Face with no name
Title of poem speaks for itself.30 total reviews
Comment from Marienkiefer
Hello Charity,
-Your poem is extremely relevant to readers as many may be able to point out areas in relationships that are not working and, perhaps, draw meaningful parallels.
-You have shifted the scene here. This poem provides an interesting setting, within a domestic landscape, in order to portray this relationship. You have done this well here.
-Voicing what seems to be irritating you about the person, the situation and you in this situation, and through your writing you proceed to view the relationship in a different light, with a more critical eye.
-There are strong lines, and rhyming sequences that indicate a purging and declutterjng of thoughts to see things for what they are in the relationship. This cleaning house analogy works well in your poem to illustrate certain inconsistencies and disagreements you encounter in fundamental areas while living with this person.
-When everything you do is undone then you are back to square one or it is a zero sum game.
Do the word choices in your poem indicate that you feel ready to move on?
Cannot wait to see what you do next, Charity. All the best.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Hello Charity,
-Your poem is extremely relevant to readers as many may be able to point out areas in relationships that are not working and, perhaps, draw meaningful parallels.
-You have shifted the scene here. This poem provides an interesting setting, within a domestic landscape, in order to portray this relationship. You have done this well here.
-Voicing what seems to be irritating you about the person, the situation and you in this situation, and through your writing you proceed to view the relationship in a different light, with a more critical eye.
-There are strong lines, and rhyming sequences that indicate a purging and declutterjng of thoughts to see things for what they are in the relationship. This cleaning house analogy works well in your poem to illustrate certain inconsistencies and disagreements you encounter in fundamental areas while living with this person.
-When everything you do is undone then you are back to square one or it is a zero sum game.
Do the word choices in your poem indicate that you feel ready to move on?
Cannot wait to see what you do next, Charity. All the best.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Thank you always for your detailed feedback.
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You are very welcome, Charity.All the best.🌸
Comment from Lilly Flowers
Yes, it's time for her to finally let him go! Nothing frustrates me more than women who stay in abusive relationships. Intellectually, I understand the fear they have and that they may be emotionally crippled from an abusive childhood, but emotionally it drives me crazy.
This is another excellent offering from you. Each and every line is captivating. Well done, Charity. Regards, Lilly
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Yes, it's time for her to finally let him go! Nothing frustrates me more than women who stay in abusive relationships. Intellectually, I understand the fear they have and that they may be emotionally crippled from an abusive childhood, but emotionally it drives me crazy.
This is another excellent offering from you. Each and every line is captivating. Well done, Charity. Regards, Lilly
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Thanks for your review.
Comment from R.B.Bunn
This was a great poem detailing a toxic relationship. Very blunt and stark and honest. Some lines struck me as darkly humorous though the situation is no laughing matter. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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This was a great poem detailing a toxic relationship. Very blunt and stark and honest. Some lines struck me as darkly humorous though the situation is no laughing matter. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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You welcome. Yes some lines were meant to be dark and humorous.
Comment from Teri7
Charity, This is a very well written poem that is full of truth and sadness. You used very good descriptive words and very interesting imagery. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Charity, This is a very well written poem that is full of truth and sadness. You used very good descriptive words and very interesting imagery. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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You welcome.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This sounds like a journal or diary entry describing a toxic relationship. Your title and artwork are perfect for this piece. You tell your story in smooth flowing rhymes using gentle words. You don't sound angry. You sound like a woman who wonders where her relationship is going...if it is going at all. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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This sounds like a journal or diary entry describing a toxic relationship. Your title and artwork are perfect for this piece. You tell your story in smooth flowing rhymes using gentle words. You don't sound angry. You sound like a woman who wonders where her relationship is going...if it is going at all. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Thanks for your amazing review.
Comment from JoannaN
Hello, your poem is moving. We can imagine what is happening, we can feel the pain. Sometimes you need to end with something in order to begin something new and better. This guy stinks!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Hello, your poem is moving. We can imagine what is happening, we can feel the pain. Sometimes you need to end with something in order to begin something new and better. This guy stinks!
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Thanks for the 6 stars.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
By the time I got to the last line, I was in complete agreement with what you said, it's time to let go! Yes it is, and now you have come to that decision, you should walk away and start a new life. The poem spoke loud and clear of how you've been used and abused. Time to go!! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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By the time I got to the last line, I was in complete agreement with what you said, it's time to let go! Yes it is, and now you have come to that decision, you should walk away and start a new life. The poem spoke loud and clear of how you've been used and abused. Time to go!! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Face with No Name, definitely creates a picture of a relationship on the rocks and headed for destruction. It actually sounds like the ship has sailed.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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This poem, Face with No Name, definitely creates a picture of a relationship on the rocks and headed for destruction. It actually sounds like the ship has sailed.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much
Comment from Sanku
The last lines is the most important point. Having borne bitterness at the callous treatment from your partner finally you have decided to quit .brave decision. I hope this is not personal .God bless
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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The last lines is the most important point. Having borne bitterness at the callous treatment from your partner finally you have decided to quit .brave decision. I hope this is not personal .God bless
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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So true. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Wendy G
Your poem expresses a very toxic relationship and hopefully your last line is an indication that you have had the courage to walk away from it, so you can learn to hold your head up high again and regain some positive self esteem. Written simply and with raw honesty, your stark words are very confronting. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Your poem expresses a very toxic relationship and hopefully your last line is an indication that you have had the courage to walk away from it, so you can learn to hold your head up high again and regain some positive self esteem. Written simply and with raw honesty, your stark words are very confronting. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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Thank you my friend.
