Random Rhyme and Petty Prose
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Abecedarian "a collection of phenomenally mundane work.
12 total reviews
Comment from Kaiku
Well, this was my first reading of the alphabet. I was a curious George. I had to look up Hekuba, although I could have Whatsapp'd my son for the answer. I read this a few times to get the hang of it and realized it was kind of like a one-way conversation. Fun. Thanks.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Well, this was my first reading of the alphabet. I was a curious George. I had to look up Hekuba, although I could have Whatsapp'd my son for the answer. I read this a few times to get the hang of it and realized it was kind of like a one-way conversation. Fun. Thanks.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Thanks for giving this a look.
Comment from Charlotte Morse
OMG this is a stunning piece of work! - She lowers herself down as she bows before him. Kneeling, she places her forehead on the cold earth beneath her, her arms outstretched along the hard ground towards him.
And then, in a defeated tone, resigned but raw, unbefitting of her venerating stance, she quietly says, "Well, I may as well give up now, coz there's no beating that one!"
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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OMG this is a stunning piece of work! - She lowers herself down as she bows before him. Kneeling, she places her forehead on the cold earth beneath her, her arms outstretched along the hard ground towards him.
And then, in a defeated tone, resigned but raw, unbefitting of her venerating stance, she quietly says, "Well, I may as well give up now, coz there's no beating that one!"
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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I am humbled and honored, Charlotte, by your great review of this poem. Thank you.
Comment from Aussie
Bill, I loved your A-Z writing! Tourettes is like a horse without a bridle. Unpredictable, neighing, full of life monster. From nursing, I understand your plight. I am also disabled and copped the flack in the early days. When did your noisy companion start? Blessings from Australia. Kay xx
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Bill, I loved your A-Z writing! Tourettes is like a horse without a bridle. Unpredictable, neighing, full of life monster. From nursing, I understand your plight. I am also disabled and copped the flack in the early days. When did your noisy companion start? Blessings from Australia. Kay xx
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Not a sufferer, Kay. I am only an observer.
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Well Bill, it is a dreadful disease for the sufferer. Whoever you are observing, I wish them love and healing. K xx
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is genius. I've never seen this challenge undertaken. The plethora of your use of literary techniques is compelling. I thoroughly enjoy your alliteration and allusion. You made fun sense in this diatribe.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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This is genius. I've never seen this challenge undertaken. The plethora of your use of literary techniques is compelling. I thoroughly enjoy your alliteration and allusion. You made fun sense in this diatribe.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Liz, for giving this a look. Bill
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***Smile***
Comment from susand3022
Hi Bill,
Must admit, I almost didn't come down far enough to start reading when I saw how many 'chapters' in I was. I'm glad I did though, it's a fun read. You did a nice job with the abecedarian. I'm going to make a suggestion though, as I'm just that kind of girl who likes to have the last word... I'd have gone for 'zilch'. ;) (pun intended) lol Have a good night! :)
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Hi Bill,
Must admit, I almost didn't come down far enough to start reading when I saw how many 'chapters' in I was. I'm glad I did though, it's a fun read. You did a nice job with the abecedarian. I'm going to make a suggestion though, as I'm just that kind of girl who likes to have the last word... I'd have gone for 'zilch'. ;) (pun intended) lol Have a good night! :)
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Zilch! Of course!
Comment from judiverse
Interesting presentation for the ABCEDEDARIAN poem. Too bad about the Tourette's acting up. It would put a stop to all those pretty thoughts about the moon and flowers. I like the Kill! Kill! Kill! line. Unfortunate that these utterances happen mostly at night. disrupting attempts at a prize-winning poem. Very well put together. judi
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Interesting presentation for the ABCEDEDARIAN poem. Too bad about the Tourette's acting up. It would put a stop to all those pretty thoughts about the moon and flowers. I like the Kill! Kill! Kill! line. Unfortunate that these utterances happen mostly at night. disrupting attempts at a prize-winning poem. Very well put together. judi
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Judi
Comment from damommy
Very clever and most amusing! I'm always surprised at where your imagination takes us. Keep it up. We need more light stuff on FS. The world is too full of gloom and doom these days.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Very clever and most amusing! I'm always surprised at where your imagination takes us. Keep it up. We need more light stuff on FS. The world is too full of gloom and doom these days.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Yvonne
Comment from nomi338
It is official, no need for further testing, the patient is obviously suffering from brain damage. Probably caused by overexposure to some toxic substance or influence by the subservice website FanStory.com, and the diabolical agent known as nomi338. Bwahaha!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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It is official, no need for further testing, the patient is obviously suffering from brain damage. Probably caused by overexposure to some toxic substance or influence by the subservice website FanStory.com, and the diabolical agent known as nomi338. Bwahaha!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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So -- it was you!
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Yep.
Comment from BethShelby
This is a very nicely done alphabet poem. Most of the letters make perfect sense. I'm not sure about the X but I trust you that it means something that goes without saying.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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This is a very nicely done alphabet poem. Most of the letters make perfect sense. I'm not sure about the X but I trust you that it means something that goes without saying.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Beth. I felt that "X" would include anything rated as such. A step beyond the "PG-13 tourettes" outbursts.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
We all try to be clever sometimes, don't we? It keeps our neurones firing. Speaking for myself, most times my writing isn't reader-driven, I just post out of interest to see what the reactions will be. Kate xx
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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We all try to be clever sometimes, don't we? It keeps our neurones firing. Speaking for myself, most times my writing isn't reader-driven, I just post out of interest to see what the reactions will be. Kate xx
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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hanks, Kate, for giving this a look.
