Sadness
Emotions contest entry3 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
You surprise the reader in the last few stanzas with your comments on the FanStory contests. Hang in there. Your success is probably just around the corner.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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You surprise the reader in the last few stanzas with your comments on the FanStory contests. Hang in there. Your success is probably just around the corner.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the great review, Paul. I've won my share of contests on here. I just had to gripe about the no win contests. Lol. Since they started the no win contests, that cuts the ones the people who have won down to nearly only half of the daily prompts through the week. I just don't think that's fair so I took this contest to whine about it. Haha. Thank you for the great review and stars, friend. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Find the joy in writing for yourself and disregard if anyone else reads and approves, passes your pieces over for lack of incentives (member cents), and stare into a mirror and smile for I have found they (smiles) are contagious. Tom
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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Find the joy in writing for yourself and disregard if anyone else reads and approves, passes your pieces over for lack of incentives (member cents), and stare into a mirror and smile for I have found they (smiles) are contagious. Tom
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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So is member gold. Lol. Thank you for the great review, Tom. I don't worry about what they think of what I scribble on here. I was just being silly so I could rant about the no win contests on here. Haha. I appreciate the stars, friend.
Comment from Susan Newell
In general I like this poem and the clever way of delivering the message. However I have a problem with the tense change in stanza four. I think it would be better to stay in the present and future tenses within the poem. It is so true that we compete against our friends. So many times the win is about "appeal" as much as the writing, and some topics are more appealing than others. Sometimes the works in a contest are apples and oranges, and some voters prefer one fruit over another. Your in luck! Poetry sells well, and a little humor doesn't hurt.
Sue
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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In general I like this poem and the clever way of delivering the message. However I have a problem with the tense change in stanza four. I think it would be better to stay in the present and future tenses within the poem. It is so true that we compete against our friends. So many times the win is about "appeal" as much as the writing, and some topics are more appealing than others. Sometimes the works in a contest are apples and oranges, and some voters prefer one fruit over another. Your in luck! Poetry sells well, and a little humor doesn't hurt.
Sue
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the great review, Sue. I know the tense is messing it up but I can't really figure out how to fix it and still say what I want there. I wrote this dumb piece quickly and when I was tired. Lol. I'll see if I can fix it a little bit. I really appreciate the generous stars, Sue. Thank you again.
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I'm sure you can figure it out. Never enter "dumb pieces" in contests! Polish. Polish. Polish. :-)
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That's pretty well all I do. Lol. I already fixed it. Thanks again.
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:-)
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site . . . smites; subject-predicate agreement
Otherwise perfect.
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If you say so. Lol. I wasn't sure about s on smite or not.