Time
my view on such27 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and well written poem you have penned about time and your view on things. You used very good descriptive words with very good imagery. Thanks for sharing. Teri
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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This is a very interesting and well written poem you have penned about time and your view on things. You used very good descriptive words with very good imagery. Thanks for sharing. Teri
Comment Written 17-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Thank you for reading.
Smile.
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you are so very welcome! Teri
Comment from estory
Loved this one. I think it's one of your best all time. You had a great rhythm constructed for this one, and I liked the echoing alliterative effects. That rhythm really mimicked the ticking of a clock and it is well concieved Fences, regulations, one way streets. there is also a great sense of trying to break out of the constraints of things like time, which is a great new way to look at it. In your poem we are trying to think out of the box rather than in it. estory
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Loved this one. I think it's one of your best all time. You had a great rhythm constructed for this one, and I liked the echoing alliterative effects. That rhythm really mimicked the ticking of a clock and it is well concieved Fences, regulations, one way streets. there is also a great sense of trying to break out of the constraints of things like time, which is a great new way to look at it. In your poem we are trying to think out of the box rather than in it. estory
Comment Written 17-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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I am so grateful U liked this. I have learned (sort of) that when I am tentative to post, I must simply force myself.
Comment from Laurie Holding
So beautifully presented, and articulately placed on the page. I'm sending six stars your way and hoping I haven't used mine up already this week! I think this is a true winner, Victor.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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So beautifully presented, and articulately placed on the page. I'm sending six stars your way and hoping I haven't used mine up already this week! I think this is a true winner, Victor.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Thank you sincerely. I appreciate it.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Victor, very good, very thought-provoking too. Your poem reads and flows well and has good sensory appeal. I especially liked:
A life
without Time...
Parameters disappear
Restrictions dissipate
(Parameters would definitely disappear.)
Whoever said that "time is on our side" must have been smoking something funny.
Well chosen photo. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing.
LateBloomer
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Hi Victor, very good, very thought-provoking too. Your poem reads and flows well and has good sensory appeal. I especially liked:
A life
without Time...
Parameters disappear
Restrictions dissipate
(Parameters would definitely disappear.)
Whoever said that "time is on our side" must have been smoking something funny.
Well chosen photo. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing.
LateBloomer
Comment Written 16-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Thank you so very much.
I appreciate it.
Doug
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Life, opens up the possibilities and opportunities that become available to us when we remove time as a factor and simply begin and go with a life seeking fulfillment.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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This poem, Life, opens up the possibilities and opportunities that become available to us when we remove time as a factor and simply begin and go with a life seeking fulfillment.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Yep. And?thank you
Comment from GWHARGIS
Your author notes made me laugh. As for your poem, it showed me how life could be different if we didn't have the constraints of time. Time rules everyone. We only get so much. Use it wisely. Great poem. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Gretchen
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Your author notes made me laugh. As for your poem, it showed me how life could be different if we didn't have the constraints of time. Time rules everyone. We only get so much. Use it wisely. Great poem. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Gretchen
Comment Written 16-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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As I did your review.
Thank you.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Doug,
A life without time... sounds like immortality, or death, perhaps they are one and the same. Time is our own superimposed matrix. I suppose it creates order, but also barriers. Indigenous people had no clocks, nor calendars. Nature was their timepiece.
Personally, I don't think Time exists, just motion, so just keep moving in one way or another.
Maybe, the biggest fence is our own thoughts.
Thought provoking poem.
Well done.
Best wishes for freedom.
Robert
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Hello Doug,
A life without time... sounds like immortality, or death, perhaps they are one and the same. Time is our own superimposed matrix. I suppose it creates order, but also barriers. Indigenous people had no clocks, nor calendars. Nature was their timepiece.
Personally, I don't think Time exists, just motion, so just keep moving in one way or another.
Maybe, the biggest fence is our own thoughts.
Thought provoking poem.
Well done.
Best wishes for freedom.
Robert
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Thank you. I virtually, (meaning virtually agree with you) agree. Lol No, seriously-
thank you.
Comment from karenina
Very clever poem with a thoughtful "pause" ~
It seems the only occasion that time won't matter is when we "... have slipped the surly bonds of Earth.." (A line from "High Flight" by John Gillespie Magee Jr.)
From here to there it's nice, is it not, to feel the tethers loosen as we move on in life, perhaps retire? It has been like that for me...
I'm not doing the nine-to-five shuffle anymore... but neither is every moment my own!
I'm with you... Not one for fences and such. Let's keep
s-t-r-e-t-c-h-i-n-g the boundaries!
It WAS "Time to do this."
:)
Karenina
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Very clever poem with a thoughtful "pause" ~
It seems the only occasion that time won't matter is when we "... have slipped the surly bonds of Earth.." (A line from "High Flight" by John Gillespie Magee Jr.)
From here to there it's nice, is it not, to feel the tethers loosen as we move on in life, perhaps retire? It has been like that for me...
I'm not doing the nine-to-five shuffle anymore... but neither is every moment my own!
I'm with you... Not one for fences and such. Let's keep
s-t-r-e-t-c-h-i-n-g the boundaries!
It WAS "Time to do this."
:)
Karenina
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Ha ha ha ha.
Thank you,
Doug
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You're welcome, Doug! Hope you're having a nice weekend!
Comment from Michaela Moore
Time. What an original way to muse about time in this poem. I love the fresh look into this subject that you gave the reader. Incredible all of the umph that you are able to squeeze out with so few but vastly well-chosen words. Excellently done!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Time. What an original way to muse about time in this poem. I love the fresh look into this subject that you gave the reader. Incredible all of the umph that you are able to squeeze out with so few but vastly well-chosen words. Excellently done!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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That was very nice of you.
Thank you,
Doug
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
A solid free verse poem. Good use of alliteration. And, most importantly, it invites the reader to pause and think. I recently retired and didn't fully appreciate how much of my prior life was controlled by a clock and how freeing it is to no longer be its slave.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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A solid free verse poem. Good use of alliteration. And, most importantly, it invites the reader to pause and think. I recently retired and didn't fully appreciate how much of my prior life was controlled by a clock and how freeing it is to no longer be its slave.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Absolutely. I also have just recently retired. (June 2021)
Although I still do work one day a week for them-well, basically for my patients. But, back to the point, freed from the time clock is quite enlightening, and would that we all could be, MUCH earlier.
Thank you,
Doug
