My Best Friend Troy
Contest Entry3 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem pays great tribute to Troy. I enjoyed reading
it and could tell Troy was loved by you and gave his love.
Your lines rhymed well with great descriptions. I know he
knew he had a second chance with you.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Your poem pays great tribute to Troy. I enjoyed reading
it and could tell Troy was loved by you and gave his love.
Your lines rhymed well with great descriptions. I know he
knew he had a second chance with you.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 16-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Updated: Yes, I like this better. With rhymes at the end of every line, you've switched formats completely. I didn't intend for my recommendation to produce a complete departure from free verse, but excellent improvement on short notice. A 5 it is.
Prior: A lovely tribute to your best friend. I enjoyed it. The poem is free verse but consider using some poetic devices next time to enhance the reading experience. Even free verse can use meter periodically, as well as alliteration, metaphors and occasional rhyme. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Updated: Yes, I like this better. With rhymes at the end of every line, you've switched formats completely. I didn't intend for my recommendation to produce a complete departure from free verse, but excellent improvement on short notice. A 5 it is.
Prior: A lovely tribute to your best friend. I enjoyed it. The poem is free verse but consider using some poetic devices next time to enhance the reading experience. Even free verse can use meter periodically, as well as alliteration, metaphors and occasional rhyme. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Thank you!
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I have changed the verses so it can rhyme. Please check it again! Is it better now for a five stars rating?
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Thank you!
Comment from jessizero
This was such a sweet poem in memory for your best friend, Troy. I am so glad you rescued him. He was blessed to have had you. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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This was such a sweet poem in memory for your best friend, Troy. I am so glad you rescued him. He was blessed to have had you. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!