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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This really was a hall of hard knocks. It is sad that this actually happened within a boarding school for boys. Someone could have been killed with the beatings which Big Bertha performed.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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This really was a hall of hard knocks. It is sad that this actually happened within a boarding school for boys. Someone could have been killed with the beatings which Big Bertha performed.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Great detailed and interesting story. I love your talent for character development.
Suggestion:
A near blank expression displayed on his face and screamed I would not get into a close chumminess with him.
(Should the word 'and' be changed to the word 'that' )
Nice work here. I am looking forward to another one!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Great detailed and interesting story. I love your talent for character development.
Suggestion:
A near blank expression displayed on his face and screamed I would not get into a close chumminess with him.
(Should the word 'and' be changed to the word 'that' )
Nice work here. I am looking forward to another one!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Appreciate your suggestion and the review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
You've brought back times, slogans, and the things that ring true about an era of war, protest, and discontentment. And then, to be stuck somewhere you didn't want to be would make things all the worse. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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You've brought back times, slogans, and the things that ring true about an era of war, protest, and discontentment. And then, to be stuck somewhere you didn't want to be would make things all the worse. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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As always, appreciate your comments, the review, and the sixer. Yea, me!
Comment from Shirley McLain
Back to your home, safe and sound. You did a wonderful job with your story as always. I'm ready to read more. I'm anxious to find out what kind of punishment "Tubbo" dished out because you ran away. Until next time. Shirley
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Back to your home, safe and sound. You did a wonderful job with your story as always. I'm ready to read more. I'm anxious to find out what kind of punishment "Tubbo" dished out because you ran away. Until next time. Shirley
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Appreciate the review and your comments.
Comment from Wendy G
What a dreadful autobiography! I cannot imagine how you coped. Your vivid writing tells a shocking story of abuse. These men were criminals re what they did to the boys, and yet they were lauded and applauded. I am "enjoying" the story still, although there were a few complex words whose meaning I didn't know - yet the boy knew them.
Well done. It must be hard to relive all this sufficiently to put it into words!
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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What a dreadful autobiography! I cannot imagine how you coped. Your vivid writing tells a shocking story of abuse. These men were criminals re what they did to the boys, and yet they were lauded and applauded. I am "enjoying" the story still, although there were a few complex words whose meaning I didn't know - yet the boy knew them.
Well done. It must be hard to relive all this sufficiently to put it into words!
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Appreciate your insightful comments and the review.
Comment from Ricky1024
This was my first read trying to dig it.
Apparently needed yto back Logue a few otherwise, interesting.
No Grammar Issues.
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional, while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly I. Rhythm.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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This was my first read trying to dig it.
Apparently needed yto back Logue a few otherwise, interesting.
No Grammar Issues.
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional, while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly I. Rhythm.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Always appreciate your reviews and comments.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Brett,
I share the sentiments of the others who commented here, it ended too soon. You tell a riveting story. When I read it I want to grab a gun and get justice for all the abused, mistreated, misunderstood youth who find themselves in an institution that is ranked just above jail. I guess I'll have to wait, but I'm curious if you ever got any form of vengeance or justice or whatever. Well done buddy.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Hello Brett,
I share the sentiments of the others who commented here, it ended too soon. You tell a riveting story. When I read it I want to grab a gun and get justice for all the abused, mistreated, misunderstood youth who find themselves in an institution that is ranked just above jail. I guess I'll have to wait, but I'm curious if you ever got any form of vengeance or justice or whatever. Well done buddy.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from judiverse
Great description of Tubbo and of Big Bertha. Very vivid and colorful. This is so intense it sounds like fiction. The boy would have avoided some trouble, anyway, if it hadn't been for his defiant attitude. He was the kind of boy who wouldn't have been satisfied just to ride it out. We'll have to see what Tubbo has in store for the boy. It's not going to be pleasant. The boy is actually playing to Tubbo's desire to inflict damage. I thought that the language might have been simplified, if the story is to be viewed through the boy's eyes. Great story you have going. judi
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Great description of Tubbo and of Big Bertha. Very vivid and colorful. This is so intense it sounds like fiction. The boy would have avoided some trouble, anyway, if it hadn't been for his defiant attitude. He was the kind of boy who wouldn't have been satisfied just to ride it out. We'll have to see what Tubbo has in store for the boy. It's not going to be pleasant. The boy is actually playing to Tubbo's desire to inflict damage. I thought that the language might have been simplified, if the story is to be viewed through the boy's eyes. Great story you have going. judi
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Appreciate your insights and the review.
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You're welcome. What a great story you have going. judi
Comment from royowen
I must admit probably hatred or its near cousin, resentment, must have burnt within you at the.apprehension you had to endure, but I suspect if you could have got your own back you would have. Men like him, are the bane of Society, I wonder how many criminals have been created in the guise of compassion. Beautifully written, blessings Roy.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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I must admit probably hatred or its near cousin, resentment, must have burnt within you at the.apprehension you had to endure, but I suspect if you could have got your own back you would have. Men like him, are the bane of Society, I wonder how many criminals have been created in the guise of compassion. Beautifully written, blessings Roy.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Appreciate your insightful comments and the review.
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Well done
Comment from Sankey
Awww, I thought it was gonna progress a bit further, today. No matter. Good writing, very exressive, and descriptive and certainly lets us all know the atmosphere. No spags.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Awww, I thought it was gonna progress a bit further, today. No matter. Good writing, very exressive, and descriptive and certainly lets us all know the atmosphere. No spags.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Always appreciate your comments and reviews.
If I had included the rest of the chapter no doubt reviewers would have told me it was too long.
So, cut it in two pieces.
Hope all is well in your world these days.
Do appreciate the sixer.
