The Best Time of Ohmie's Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Best Time of Ohmie's Life pt 19"Dying of cancer, Ohmie learns his parents are spie
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Comment from lyenochka
Oh, that Ohmie, he's unstoppable and he doesn't know what he's getting himself into nor how long his body will hold up. But I particularly liked his convincing Mrs. Benoir. (Why not Mme Benoir?) I think that dialogue was particularly well done because you made it clear about what was said and the conversation that wasn't being spoken.
I have to laugh at " Boy, it was hard not to be a twit" as that really makes the teenager in Ohmie very realistic.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Oh, that Ohmie, he's unstoppable and he doesn't know what he's getting himself into nor how long his body will hold up. But I particularly liked his convincing Mrs. Benoir. (Why not Mme Benoir?) I think that dialogue was particularly well done because you made it clear about what was said and the conversation that wasn't being spoken.
I have to laugh at " Boy, it was hard not to be a twit" as that really makes the teenager in Ohmie very realistic.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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lol.
Thank you for a great review.
I never thought about Mme (never knew how to abbreviate it, either)
I'm gonna do a 'change all'. Thank you.
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The next time I get a chance to nominate a reviewer, you get it. No matter if I put it on one where all you say is "hello".
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Well, at least a change all for onlhy Mrs. Benoir. Lol. Change-alls are dangerous.
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Yes they are. I've been bitten several times. lol
Comment from Wendy G
Ohmie is very witty and clever - and quite a good actor too. I wonder how much Mrs Benoit really knows, but he seems to be getting away with his little scheme. Looking forward to more.
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Ohmie is very witty and clever - and quite a good actor too. I wonder how much Mrs Benoit really knows, but he seems to be getting away with his little scheme. Looking forward to more.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Susan Newell
Wayne,
What a great chapter. Ohmie is taking charge. Nothing can keep a good Ohmie down, not even a Mrs. Benoir. I really enjoyed this one. I think I found one "oops."
Sue
"Surely, you understand," Mrs. Benoir. -- quotes after Benoir?
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Wayne,
What a great chapter. Ohmie is taking charge. Nothing can keep a good Ohmie down, not even a Mrs. Benoir. I really enjoyed this one. I think I found one "oops."
Sue
"Surely, you understand," Mrs. Benoir. -- quotes after Benoir?
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Yes, you did. oops.
Thank you for the review.
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Welcome.
Comment from Judy Lawless
So now, Ohmie is venturing out on his own, taking charge of part of the case. You've done a great job of writing this, Wayne. I can visualize all of it and have concerns for Ohmie's health too. His excuse for leaving gave me a chuckle. He played it well.
One little spag: "Surely, you understand," Mrs. Benoir. - the closing quotation marks should be after Benoir.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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So now, Ohmie is venturing out on his own, taking charge of part of the case. You've done a great job of writing this, Wayne. I can visualize all of it and have concerns for Ohmie's health too. His excuse for leaving gave me a chuckle. He played it well.
One little spag: "Surely, you understand," Mrs. Benoir. - the closing quotation marks should be after Benoir.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Yes, you caught it. Thank you.
And thank you for the review.
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You?re most welcome, Wayne.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a fine chapter in the best time of. Perhaps the best of the best times? I particularly liked the romantic invention, pretty good for a thirteen-year old? Sorry for the poor reward - it's the wrong time of the week as always. Kate xx
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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This is a fine chapter in the best time of. Perhaps the best of the best times? I particularly liked the romantic invention, pretty good for a thirteen-year old? Sorry for the poor reward - it's the wrong time of the week as always. Kate xx
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the five!
According to Ohmie, the best of the best is yet to come.
Thank you for the review.
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well of course, he is a resourceful young fellow. K
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I like the chapters where you've focused on Ohmie, and you've really written him well in this chapter. Thinking like a teenage spy while outsmarting Mrs. Benoir.
Good chapter, Wayne!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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I like the chapters where you've focused on Ohmie, and you've really written him well in this chapter. Thinking like a teenage spy while outsmarting Mrs. Benoir.
Good chapter, Wayne!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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I wish I could put Ohmie in every scene, but alas.... first person narrative and to keep Ohmie dying of cancer.
Thank you for the review.
