Needs Paint
a 3-5-311 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Write a 3-5-3 writing prompt Contest. Good syllables count. The connection between lines can be improved. I like the presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Excellent entry for the Write a 3-5-3 writing prompt Contest. Good syllables count. The connection between lines can be improved. I like the presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 16-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
I like the humor of your poem as that shows real commitment to choose to keep that house which should be "razed" but instead it is given a new coat of paint because it is "home." Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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I like the humor of your poem as that shows real commitment to choose to keep that house which should be "razed" but instead it is given a new coat of paint because it is "home." Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Helen
Comment from jessizero
I like that a new coat of paint could take the place of a razing. This was a great 3-5-3 poem. Thank you for sharing this poem here, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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I like that a new coat of paint could take the place of a razing. This was a great 3-5-3 poem. Thank you for sharing this poem here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Jessizero
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and nice presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery describing the nature of this house.
-An interesting take on fixing up a house that becomes
"home sweet home."
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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-Good artwork and nice presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery describing the nature of this house.
-An interesting take on fixing up a house that becomes
"home sweet home."
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Pam
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You are welcome.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Places like this were places, my grandparents lived. Not as bad as this one, however, holes were in the floors, you could do some damage to your ankle. Anyway, I never understood how the house did not have a color. As I got older, I realised it was never painted. The tin roofs were great when it rained. I enjoyed hearing the pitter patter. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Places like this were places, my grandparents lived. Not as bad as this one, however, holes were in the floors, you could do some damage to your ankle. Anyway, I never understood how the house did not have a color. As I got older, I realised it was never painted. The tin roofs were great when it rained. I enjoyed hearing the pitter patter. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Carolyn
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You are welcome.
Comment from Thomas Blanks
I don't know. I'm not a construction contractor, but I played one on TV. Maybe, the roof could use another piece of tin. Just on that one place where the gaping hole is.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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I don't know. I'm not a construction contractor, but I played one on TV. Maybe, the roof could use another piece of tin. Just on that one place where the gaping hole is.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Some say the dirt floor could use carpeting.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
haha... That old barn or old house needs more than paint. The text is a nice size. The message is clear. I actually chuckled reading it. However, I am unsure if you intended for it to be funny, but it is to me. The visual is great and is what made it humorous. Good luck in the contest. You have a fun entry.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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haha... That old barn or old house needs more than paint. The text is a nice size. The message is clear. I actually chuckled reading it. However, I am unsure if you intended for it to be funny, but it is to me. The visual is great and is what made it humorous. Good luck in the contest. You have a fun entry.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Sandra
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You are welcome.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This 3-5-3 picture speaks of your sweet home needs paint, though the picture of your sweet home needs reconstruction and then painting; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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This 3-5-3 picture speaks of your sweet home needs paint, though the picture of your sweet home needs reconstruction and then painting; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thanks, ALD
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, new paint would be a great start. However, it needs
much more love. Your art choice and word paired nicely,
Mystery Author. Good job with the contest rules--correct
syllable count per line.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Well, new paint would be a great start. However, it needs
much more love. Your art choice and word paired nicely,
Mystery Author. Good job with the contest rules--correct
syllable count per line.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Jan
Comment from Raul1
The sentences flow with clarity and I can understand reading it. It is well written. Excellent work! I like your poetry. No mistakes found in your poem. Thank you for sharing!
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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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The sentences flow with clarity and I can understand reading it. It is well written. Excellent work! I like your poetry. No mistakes found in your poem. Thank you for sharing!
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Raul
