Kids Thoughts
This was a sad day3 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet! You have two votes now.
I fancy sad songs, films and stories so your sad poem stood out from the rest.
I love how you didn't explain why the child's father is dead.
Maybe he was a soldier or victim of a crime or he had an accident.
Either way the young boy is in pain obviously he had a close relationship with him and now misses him.
And he is trying to come to terms with the radical change in his life.
He wants to know what happens after a loved ones die. Are they still in some way connected to us?
He is sad but also angry towards life .. he feels it is unjust to grow up without his father.
What he doesn't understand is that
Life is often NOT fair , he learnt the lesson earlier than most do. (Sigh)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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Ciao poet! You have two votes now.
I fancy sad songs, films and stories so your sad poem stood out from the rest.
I love how you didn't explain why the child's father is dead.
Maybe he was a soldier or victim of a crime or he had an accident.
Either way the young boy is in pain obviously he had a close relationship with him and now misses him.
And he is trying to come to terms with the radical change in his life.
He wants to know what happens after a loved ones die. Are they still in some way connected to us?
He is sad but also angry towards life .. he feels it is unjust to grow up without his father.
What he doesn't understand is that
Life is often NOT fair , he learnt the lesson earlier than most do. (Sigh)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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This was how kids must have felt the day of the terrorist attacks.
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I miss you.
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Hope you are ok!
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Please review my
To God poem
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good poem. The text size is great. The message of missing a deceased dad is told clearly. I'm unsure if it meets the requirements for the prompt. The poem doesn't straightforward address sadness. The visual fits well with your text. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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This is a good poem. The text size is great. The message of missing a deceased dad is told clearly. I'm unsure if it meets the requirements for the prompt. The poem doesn't straightforward address sadness. The visual fits well with your text. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Thanks!
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You are welcome.
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All throughout the poem you can tell kids are sad.
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I don't know how the emotion is to be presented. If you are comfortable with your submission that is all that counts.
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Right
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Beautiful and moving. I enjoyed the simple yet fluid rhymes, and the pom really flows like a sad story, but you can read hope and healing between the lines.
Great post!!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Beautiful and moving. I enjoyed the simple yet fluid rhymes, and the pom really flows like a sad story, but you can read hope and healing between the lines.
Great post!!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Thanks!
