I Haven't A Clue
Who did it? And with what?33 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wow! This took a lot of thought and time and work for you to execute (like what I did there, Douglas? "EXECUTE"? HAHAHAAHAH) I liked having all the characters of my daughter's favorite board game come to life in such a detailed romp. Of course it would be the contest winner! Congratulations!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Wow! This took a lot of thought and time and work for you to execute (like what I did there, Douglas? "EXECUTE"? HAHAHAAHAH) I liked having all the characters of my daughter's favorite board game come to life in such a detailed romp. Of course it would be the contest winner! Congratulations!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Thank you! Too funny! I like your sense of humor!!!
Comment from Kaiku
That was good. Just keeping the characters in line is an accomplishment. Nothing like total participation. Probably would make for a fun-filled stage production.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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That was good. Just keeping the characters in line is an accomplishment. Nothing like total participation. Probably would make for a fun-filled stage production.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Interesting idea. Thanks for the awesome review!
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my! You killed off then entire Clue Game Board members plus a new color Peach and every single one of them was guilty and every one got their due justice. It was humorous but rather long. But the length didn't keep your readers from voting this the winner! Congratulations!!
Suggest question marks in these sentences:
"Who died and made you a detective,"
"My God man, haven't you been paying attention."
These are typically in feminine forms for women:
The southern bell (belle)
attractive blond woman (blonde)
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Oh my! You killed off then entire Clue Game Board members plus a new color Peach and every single one of them was guilty and every one got their due justice. It was humorous but rather long. But the length didn't keep your readers from voting this the winner! Congratulations!!
Suggest question marks in these sentences:
"Who died and made you a detective,"
"My God man, haven't you been paying attention."
These are typically in feminine forms for women:
The southern bell (belle)
attractive blond woman (blonde)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for the awesome review and the great edits. I appreciate you!
Comment from Sanku
I can understand .This was fun to read too ,no tension or strain as to who did it .It didnt matter .The characterisation was great .very enjoyable story Congratulations for winning
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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I can understand .This was fun to read too ,no tension or strain as to who did it .It didnt matter .The characterisation was great .very enjoyable story Congratulations for winning
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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A fun write-up indeed!
Comment from nomi338
Poetic justice at its finest. Goose was cooked by the Gander, all witnesses all expired at the sight. To all that witnessed from a safe distance, I bid a mournful goodnight.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Poetic justice at its finest. Goose was cooked by the Gander, all witnesses all expired at the sight. To all that witnessed from a safe distance, I bid a mournful goodnight.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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I like your reviews, Sir! Thank you for the generous stars. Goodnight to you as well!
Comment from Soledadpaz
Biology professor! That is funny.
A monocle in each eye!
What a crackup! Half an hour vs 30 minutes.
southern (belle)
I ruled myself out, too funny!
A hilarious read! Well done.
Sol
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Biology professor! That is funny.
A monocle in each eye!
What a crackup! Half an hour vs 30 minutes.
southern (belle)
I ruled myself out, too funny!
A hilarious read! Well done.
Sol
Comment Written 20-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Soledad! I appreciate you enjoying my work and your great review!
Check out my Krasnac Christmas! No way you don?t laugh.
Happy Holidays!
Comment from pome lover
well, what a jumble of sex starved characters, with excuses, excuses, excuses. I thought the best line in the whole thing was Mrs. Peacock, saying she'd sucked the cat up in the vacuum sweeper.
You certainly did seem to have fun with this one. And that's what counts on Fan Story, I think. That, and having a bunch of other writers having fun review each others' work. Well, this was some story, all right. Original and imaginative.
Katharine
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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well, what a jumble of sex starved characters, with excuses, excuses, excuses. I thought the best line in the whole thing was Mrs. Peacock, saying she'd sucked the cat up in the vacuum sweeper.
You certainly did seem to have fun with this one. And that's what counts on Fan Story, I think. That, and having a bunch of other writers having fun review each others' work. Well, this was some story, all right. Original and imaginative.
Katharine
Comment Written 20-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Thank you! Had some fun with this one!
Comment from susand3022
Hahaha, Doug... I always loved Clue! There's always another way for Mr. Boddy to die, and I'm always up for reading another one! Banter in the Clue House is always great fun.
That would be a great reality show... everyone plays a character in the game. Trapped in the Clue House!
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Hahaha, Doug... I always loved Clue! There's always another way for Mr. Boddy to die, and I'm always up for reading another one! Banter in the Clue House is always great fun.
That would be a great reality show... everyone plays a character in the game. Trapped in the Clue House!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Thank you! That would be an awesome reality show!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This was fun to read. I need to become a fan so I don't miss any of your writing.
"Quite!" Colonel Mustard, who had entered with Mrs. Peacock, said. (move 'said' before 'Colonel' for easier reading)
Don't you agree Colonel?" (comma needed after 'agree')
"But you had a lot of good alibis my love." Plum seemed distraught. (comma needed after 'alibis')
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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This was fun to read. I need to become a fan so I don't miss any of your writing.
"Quite!" Colonel Mustard, who had entered with Mrs. Peacock, said. (move 'said' before 'Colonel' for easier reading)
Don't you agree Colonel?" (comma needed after 'agree')
"But you had a lot of good alibis my love." Plum seemed distraught. (comma needed after 'alibis')
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2022
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Thank you for fanning me and I really appreciate these edits!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Fun to write and fun to read. I especially liked the witty beginning and the way the reveal was presented - sequential 'killing' of a dead body. Kate xx
Miss Scarlet/Mrs. Scarlet consistency
"The Colonel and I will move > specify who's speaking
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Fun to write and fun to read. I especially liked the witty beginning and the way the reveal was presented - sequential 'killing' of a dead body. Kate xx
Miss Scarlet/Mrs. Scarlet consistency
"The Colonel and I will move > specify who's speaking
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the awesome review and great edits!
