Deconstructing the Greats
Viewing comments for Chapter -2 "Number One"Here I'll share my own versions of famous poems.
13 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
What a poem to add to your son's treasure box! It's lovely, and Number One will certainly be forever overjoyed to have something like this to know how you felt as you carried him... Beautiful!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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What a poem to add to your son's treasure box! It's lovely, and Number One will certainly be forever overjoyed to have something like this to know how you felt as you carried him... Beautiful!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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I still have to send it to him. In fact, I was thinking of doing it a moment ago.
He's spending the weekend with us, but I'll send it now in case I forget.
Thanks for reading.x
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You are very welcome. :)
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Whether grammatically considered to a six-star piece by grammartists (sic). I think this poem is marvelous, and dare I say a reason why I am pro-life. Whatever it be, m or f, they may be what the doctor orders to cure cancer, poverty, or a savior to understanding the climate is unstoppable, and has been for however long scientist tell us it has been. I ramble. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Whether grammatically considered to a six-star piece by grammartists (sic). I think this poem is marvelous, and dare I say a reason why I am pro-life. Whatever it be, m or f, they may be what the doctor orders to cure cancer, poverty, or a savior to understanding the climate is unstoppable, and has been for however long scientist tell us it has been. I ramble. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Hello,
Thanks so much for your kind and thorough review.
Have a lovely day,
MJ
P.S. I guess the grammar is good because I teach EFL.
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EFL? That is alien to me.
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It means English as a foreign language. :)
Comment from aryr
I loved the picture, Heather because it definitely showed that one does not know what one will have. I thought about this as I read your poem. You are definitely becoming a poet!!! Years ago we didn't have the advantage of an ultrasound but what ever we had was beautiful. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. A great tribute to Helen Dunmore. Blessings n Hugs!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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I loved the picture, Heather because it definitely showed that one does not know what one will have. I thought about this as I read your poem. You are definitely becoming a poet!!! Years ago we didn't have the advantage of an ultrasound but what ever we had was beautiful. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. A great tribute to Helen Dunmore. Blessings n Hugs!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much for your kind review, Aryr.
I haven't read you in a long time. Have you posted anything lately that I have missed? x
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You are so very welcome, Heather. Nope, I don't think so?
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Hello Miss Heather! First I have to say that this is so so great. I cried through it because I could so relate and also because feeling your emotions was an amazing proof that you are such a skilled writer. I loved everything about it, but...
Don't you hate, buts? You can do it however you want but as far as presentation, I could envision this lovely piece centered in the box given for the poem and a fun font to match the poem and picture and enlarged for people to see easier.
Now your poem is the most important part, but it would be lovely to see that, especially in a shorter one like this. And if you need some help, I would be delighted to help you. It really is easy and you will never go back to this format again. But you are getting the six for the beautiful job and adorable picture.
And being known for miss chatterbox, I just have to tell you another reason I could relate so much is: when I am asked if there is a time in my life that I would ever want to repeat? I say, yes. In fact there are three times in my life and like you I sometimes refer to them as #1, #2 and #3. I loved being pregnant; the realization that I have a human life inside me, the first and every kick after, the love and tears from each feeling of movement, watching a fist or foot actually stick out when laying there and putting my tummy close to my husband's back so that he can feel the kicking. And then to hear his excitement and laughter. It's not that I didn't go through the sickness and hardship of complications, because I did. I also invented some new words during labor. But what I remember is the enormous amount of love and my husband's first words when he saw them. Well maybe not the last one because his first words were, 'what color of hair did the Schwan's man have?' Lol Heather, after being told my entire life that I would never have a baby. God blessed me with those three and I vowed to never take it for granted. It was so wonderful to be given that chance. I have an autobiographical story coming out today, part one of a true Halloween story called, 'I was a ghost and a goblin.' It tells about it in there.
So thank you so much for this lovely and adorable poem and picture. You did an awesome job on this!!!!!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Hello Miss Heather! First I have to say that this is so so great. I cried through it because I could so relate and also because feeling your emotions was an amazing proof that you are such a skilled writer. I loved everything about it, but...
Don't you hate, buts? You can do it however you want but as far as presentation, I could envision this lovely piece centered in the box given for the poem and a fun font to match the poem and picture and enlarged for people to see easier.
Now your poem is the most important part, but it would be lovely to see that, especially in a shorter one like this. And if you need some help, I would be delighted to help you. It really is easy and you will never go back to this format again. But you are getting the six for the beautiful job and adorable picture.
And being known for miss chatterbox, I just have to tell you another reason I could relate so much is: when I am asked if there is a time in my life that I would ever want to repeat? I say, yes. In fact there are three times in my life and like you I sometimes refer to them as #1, #2 and #3. I loved being pregnant; the realization that I have a human life inside me, the first and every kick after, the love and tears from each feeling of movement, watching a fist or foot actually stick out when laying there and putting my tummy close to my husband's back so that he can feel the kicking. And then to hear his excitement and laughter. It's not that I didn't go through the sickness and hardship of complications, because I did. I also invented some new words during labor. But what I remember is the enormous amount of love and my husband's first words when he saw them. Well maybe not the last one because his first words were, 'what color of hair did the Schwan's man have?' Lol Heather, after being told my entire life that I would never have a baby. God blessed me with those three and I vowed to never take it for granted. It was so wonderful to be given that chance. I have an autobiographical story coming out today, part one of a true Halloween story called, 'I was a ghost and a goblin.' It tells about it in there.
So thank you so much for this lovely and adorable poem and picture. You did an awesome job on this!!!!!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Hello Debi,
Thanks so much for your review and for being so generous with your stars.
I also loved being pregnant and I was very lucky (no morning sickness, super fast delivery...)
Regarding what you say at the beginning, maybe you should have a look again, because I edited it just after I posted it. I like the font, but maybe you're right about the position, because I haven't paid any attention to that. I'm going to have a look now to see if I can centre it. I'm going to read your story as soon as I finish answering reviews.
Thanks again for your review and for being so sweet. It's a pleasure to read you.x
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Yay! It looks so beautiful! And now the font looks great and the whole thing looks wonderful. Do you like it in the middle like that? I always hesitate on giving feedback if it is my opinion because I don't want to come off as a know it all. That I am not.
But do you use the preview option in editing. It is the last button to choose before save. It will say preview and you answer yes. I love it as you can go back and forth editing as many times as you want before making it a new release. You maybe do, but I am just trying to be of help, because I know how much all those tips meant to me a while back. So once again, awesome job!
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Yes, I love the way it looks in the middle.
I tend to use Comic SM or whatever is called for most of my posts as its my favourite.
I've never used the preview option, but I've seen it there. I'll use it next time around.
And thanks so much for the help.
I've been here for a long time, but I'm really absent-minded.
And don't worry. You don't come across as a know-it-all. x
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❤️
Comment from l.raven
Hi Maria, I remember going through all those feelings
at the birth of my children...
when my son was born...I stood up on the hospital bed...
and started singing James Brown's...I feel good...after
28 hours labor...everyone who came in the room...started
laughing...
I love your story told my sweet friend...and this picture
is just precious...I love your poem...very well written sweet girl...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Hi Maria, I remember going through all those feelings
at the birth of my children...
when my son was born...I stood up on the hospital bed...
and started singing James Brown's...I feel good...after
28 hours labor...everyone who came in the room...started
laughing...
I love your story told my sweet friend...and this picture
is just precious...I love your poem...very well written sweet girl...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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That story is precious. I wish I had been there.
Thanks for sharing it with me and for reading my poem.
xxx
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The picture through me off. Is your poem about pregnancy and birth? I like the metaphor of "my little pea turns into an acorn.
the acorn turns into a peach....etc" I Remember how it was with my first baby. I looked at my belly every day. LoL
Well done!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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The picture through me off. Is your poem about pregnancy and birth? I like the metaphor of "my little pea turns into an acorn.
the acorn turns into a peach....etc" I Remember how it was with my first baby. I looked at my belly every day. LoL
Well done!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Yes, it's about pregnancy and the beginning of life, but the poem that inspired me is about a baby orang-utan.
I did the same as you. I was always looking at my belly and when I lay down to watch the telly, I put the remote on top of me to see how it moved when he kicked.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The miracle of life described here and we never fail to be in awe of the process Heather and your delivered this poem with grace and wonderment, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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The miracle of life described here and we never fail to be in awe of the process Heather and your delivered this poem with grace and wonderment, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much for reading, Dolly. Babies are the best! x
Comment from irishauthorme
Great memorial! Watching my wife grow in size and spirit during pregnancy was unique and inspiring.
That trial, the pain, contractions, then that first tiny cry, marvelous!
Liked your use of the picture, and the quote of Helen Dunmore-whom I will look up!
Scary, how much they are like us!
Wow!
irish
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Great memorial! Watching my wife grow in size and spirit during pregnancy was unique and inspiring.
That trial, the pain, contractions, then that first tiny cry, marvelous!
Liked your use of the picture, and the quote of Helen Dunmore-whom I will look up!
Scary, how much they are like us!
Wow!
irish
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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I thought exactly the same. The little guy has such a human-like face!
Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from royowen
Of course I remember both my girls from go to who, I attended both their births, the sensation of growth is much more acute with the mother, Elaine enjoyed the whole experience, God is marvellous, beautifully written Heather, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Of course I remember both my girls from go to who, I attended both their births, the sensation of growth is much more acute with the mother, Elaine enjoyed the whole experience, God is marvellous, beautifully written Heather, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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It's a wonderful experience and one I'll never forget. My husband loves children so he was delighted every time as well.
Thanks for your review, Roy.
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Well done
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a great poem, that describes wonderfully pregnancy and birth. The only stanza I queried was the second. To me, it read as though your tummy had a face. I would have written:
and dream of the flutter's face.
Keep on with this book, you're doing well. Kate xx
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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This is a great poem, that describes wonderfully pregnancy and birth. The only stanza I queried was the second. To me, it read as though your tummy had a face. I would have written:
and dream of the flutter's face.
Keep on with this book, you're doing well. Kate xx
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Hi Kate
Thanks so much for your review and your advice.
