Random Rhyme and Petty Prose
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Robot Saves the Day"a collection of phenomenally mundane work.
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Comment from Spitfire
IMO, I think you should capitalize 'robot' in the first and fourth paragraph since that seems to be the robot's name. It's comment on 'luck' is right on! The mission of this machine is to reset the earth and start over. We certainly need that especially with what is going to happen on Election Day, but I won't go there. My daughter is planning to become an ex-patriot.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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IMO, I think you should capitalize 'robot' in the first and fourth paragraph since that seems to be the robot's name. It's comment on 'luck' is right on! The mission of this machine is to reset the earth and start over. We certainly need that especially with what is going to happen on Election Day, but I won't go there. My daughter is planning to become an ex-patriot.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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I purposely left them lower case (I see I missed one) to keep it detached from any notion that it was emotional. I also avoided using an article, which probably only makes me look like I need more revision.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Very clever ending having the robot's mission to blow up the earth. Well, maybe after Tuesday, we may need his services!
Interesting and well-written sci-fi. Great imagination.
I was also taken by the creative names you gave the scientist and his assistant.
Even if the robot blows up the earth, it is a fun read.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Very clever ending having the robot's mission to blow up the earth. Well, maybe after Tuesday, we may need his services!
Interesting and well-written sci-fi. Great imagination.
I was also taken by the creative names you gave the scientist and his assistant.
Even if the robot blows up the earth, it is a fun read.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Mary
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I can't wait to see what happens next Bill? Is this Robot going to cause chaos on earth? Will it sort out the human race and bring peace to us? Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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I can't wait to see what happens next Bill? Is this Robot going to cause chaos on earth? Will it sort out the human race and bring peace to us? Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thank, Dolly
Comment from BethShelby
So this robot was programed to blow up the earth. Yep, that is just what earth needs. To be blown out of its present state so the powers that be can reset the whole mess and start over. Let me book a ticket out before it get here.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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So this robot was programed to blow up the earth. Yep, that is just what earth needs. To be blown out of its present state so the powers that be can reset the whole mess and start over. Let me book a ticket out before it get here.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Robot solution
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Flash Fiction you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. I am thankful I have never seen a robot that blows up here on earth. I hope I never do! Thanks for sharing. Blessings, teri
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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This is a very well written Flash Fiction you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. I am thankful I have never seen a robot that blows up here on earth. I hope I never do! Thanks for sharing. Blessings, teri
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Oh dear, you haven't left us any room for negotiation, have you. I suppose we deserve it. But will there be any natural resources left for the reset, or is this the end of the planet as well as mankind? Kate xx
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Oh dear, you haven't left us any room for negotiation, have you. I suppose we deserve it. But will there be any natural resources left for the reset, or is this the end of the planet as well as mankind? Kate xx
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Luck is a chaos element which does not affect robot performance. All that I will do is programed and prepared to exceed all possible scenarios.
Comment from lyenochka
Detonated! Yikes. I was hoping it would bring some order to Earth. This feels like the prequel to the Day the Earth Stood Still. Interesting names!
Question:
the excelavator is ready for slipping," (is 'slipping' a ceramics term or did you mean 'shipping'?)
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Detonated! Yikes. I was hoping it would bring some order to Earth. This feels like the prequel to the Day the Earth Stood Still. Interesting names!
Question:
the excelavator is ready for slipping," (is 'slipping' a ceramics term or did you mean 'shipping'?)
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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It is slipping. Guess I need a note.
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Is it a delivery term as in the slip that comes with a package?
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Slip is derived from slipstream.
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Ah. Thanks for explaining!
Comment from nomi338
Yikes! Let us hope this exciting scenario blows up before it reaches its destination. Otherwise, pop goes the weasel. What a nightmare proposal this is. Tell me do you stay up late nights dreaming of unique ways of getting rid of your mistakes?
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Yikes! Let us hope this exciting scenario blows up before it reaches its destination. Otherwise, pop goes the weasel. What a nightmare proposal this is. Tell me do you stay up late nights dreaming of unique ways of getting rid of your mistakes?
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Not too late.
Comment from susand3022
Well, doesn't that sound interesting... and fairly crazy! Bill, you do make me wonder sometimes. Just what HAVE you been smoking? ;) (What state do you live in? lol) Is there a reason that you're so silly?
There's a reason I get this cheeky...
Susan ;)
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Well, doesn't that sound interesting... and fairly crazy! Bill, you do make me wonder sometimes. Just what HAVE you been smoking? ;) (What state do you live in? lol) Is there a reason that you're so silly?
There's a reason I get this cheeky...
Susan ;)
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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I may be over-caffeinated.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This robot was on a mission to reset the earth but his understanding of reset is to destroy the earth completely. I'm not sure it was what his designer meant. This is a good flash fiction with a surprise ending as expected.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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This robot was on a mission to reset the earth but his understanding of reset is to destroy the earth completely. I'm not sure it was what his designer meant. This is a good flash fiction with a surprise ending as expected.
Well done.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Thanks, Lisa
