Tanka Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "Dusk Deepens"Romantic Tanka Poems
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Comment from Kaiku
Oh, to have cries for me! The artwork is wonderful and your words bring it life. I am not familiar with this style of poetry. It can certainly bring a greater breadth of inclusiveness and meaning. Thank you.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Oh, to have cries for me! The artwork is wonderful and your words bring it life. I am not familiar with this style of poetry. It can certainly bring a greater breadth of inclusiveness and meaning. Thank you.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
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My pleasure.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is one of those poems that makes me wonder which came first the artwork or the poem. Which inspired which? For some reason my eyes focused on fox. Not sure why that is. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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This is one of those poems that makes me wonder which came first the artwork or the poem. Which inspired which? For some reason my eyes focused on fox. Not sure why that is. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Barbara. I hope you are having a great day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Sugarray77
Excellent work on this form, Gypsy. I enjoyed the nuances you included in your choice of words... great theme. You always do such a stellar job on the Tanka forms. I liked it.
Melissa
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Excellent work on this form, Gypsy. I enjoyed the nuances you included in your choice of words... great theme. You always do such a stellar job on the Tanka forms. I liked it.
Melissa
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Melissa, it's always a pleasure to hear from you. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Gypsy
"Love the ones who understand you and forget the ones that don't." -- Nikki Rowe
Comment from Thomas Blanks
No, I do not want to see the rules for this style of poetry, Tanka, but no tanka (haha). I trust you. Your subject matter is one-sided love. Is that ever the story of my life! I'd tell you about it, but they don't make
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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No, I do not want to see the rules for this style of poetry, Tanka, but no tanka (haha). I trust you. Your subject matter is one-sided love. Is that ever the story of my life! I'd tell you about it, but they don't make
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Thomas, it's always good to hear from you. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. I would like to hear it over a couple of drinks, it's the story of my life too. LoL
Gypsy hugs
Gypsy
"Love the ones who understand you and forget the ones that don't." -- Nikki Rowe
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I see that I didn't finish my sentence... I was going to say... They don't make the box big enough. LOL.
Comment from royowen
What a lovely tanka Gypsy, the tragedy of unfortunate male lovers who for one reason or another, perhaps off to war, or called away to pursue work. Beautifully written My friend, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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What a lovely tanka Gypsy, the tragedy of unfortunate male lovers who for one reason or another, perhaps off to war, or called away to pursue work. Beautifully written My friend, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Thank you!
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"Love the ones who understand you and forget the ones that don't." - Nikki Rowe
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Well done
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The picture is perfect, and yet I need to ask, enjoyable though this is, why line one has but three syllables and the total therefore is less than
thirty-one. Likely because the requirement can vary slightly?
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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The picture is perfect, and yet I need to ask, enjoyable though this is, why line one has but three syllables and the total therefore is less than
thirty-one. Likely because the requirement can vary slightly?
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Hello, Tom, good question. Tanka is 31 syllables OR LESS. the same with haiku 17 syllables OR LESS. The reason is that Japanese syllables and English syllables are different. For example, a famous Japanese haiku written by the father of haiku, Master Matsuo Basho, is the following
In Japanese:
Furu ike ya 5 syllables
kawazu tobikomu 7 syllables
mizu no oto 5 syllables
same haiku in English translation
Old pond 2 syllables
frogs jumped in 3 syllables
sound of water. 4 syllables
click here to read WHY 17 OR LESS SYLLABLES
thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Thank you!
Gypsy hugs
"Love the ones who understand you and forget the ones that don't." - Nikki Rowe
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By the way are contractions consider 1 or 2 syllables?
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Yes, contraptions are 2 syllables.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from Jasmine Girl
It's great that you are making a collection of Tanka poems. I like Chie Yoshii's art work, so pure and so perfect. It's sad that such an attractive woman or vixen can't find love.
Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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It's great that you are making a collection of Tanka poems. I like Chie Yoshii's art work, so pure and so perfect. It's sad that such an attractive woman or vixen can't find love.
Well done.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Thank you!
Gypsy hugs
"Love the ones who understand you and forget the ones that don't." - Nikki Rowe
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your Tanka poem- Excellent picture presentation- amazing eyes- fox for sure! Excellent flow- paints a vivid picture - great notes help- I know something about one sided - dis-good- no Lily scented pilliow unfortunately- good job
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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I like your Tanka poem- Excellent picture presentation- amazing eyes- fox for sure! Excellent flow- paints a vivid picture - great notes help- I know something about one sided - dis-good- no Lily scented pilliow unfortunately- good job
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Ap, Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
So much emotion is described here first with the mix of feelings as the day ends in dusk, and then the longing cries of the fox moving us to the longing of the narrator over the one-sided love. Great picture, too!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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So much emotion is described here first with the mix of feelings as the day ends in dusk, and then the longing cries of the fox moving us to the longing of the narrator over the one-sided love. Great picture, too!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, big sister. I'm happy you understand it so well. Love you ❤️
Marival
Comment from Liz Westfall
I really enjoyed your tanka! I'm not super familiar with the format, but I think it was an effective piece. I enjoyed the images you attached, too. I hope your piece does well in the club entry contest!
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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I really enjoyed your tanka! I'm not super familiar with the format, but I think it was an effective piece. I enjoyed the images you attached, too. I hope your piece does well in the club entry contest!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs