she became like a crazy person for weeks, accusing me of colluding with her mother to put her in mental institution, accusing me of sleeping with her too. Fortunately her mom was a nurse, and that's when I became aware of that syndrome. There was at that same time, a mother accused of choking her baby to death and she was found guilty and went to prison. The issue I wanted to raise was the fact that the partner's ignorance on that dreadful sickness. Many men walk off, just blaming the "hormones "... too easy to say. I think people should be educated on this issue, which is, believe it or not, very common these days.
Thanks so much for reading!!!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are heartfelt, sad, descriptive and creative. I pondered
on these words and thought about depression and how is it so hard to
come out of. These words left me still pondering The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork goes well with the theme and words of this poem.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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The author's words are heartfelt, sad, descriptive and creative. I pondered
on these words and thought about depression and how is it so hard to
come out of. These words left me still pondering The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork goes well with the theme and words of this poem.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for sharing your comments. I really appreciate it!!
Mario
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Sonnet you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose and from your words too. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This is a very well written Sonnet you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose and from your words too. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Wow!!! You are so generous for giving me a 6-star, Teri..!!!
Thank you for reading and liking the sonnet.
Really appreciate your kind words.
Thanks again!!
Mario
Comment from Eternal Muse
I understand the post-partum depression, though your words are a bit scary. After all, it's not her fault to be brought to this earth. Such harsh words for this wonderful little creature. Babies are sacred. On the technical merit this sonnet is flawless, and a sonnet is my favorite form. Good luck in the site's contest.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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I understand the post-partum depression, though your words are a bit scary. After all, it's not her fault to be brought to this earth. Such harsh words for this wonderful little creature. Babies are sacred. On the technical merit this sonnet is flawless, and a sonnet is my favorite form. Good luck in the site's contest.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Hi,
Thank you so much for reading and liking the technical aspect of the sonnet. It's my favourite type of poetry too.I realise the first quatrain contains harsh words, and I am very sorry this has upset you a bit. I don't know if I have time, but I will try to amend it.
Thank you again.
Mario
