Face with no name
Title of poem speaks for itself.30 total reviews
Comment from Marin Beck
Charity,
I want to say thank you for sharing this piece with the world. Whether we have been vulnerable and shared like this before or is is our first time, it is always a brave, admirable, and appreciated gesture.
I love that your strength, wisdom, and bravery shows through your work, and there is so much of that to be found in admitting that sometimes, we struggle. Your lack of stanzas and line-by-line delivery serve this poem so well, and I was enraptured from beginning to end. The last line of this poem fills me with hope, for both you and for me, and for that, I thank you.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Charity,
I want to say thank you for sharing this piece with the world. Whether we have been vulnerable and shared like this before or is is our first time, it is always a brave, admirable, and appreciated gesture.
I love that your strength, wisdom, and bravery shows through your work, and there is so much of that to be found in admitting that sometimes, we struggle. Your lack of stanzas and line-by-line delivery serve this poem so well, and I was enraptured from beginning to end. The last line of this poem fills me with hope, for both you and for me, and for that, I thank you.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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You welcome. I'm so haply this pome touched you. Yes don't give up. It's always hope left.
Comment from Crystal Gamet
Wow, powerful! I can really feel the emotion in this poem. I really hope you are no longer in this relationship. I am so sorry for everything you have been through.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Wow, powerful! I can really feel the emotion in this poem. I really hope you are no longer in this relationship. I am so sorry for everything you have been through.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Thank you. Yes my poetry is raw.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think we are to blame for the life we lead, if we don't care about ourselves, then others will not care for us either. It requires much strength to fight for our right to live well and some give up the fight too easily. Life is what we make it. It sounds like you are starting to believe in yourself, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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I think we are to blame for the life we lead, if we don't care about ourselves, then others will not care for us either. It requires much strength to fight for our right to live well and some give up the fight too easily. Life is what we make it. It sounds like you are starting to believe in yourself, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Thanks for reading my poem.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
another powerful poem about relationships, toxic and otherwise. I like the first stanza I am a face with no name as it sums up the somber mood of the poem just perfectly.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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another powerful poem about relationships, toxic and otherwise. I like the first stanza I am a face with no name as it sums up the somber mood of the poem just perfectly.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Thanks 😊.
Comment from Michael Cassar
The pain divulged in this poem seem complex, webbed in personalities' problems and a battle of emotions. It reflects a coexistence of the poet and his partner engaged in power struggle. The relationship might have been going on for some time, and there does not seem to be room either for mitigation or reconciliation.
The final verse might be the solution:
Maybe it's time for me to finally let you go.
Or does the poet thrive in such hostile relation?
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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The pain divulged in this poem seem complex, webbed in personalities' problems and a battle of emotions. It reflects a coexistence of the poet and his partner engaged in power struggle. The relationship might have been going on for some time, and there does not seem to be room either for mitigation or reconciliation.
The final verse might be the solution:
Maybe it's time for me to finally let you go.
Or does the poet thrive in such hostile relation?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Yes the final verse is the only solution.
Comment from Goosey Gander
I always read the notes on the author's profile when I read stories or poems by them, and I feel like your motivation is wonderful. The last line completely sums up the poem, but more finally. You were so creative in your rhymes and the meter. I was practically tapping my foot the entire time! Thank you for sharing, I look forward to reading more of your writing.
-GG
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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I always read the notes on the author's profile when I read stories or poems by them, and I feel like your motivation is wonderful. The last line completely sums up the poem, but more finally. You were so creative in your rhymes and the meter. I was practically tapping my foot the entire time! Thank you for sharing, I look forward to reading more of your writing.
-GG
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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I'm glad you truly enjoyed my poem. Thanks for checking my profile out too.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
So, so good to read Charity once again. I haven't been able to do much of anything on FS for so long but when I looked and saw your name in my message box, I just had to go to it.
Such vitality and such pain and frustration in every word. I have missed you so much. I just love reading you. I know your words are simple and straight forward, but I think that is what keeps drawing me back to them.
Thanks for such a clear description of oh so many, men today. Sometimes it makes me ashamed to be in the same category as them. We men just can't seem to get our priorities straight: God, woman, country. It's as simple as that. There are other things, but they come along later on.
Thanks for making my evening one I can rest on.
Very good Charity
Gary M
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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So, so good to read Charity once again. I haven't been able to do much of anything on FS for so long but when I looked and saw your name in my message box, I just had to go to it.
Such vitality and such pain and frustration in every word. I have missed you so much. I just love reading you. I know your words are simple and straight forward, but I think that is what keeps drawing me back to them.
Thanks for such a clear description of oh so many, men today. Sometimes it makes me ashamed to be in the same category as them. We men just can't seem to get our priorities straight: God, woman, country. It's as simple as that. There are other things, but they come along later on.
Thanks for making my evening one I can rest on.
Very good Charity
Gary M
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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I'm so glad I made your evening. I'm so happy you are back reviewing poems again.
Comment from susand3022
charity, Charity, CHARITY!!! I'm pretty sure this is the brother, or cousin, or some relative, of the asshole I finally got rid of after 10 LONG years! The man, who in the beginning, I only wanted as a 1-night-stand, (I know that sounds terrible, but I just got rid of the last 8-year asshole) and he swept me off my feet. After the first kiss, I knew I was done.
Weak in the knees done.
It turned into 10 years of,
Never meeting any of his friends
Only meeting family members by accident
Having to take care of his father when he almost lost his leg, as the man lived like a nomad in a van.
He never took me out...
Except, for when he would need a ride home from the local bar, need a ride home, so ask me if I wanted to come out for a drink... at 12:30am
Being ignored all the time
Being told, 'you just don't know...' (oh yeah... I know that line)
Being told, 'you won't understand unless you do the work yourself' and being directed to a mountain of books and articles, as though I'm too stupid to comprehend a basic sentence.
And on and on it went...
Later, I found out that... he was living with two of us, not one.
I'd never gotten payback before... but Charity, it is sweet... just like they say!
Susan ;)
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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charity, Charity, CHARITY!!! I'm pretty sure this is the brother, or cousin, or some relative, of the asshole I finally got rid of after 10 LONG years! The man, who in the beginning, I only wanted as a 1-night-stand, (I know that sounds terrible, but I just got rid of the last 8-year asshole) and he swept me off my feet. After the first kiss, I knew I was done.
Weak in the knees done.
It turned into 10 years of,
Never meeting any of his friends
Only meeting family members by accident
Having to take care of his father when he almost lost his leg, as the man lived like a nomad in a van.
He never took me out...
Except, for when he would need a ride home from the local bar, need a ride home, so ask me if I wanted to come out for a drink... at 12:30am
Being ignored all the time
Being told, 'you just don't know...' (oh yeah... I know that line)
Being told, 'you won't understand unless you do the work yourself' and being directed to a mountain of books and articles, as though I'm too stupid to comprehend a basic sentence.
And on and on it went...
Later, I found out that... he was living with two of us, not one.
I'd never gotten payback before... but Charity, it is sweet... just like they say!
Susan ;)
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Thank you for sharing your story. I'm sorry. Thanks for your feedback.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I can see where you love and then think you should let go. Many times, in life we do lose our sense of humor and find there is nothing to laugh about anymore. This is how I relate to your poem. Do you think, what is the use to go on, if there is no communication, no love?
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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I can see where you love and then think you should let go. Many times, in life we do lose our sense of humor and find there is nothing to laugh about anymore. This is how I relate to your poem. Do you think, what is the use to go on, if there is no communication, no love?
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from nomi338
Your words clearly define the state of far too many relationships and the problems that are endemic to them. Sometimes the hardest, yet the best solution is to just let it go, and having let it go, then let it die, and once it has died, do not visit its grave. Your voice is strong my sister. Keep on keeping on.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Your words clearly define the state of far too many relationships and the problems that are endemic to them. Sometimes the hardest, yet the best solution is to just let it go, and having let it go, then let it die, and once it has died, do not visit its grave. Your voice is strong my sister. Keep on keeping on.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Good to hear from you.
