Novella - Unwanted Dog
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Comment from Shirley McLain
I think you had a very large chip on your shoulder to go along with a strong will and determination. I am beginning to think you will somehow make it out of there. You did a great job. Have a wonderful evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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I think you had a very large chip on your shoulder to go along with a strong will and determination. I am beginning to think you will somehow make it out of there. You did a great job. Have a wonderful evening. Shirley
Comment Written 28-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from BethShelby
I was anxious that you not have to be retureed to that place you hated so much, but I'm not seeing a way out for you here. I can't imagine your frustuation and what your punishment might be when you are returned. I'm wondering if there is still a way out or if you will excape again later. I'm enjoying the way your are showing your feeling at this point. I would have thought they would have given you more to eat that something from the vending machine. You could have at least had a soda.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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I was anxious that you not have to be retureed to that place you hated so much, but I'm not seeing a way out for you here. I can't imagine your frustuation and what your punishment might be when you are returned. I'm wondering if there is still a way out or if you will excape again later. I'm enjoying the way your are showing your feeling at this point. I would have thought they would have given you more to eat that something from the vending machine. You could have at least had a soda.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from judiverse
I wasn't familiar with the song you led off with this time. Were there not any officers who worked with juveniles? If he had been able to explain his situation to a social services type, he might not have been so upset. I suspect the boy would have been handled differently had it been current times. At any rate, he's about ready to explode. This is really an absorbing story, and I'm curious to see what the next move will be. judi
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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I wasn't familiar with the song you led off with this time. Were there not any officers who worked with juveniles? If he had been able to explain his situation to a social services type, he might not have been so upset. I suspect the boy would have been handled differently had it been current times. At any rate, he's about ready to explode. This is really an absorbing story, and I'm curious to see what the next move will be. judi
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
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You're welcome, and I'm really into the story. judi
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Fair to say Brett doesn't like hermitage Hall? lol
Getting out of the range of the stinking aroma my olfactories seized on pleased me. - needs a comma after 'aroma'
The problem remained I did not enjoy myself one iota. - maybe 'that' after after 'remained'?
If graphic physical violence disturbs you suggest you may wish to avoid reading Chapter Seventeen. - maybe ... disturbs you(,) (I) suggest you...
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Fair to say Brett doesn't like hermitage Hall? lol
Getting out of the range of the stinking aroma my olfactories seized on pleased me. - needs a comma after 'aroma'
The problem remained I did not enjoy myself one iota. - maybe 'that' after after 'remained'?
If graphic physical violence disturbs you suggest you may wish to avoid reading Chapter Seventeen. - maybe ... disturbs you(,) (I) suggest you...
Best wishes.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm figuring you weren't going back to Hermitage without a fight. LOL. I remember being locked away in the Kincaide Home for the first time. An eat or be eaten kind of place. Our instincts say fight like heck. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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I'm figuring you weren't going back to Hermitage without a fight. LOL. I remember being locked away in the Kincaide Home for the first time. An eat or be eaten kind of place. Our instincts say fight like heck. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Your responses make me want to interview you more and more. You sound like you have had quite amazing experiences. Always appreciate your comments.
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I think we both would have a great time sitting down and talking about all of our experiences. The good, the bad, and the ugly. LOL.
Comment from Sankey
Well done, once again. So glad I made it in here before the phoney money disappeared. I do need to get back to writing, myself. You leave us in no doubt about how you were feeling.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Well done, once again. So glad I made it in here before the phoney money disappeared. I do need to get back to writing, myself. You leave us in no doubt about how you were feeling.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Your insights and the review much appreciated.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Brett,
Though I didn't experience the imprisonment that you did, I can relate, at least in part, the feeling of being trapped and unable to escape. The frustration and fear of being returned to a place that you hated would way heavy on anyone. I'm truly sorry that this is a true story. No one should have to experience what you experienced. Great writing. I felt every emotion. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I hope that writing this is proving to be therapeutic. Thanks for sharing.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Hello Brett,
Though I didn't experience the imprisonment that you did, I can relate, at least in part, the feeling of being trapped and unable to escape. The frustration and fear of being returned to a place that you hated would way heavy on anyone. I'm truly sorry that this is a true story. No one should have to experience what you experienced. Great writing. I felt every emotion. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I hope that writing this is proving to be therapeutic. Thanks for sharing.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Wendy G
It is so disturbing that this was your life. It is brutally raw and authentic and so unlike what any boy or youth should have to experience. I hope that by some miracle you were able to not be returned there. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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It is so disturbing that this was your life. It is brutally raw and authentic and so unlike what any boy or youth should have to experience. I hope that by some miracle you were able to not be returned there. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Wendy
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I can't imagine what it would be like to live that sort of life. I can understand not wanting to return to the orphanage. Maybe if you had explained how you felt and why things would have changed in your favor.Well done.Nancy:)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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I can't imagine what it would be like to live that sort of life. I can understand not wanting to return to the orphanage. Maybe if you had explained how you felt and why things would have changed in your favor.Well done.Nancy:)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I wonder why they took you to the police station, rather than straight to Hermitage Hall, if that was the plan, Brett. Would they have listened to you if you told them why you didn't want to go back? I think I would have tried. It will be interesting to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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I wonder why they took you to the police station, rather than straight to Hermitage Hall, if that was the plan, Brett. Would they have listened to you if you told them why you didn't want to go back? I think I would have tried. It will be interesting to see what happens next.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review. Nope, did not believe they wanted to hear one sound I made.
