Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 139 "Viral Poem"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
2 total reviews
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A nice, crisp poem that lays out the scientific facts. I love the humor: a post that will not go viral. The notes below the post are fascinating in there details. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
  |
A nice, crisp poem that lays out the scientific facts. I love the humor: a post that will not go viral. The notes below the post are fascinating in there details. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
-
Thanks for the review, Theodore. Or do people call you Ted? Any suggestions for improvement?
Comment from susand3022
EEEK! AIONA! Aside from being a budding poet, and a sailor, you're a scientist? That's slightly intimidating. lol I used to know things about stuff like that, but I'm afraid it's all gotten way too advanced for me. I was talking to my son last semester after his Bio lab. Mind you, it was his first and only Bio class that he had to take. I asked him what he did in lab that night, he says, "We replicated RNA." I was like, WHAT??? When I was in college, we could look at a DNA strand as a model, or a picture, but our little class microscopes weren't the kind that would allow US to see actual DNA. Now, in Bio 101 they're replicating RNA? How far the world has come!
Now, your Lune poem...
The center line is only 2 syllables... needs to be 3! Maybe, 'will bind to' will do?
Hope this helps, Good luck with the Lune contest! :) Susan
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
|
EEEK! AIONA! Aside from being a budding poet, and a sailor, you're a scientist? That's slightly intimidating. lol I used to know things about stuff like that, but I'm afraid it's all gotten way too advanced for me. I was talking to my son last semester after his Bio lab. Mind you, it was his first and only Bio class that he had to take. I asked him what he did in lab that night, he says, "We replicated RNA." I was like, WHAT??? When I was in college, we could look at a DNA strand as a model, or a picture, but our little class microscopes weren't the kind that would allow US to see actual DNA. Now, in Bio 101 they're replicating RNA? How far the world has come!
Now, your Lune poem...
The center line is only 2 syllables... needs to be 3! Maybe, 'will bind to' will do?
Hope this helps, Good luck with the Lune contest! :) Susan
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
-
Thank you, Susan, for noting the syllable count. I think I intended it to have three syllables, but was interrupted in my typing by my kids needing breakfast. Ah, the life of a writer.
-
Kids? Is this a new development? How did I miss this?