The Best Time of Ohmie's Life
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Comment from Michaela Moore
Such fun! Ohmie is being the spy and doing the spy things. I enjoyed his thoughts and humor during these suspensful moments. I think I enjoy Ohmies thoughts most in this book. Even when his thoughts are morose, they are always laced with his cheeky humorous attitude.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Such fun! Ohmie is being the spy and doing the spy things. I enjoyed his thoughts and humor during these suspensful moments. I think I enjoy Ohmies thoughts most in this book. Even when his thoughts are morose, they are always laced with his cheeky humorous attitude.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Thank you.
Yeah, I agree. "It's not like he has to buy me anymore birthday presents."
Comment from Judy Lawless
It is long, Wayne, but of course you had to keep going until Ohmie got out of there. Your imagination that creates all the detail of this chapter is impressive - Ohmie's analysing the situation, knowing by sound what the guard is up to. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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It is long, Wayne, but of course you had to keep going until Ohmie got out of there. Your imagination that creates all the detail of this chapter is impressive - Ohmie's analysing the situation, knowing by sound what the guard is up to. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you. Ohmie has a pretty good head to get into.
(smiley face here)
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You?re welcome, Wayne. I can tell you have fun with this.
Comment from lyenochka
Whew! I'm glad he got out of there. But I'm getting whiplash going back from caveman Ohmie to high-tech Ohmie, even though he denies being a computer geek. I had to smile at his noting how a smoker could go without for four hours. Good use of the hearing sense to note the sounds of shoes and "staccato" speech. To me, all Slavic languages are staccato because of the strongly stressed syllables.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Whew! I'm glad he got out of there. But I'm getting whiplash going back from caveman Ohmie to high-tech Ohmie, even though he denies being a computer geek. I had to smile at his noting how a smoker could go without for four hours. Good use of the hearing sense to note the sounds of shoes and "staccato" speech. To me, all Slavic languages are staccato because of the strongly stressed syllables.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you for a great review.
Comment from Wendy G
Well, that was a nail-biting one - poor Ohmie, so sick and yet working through the night. Let's hope he has something useful. His parents won't be happy and Mrs B will be in trouble for letting him out of her sight.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Well, that was a nail-biting one - poor Ohmie, so sick and yet working through the night. Let's hope he has something useful. His parents won't be happy and Mrs B will be in trouble for letting him out of her sight.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you. And thank you for finding the building scene credible. I wondered about it.
Comment from Susan Newell
Wayne,
A most excellent chapter in the Best Times of Ohmie's life. He's quite the little spy. It is very well written in the character of a young kid. I liked following his thought processes. Alas, I'm out of sixes. Great chapter!
Sue
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Wayne,
A most excellent chapter in the Best Times of Ohmie's life. He's quite the little spy. It is very well written in the character of a young kid. I liked following his thought processes. Alas, I'm out of sixes. Great chapter!
Sue
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the great review.
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Always welcome, Wayne.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Very nice! I thought you did a great job with this chapter. It's enjoyable. My only thought was at times I think showing would be better.
>>It was a bit of a hassle at the customs desk. I guess Belarus doesn't like Ukrainians much. I convinced them that I was really Frenc
This is interesting. Why not show this using dialogue or internal thought (or both). I think this type of conflict is great for developing a story and adding suspense.
Well done! I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Very nice! I thought you did a great job with this chapter. It's enjoyable. My only thought was at times I think showing would be better.
>>It was a bit of a hassle at the customs desk. I guess Belarus doesn't like Ukrainians much. I convinced them that I was really Frenc
This is interesting. Why not show this using dialogue or internal thought (or both). I think this type of conflict is great for developing a story and adding suspense.
Well done! I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Thank you. Great idea. Thanks.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I can't imagine that anyone Ohmie's age would know who Amos McCoy is; I would stick a different arthritic sloth in there as a cultural reference.
Ohmie's parents are going to be furious with him for what he did, but they will also probably end up being thankful for what he was able to lift off of the computers.
Another good tell, Wayne:-)
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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I can't imagine that anyone Ohmie's age would know who Amos McCoy is; I would stick a different arthritic sloth in there as a cultural reference.
Ohmie's parents are going to be furious with him for what he did, but they will also probably end up being thankful for what he was able to lift off of the computers.
Another good tell, Wayne:-)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Thank you.
Yes, I give away my age.
Ohmie, the prodigy who went to school and plays the violin probably did not watch METV, either. (reruns)
Comment from Ricky1024
This Chapter was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks and have a blessed week.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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This Chapter was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks and have a blessed week.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the very nice review.
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Thank you for a very kind review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Ohmie is proving so adaptive and resiliant. Glad you got him out of the jeopardy of that building. Couldn't you also work a miracle and get him out of the jeopardy of the disease? I love the guy, and medical research is advancing so quickly... Kate xx
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Ohmie is proving so adaptive and resiliant. Glad you got him out of the jeopardy of that building. Couldn't you also work a miracle and get him out of the jeopardy of the disease? I love the guy, and medical research is advancing so quickly... Kate xx
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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lol.
Thank you. And thank you again.
