Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Death By Murder - Chap 9"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
17 total reviews
Comment from karenina
More good stuff. So nice to see Emmy and Hank getting along together both as detectives and, er, a budding romance. (Although Hank does have quite the high opinion of himself!)
"Drooling? Over me?" Hank scoffed at her, though he knew it was most likely true. He could have his choice of women, but he'd never found the one to make him commit long term, not that he hadn't tried a time or two."
There's a fine line between confidence and cockiness and he's straddling it!
Karenina
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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More good stuff. So nice to see Emmy and Hank getting along together both as detectives and, er, a budding romance. (Although Hank does have quite the high opinion of himself!)
"Drooling? Over me?" Hank scoffed at her, though he knew it was most likely true. He could have his choice of women, but he'd never found the one to make him commit long term, not that he hadn't tried a time or two."
There's a fine line between confidence and cockiness and he's straddling it!
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Yes, I wanted to show Hank as the budding detective who is confident in his own skin... giving Emmy the chance to smooth out the edges and pull him into line so to speak.
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This was not a criticism. It was me understanding precisely the nuance you explain here!
Comment from Carol Clark2
Great dialogue between Hank and Emmy. It fills in some helpful details about the history of the two crime lords. The dialogue clearly shows Hank and Emmy's interest in each other without going overboard. Nicely done. Blessings.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Great dialogue between Hank and Emmy. It fills in some helpful details about the history of the two crime lords. The dialogue clearly shows Hank and Emmy's interest in each other without going overboard. Nicely done. Blessings.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Smiles and more smiles for your kindness and stars. How awesome!
Thank you, Carol~
Comment from Thesis
An interesting chapter and a good inside look at the interaction between these two. I sense more will be developed about their relationship and look forward to where it will end up. In the meantime, I wonder where the case will lead them.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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An interesting chapter and a good inside look at the interaction between these two. I sense more will be developed about their relationship and look forward to where it will end up. In the meantime, I wonder where the case will lead them.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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I appreciate your reading and finding interest in my characters. I like to mix side stories within the main storyline and am thrilled when the reader enjoys it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Shirley McLain
You're the first six for this early Sunday morning. I loved this chapter. You can feel the tension building between the two detectives. You did a great job as always. Have a great day. Shirley
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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You're the first six for this early Sunday morning. I loved this chapter. You can feel the tension building between the two detectives. You did a great job as always. Have a great day. Shirley
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Awesome, my friend. You started my early morning out with a big smile and a warm fuzzy feeling especially when its a bit nippy this morning. lol Thank you
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
It looks as though Hank and Emmy will ultimately be able to work on the case night and day. It will be interesting to see how they figure out the movements of the two families. I just read over the list of characters, and see that Cooper O'Hara is an illegitimate son. Somehow I missed that in prior reading. Anyway, it will make the story more mysterious. See you in Chapter 10.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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It looks as though Hank and Emmy will ultimately be able to work on the case night and day. It will be interesting to see how they figure out the movements of the two families. I just read over the list of characters, and see that Cooper O'Hara is an illegitimate son. Somehow I missed that in prior reading. Anyway, it will make the story more mysterious. See you in Chapter 10.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Right now Hank and Emmy are focusing on the two families but soon they will discover so many underlying stories that affect the outcome. I thank you, Lorraine, for reading and enjoying.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
It looks like Hank and Emmy have an irresistible bond between them already, and they say there is someone intended for everyone, except for the likes of Paul the apostle, but there are several here that are that way. Beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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It looks like Hank and Emmy have an irresistible bond between them already, and they say there is someone intended for everyone, except for the likes of Paul the apostle, but there are several here that are that way. Beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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i like to think that emotionally I felt a draw between my two characters and wanted them to show some of the emotions I was privileged to share. Love is a wonderful thing!
Smiles. Carol
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You?ve done that very well Carol,
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. It is interesting to read the prequel after reading the book. I liked meeting the young Hank and Emmy. I do not see any room for improvement.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. It is interesting to read the prequel after reading the book. I liked meeting the young Hank and Emmy. I do not see any room for improvement.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much. It is fun to delve into the budding love of our fair couple. It makes me smile. I hope it does the same for you.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Your stories are like stories are meant to be told. A little bit of everything speckled throughout so that you can keep readers on their toes and at attention. LOL. Thanks for sharing. :-)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Your stories are like stories are meant to be told. A little bit of everything speckled throughout so that you can keep readers on their toes and at attention. LOL. Thanks for sharing. :-)
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thank you dear friend...I always appreciate your thoughts. There are so many secrets to be revealed as the story progresses. I hope you enjoy.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
I like the way you've brought us up to speed on the crime, Carol, and eased us into the budding admiration between Hank and Emmy. Another well-written chapter.
One spag: "Mrs. O'Hara would never (would) have accepted stolen diamonds."
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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I like the way you've brought us up to speed on the crime, Carol, and eased us into the budding admiration between Hank and Emmy. Another well-written chapter.
One spag: "Mrs. O'Hara would never (would) have accepted stolen diamonds."
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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ch, Judy. I am spending the entire afternoon trying to catch up. I seem to fall so far behind and I don't like it. Glad you enjoyed.
Smiles, Carol
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Carol, you're most welcome. I thought I'd replied to this a few days ago. Now I see there are a few more with no replies. I think I must have forgotten to hit "save"!
Comment from BethShelby
This is an good chapter more about the growing admiration and chemistry these two seem to have for each other than about solving the crime. We did get some background on the two fueding families and how the robbery might have taken place.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This is an good chapter more about the growing admiration and chemistry these two seem to have for each other than about solving the crime. We did get some background on the two fueding families and how the robbery might have taken place.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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There are a lot of undercurrents and secrets that haven't been reveled yet. I hope you find them interesting and that they add to the story line.
Smiles, Carol
