Novella - Unwanted Dog
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Oh goodness, did you have your running shoes on? I know that you didn't want to go back to the Hermitage Hall, but at least you would have been safe at night. Although you didn't think so.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Oh goodness, did you have your running shoes on? I know that you didn't want to go back to the Hermitage Hall, but at least you would have been safe at night. Although you didn't think so.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a nail-biting chapter, Brett. You're imagery and dialogue carry it along smoothly, despite the heavy boots. :) Too bad there isn't a good Samaritan among the crowd. So we're left again to wonder the outcome. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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This is a nail-biting chapter, Brett. You're imagery and dialogue carry it along smoothly, despite the heavy boots. :) Too bad there isn't a good Samaritan among the crowd. So we're left again to wonder the outcome. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Be on the lookout for the next one. Appreciate the review.
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You?re most welcome, Brett. I will definitely be watching for the next one.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh Yes! It sounds like a done deal. He has been apprehended I do believe. I can't wait to see how he carries on now. A smart kid would change his attitude. Maybe the truth would be a good place to start. Nice try on the get-a-way. Now he will have to talk his way out of it. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Oh Yes! It sounds like a done deal. He has been apprehended I do believe. I can't wait to see how he carries on now. A smart kid would change his attitude. Maybe the truth would be a good place to start. Nice try on the get-a-way. Now he will have to talk his way out of it. Nancy:)
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
From everything you wrote, I would say you're in neck deep hot water. I want to know if you got out of it. You did a great job as always. Enjoy your day. Shirley
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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From everything you wrote, I would say you're in neck deep hot water. I want to know if you got out of it. You did a great job as always. Enjoy your day. Shirley
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Wendy G
Desperate to see him escape, but I I can't see him getting away this time, which is a pity. You are writing this story very well, it's interesting and engaging. Noticed a typo: "irritated", not "iritated".
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Desperate to see him escape, but I I can't see him getting away this time, which is a pity. You are writing this story very well, it's interesting and engaging. Noticed a typo: "irritated", not "iritated".
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Appreciate the catch and the review.
Comment from Ricky1024
This was another finely written and well detailed chapter dealing with the music industry.
Throughout my lifetime.
I've seen quite a few wonderful artists come and go.
And they affected all Humanity.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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This was another finely written and well detailed chapter dealing with the music industry.
Throughout my lifetime.
I've seen quite a few wonderful artists come and go.
And they affected all Humanity.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Much appreciate the review.
Comment from T B Botts
Oh Blast it Brett! Why did you have to stop there? Of course I already used up my last six earlier. That's the problem with so much good writing and not enough sixes in the arsenal. Well done! I loved the wire Winnebago description of the shopping cart. I once ran from the law when I was twelve. The cop was so out of shape that I easily outpaced him. Unfortunately a fellow who hadn't been running for his life stopped me and I was too tired to resist. It was a minor thing, but I still caught hell at home. Oh well. I'm looking forward to the next edition.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Oh Blast it Brett! Why did you have to stop there? Of course I already used up my last six earlier. That's the problem with so much good writing and not enough sixes in the arsenal. Well done! I loved the wire Winnebago description of the shopping cart. I once ran from the law when I was twelve. The cop was so out of shape that I easily outpaced him. Unfortunately a fellow who hadn't been running for his life stopped me and I was too tired to resist. It was a minor thing, but I still caught hell at home. Oh well. I'm looking forward to the next edition.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Should have the conclusion of that chapter posted in a couple days. Be on the lookout for it. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from judiverse
This is very compelling. Running from the police doesn't seem like a good idea. He'll surely get caught. His attitude isn't going to do him any good, either. I wonder how much money he had, as he was thinking of going Greyhound. I do like the way you start each episode with a song. I'm glad you included the lyrics for this one, as I'd forgotten them. "Stepping towards the officer" is an example of a dangling participle. You might say "As I stepped toward the officer" to clarify. judi
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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This is very compelling. Running from the police doesn't seem like a good idea. He'll surely get caught. His attitude isn't going to do him any good, either. I wonder how much money he had, as he was thinking of going Greyhound. I do like the way you start each episode with a song. I'm glad you included the lyrics for this one, as I'd forgotten them. "Stepping towards the officer" is an example of a dangling participle. You might say "As I stepped toward the officer" to clarify. judi
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Appreciate the suggestion and the review.
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You're very welcome. This is such a compelling story. It reminds me in a way of Mastery's story, "Falling up the Stars." Don't know if you read his book. judi
Comment from GWHARGIS
Dang it! A cliff hanger. I liked the action in this chapter. The pulse quickening as you try to get through the crowd. How horrible it feels to have strangers grabbing at you. Unaware of how desperate you were to get away. Another great one. Gretchen
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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Dang it! A cliff hanger. I liked the action in this chapter. The pulse quickening as you try to get through the crowd. How horrible it feels to have strangers grabbing at you. Unaware of how desperate you were to get away. Another great one. Gretchen
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from BethShelby
:You're stretching out this cliff hanger chase and it feels like you are about to be caught if you can feel his hot breath. You're making a daring try and avoiding the cop. I think you've cunjured up the vision of Marie Laveau from the country song. The the real Marie was an attractive well dressed lady who was married to a Frenchman. I understand she was an good catholic and a women who visit prisoners in jail and attempted to help them. I'm anxious to find out how the pursuit ends.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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:You're stretching out this cliff hanger chase and it feels like you are about to be caught if you can feel his hot breath. You're making a daring try and avoiding the cop. I think you've cunjured up the vision of Marie Laveau from the country song. The the real Marie was an attractive well dressed lady who was married to a Frenchman. I understand she was an good catholic and a women who visit prisoners in jail and attempted to help them. I'm anxious to find out how the pursuit ends.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Appreciate your insights and the review.
