With You
A perfect evening is watching the stars with her.3 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
A good entry to the monostich contest. The text is a good size. The message is clearly stated. I think it would be better if after the word stars you added "as we". The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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A good entry to the monostich contest. The text is a good size. The message is clearly stated. I think it would be better if after the word stars you added "as we". The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Took your advice. Thanks.
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Glad you were receptive to my suggestion. It sounds now more romantic and personal.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done. I thought this was a beautiful poem. I love how you have just one sentence but it says so much. There is such a feeling of love - and loved the getting lost in each other part the best.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Nicely done. I thought this was a beautiful poem. I love how you have just one sentence but it says so much. There is such a feeling of love - and loved the getting lost in each other part the best.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review. Appreciated.
Comment from R.B.Bunn
I've never seen this format before, but it feels like you did it well. I like the twist of the stars getting lost in each other rather than the lovers getting lost in the stars. That really gives a cosmic scope to their love. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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I've never seen this format before, but it feels like you did it well. I like the twist of the stars getting lost in each other rather than the lovers getting lost in the stars. That really gives a cosmic scope to their love. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and the encouraging review. Appreciated.
