Deconstructing the Greats
Viewing comments for Announcement "Morning Hope"Here I'll share my own versions of famous poems.
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Comment from lyenochka
So proud of you to take her class! And wow, you are a poet despite what you said earlier about not being one, you definitely are a poet! Loved the "fabric of my dreams" and as the poet awakens and faces the new day with hope, the "blinds" (or curtains which echoes the fabric metaphor) are opened.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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So proud of you to take her class! And wow, you are a poet despite what you said earlier about not being one, you definitely are a poet! Loved the "fabric of my dreams" and as the poet awakens and faces the new day with hope, the "blinds" (or curtains which echoes the fabric metaphor) are opened.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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I was about to use curtains and it would have been more appropriate, you're right. I didn't think of the relationship with fabric. I still have a lot to learn. I think I'll change it now.
In Madrid I have both blinds and curtains, here in the countryside just shutters. That's why I wasn't sure what to use.
Thanks for always being here to help. xxx
Comment from Debra White
Hi Maria, I loved your poem. I particularly enjoyed the line 'fabric of my dreams' and the idea of the alarm 'ripping' through....great imagery here and I love the tangibility you have given to the dreams. Your last two lines are perfect - each day really is a gift.
Beautifully written, and I like your approach and resulting product ��
Debra x
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Hi Maria, I loved your poem. I particularly enjoyed the line 'fabric of my dreams' and the idea of the alarm 'ripping' through....great imagery here and I love the tangibility you have given to the dreams. Your last two lines are perfect - each day really is a gift.
Beautifully written, and I like your approach and resulting product ��
Debra x
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Hi Debra,
Thanks so much for your review. Your favourite line is also mine.
You know it's always a pleasure to read you. Take care.
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Comment from aryr
This was truly amazing, Heather. The picture of the lady standing in front of her window in her robe was priceless and the two videos were phenomenal. I loved your words because they did portray a belief. The belief in yourself. Blessings n Hugs!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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This was truly amazing, Heather. The picture of the lady standing in front of her window in her robe was priceless and the two videos were phenomenal. I loved your words because they did portray a belief. The belief in yourself. Blessings n Hugs!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much for this wonderful review, Aryr. Your words are always so wise!
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Most welcome, Heather.
Comment from royowen
I think sometimes free verse is is better fo performance, mind you, poetry is poetry, and still has a certain degree of flow and some rhyme, metaphor, alliteration and simile to it, otherwise it's prose. But Asian forms are different, metered rhyme, can be tougher. Well done, but that's OK,, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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I think sometimes free verse is is better fo performance, mind you, poetry is poetry, and still has a certain degree of flow and some rhyme, metaphor, alliteration and simile to it, otherwise it's prose. But Asian forms are different, metered rhyme, can be tougher. Well done, but that's OK,, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Exactly, if we read, for example, Maya Angelou, we soon realize she uses lots of different literary devices.
Thanks for reading.
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Good on you Heather, you?re a clever girl,
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Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed reading your poem. I also resent the alarm clock, but it is a small price to pay for another day. Good luck with your book of poetry! Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I also resent the alarm clock, but it is a small price to pay for another day. Good luck with your book of poetry! Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Thank YOU for reviewing. Have a lovely day.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I think you are very brave. And you have chosen a great author for your first poem. I loved the 'what Katy did' series as a child. In your poem, I particularly liked the second line:
[it] rips through the fabric of my dreams.
Kate xx
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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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I think you are very brave. And you have chosen a great author for your first poem. I loved the 'what Katy did' series as a child. In your poem, I particularly liked the second line:
[it] rips through the fabric of my dreams.
Kate xx
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Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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It's my favourite line too.
It's funny because even though I have What Katie Did at home, I've never read it. However I love the kind of children's literature that was written back then: Pollyanna, Anne of Green Gables, Little Women...
I'll have to give this a try when I have time.
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Oh do read it, it's fun even for adults. Kate xx
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I keep on reading children's and YA books. I love them. At the moment I'm reading a contemporary one called Speak.
I'm sure the book is right up my alley. I'll have to add it to my very long list. x
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Morning Hope, makes the sometimes-slow transition from dreaming of good times to actually going out into the world and making those dreams come true. Nice.
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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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This poem, Morning Hope, makes the sometimes-slow transition from dreaming of good times to actually going out into the world and making those dreams come true. Nice.
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Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Thanks for your review.
