Leaving hospital today
Free form monologue10 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jenin,
This is a sad story for the homebound old woman with no family. It was very nice of Mary and Stacy to bring her in their group. I can see why she wants to stay in the hospital. Her home situation might just send her back to the hospital.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Hi Jenin,
This is a sad story for the homebound old woman with no family. It was very nice of Mary and Stacy to bring her in their group. I can see why she wants to stay in the hospital. Her home situation might just send her back to the hospital.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much. Jen.
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My pleasure, Jen.
Joan
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thanks. So thrilled
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Jen. You did a really fine job on this poignant write. You can feel the loneliness of your main character as she tells her story. Great job on good luck in the contest.
Melissa
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Hello Jen. You did a really fine job on this poignant write. You can feel the loneliness of your main character as she tells her story. Great job on good luck in the contest.
Melissa
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much Melissa for the great review. Have a nice weekend. Jen.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Leaving hospital today"
This is Free Form Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well, with no grammar Issues.
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this one.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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"Leaving hospital today"
This is Free Form Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well, with no grammar Issues.
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this one.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Thanks
Comment from jessizero
I am glad that this is fictional. It was terrifically upsetting. You wrote it well, though, and you really captured the reality of such situations. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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I am glad that this is fictional. It was terrifically upsetting. You wrote it well, though, and you really captured the reality of such situations. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much for your comments and good wishes. Jen.
Comment from lyenochka
That's really sad that the narrator wants to stay in the hospital because she's cared for and talks with people. At home, she will be cold and lonely. Normally, it's quite the other way around - it's so much better to be in one's own bed and allowed to sleep!
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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That's really sad that the narrator wants to stay in the hospital because she's cared for and talks with people. At home, she will be cold and lonely. Normally, it's quite the other way around - it's so much better to be in one's own bed and allowed to sleep!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thanks Helen.
Comment from country ranch writer
been there dobe that but there is no placeblike home no matter how rough it can be. visiting nyrses are scarce these days inwas plum lucky tomget mine to come out three dats a week when I came . Get well soon!I will keep you in my prayers.
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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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been there dobe that but there is no placeblike home no matter how rough it can be. visiting nyrses are scarce these days inwas plum lucky tomget mine to come out three dats a week when I came . Get well soon!I will keep you in my prayers.
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much.
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rsmiles
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, I hope you haven't been in the hospital. But it sounds like this was back in January, it was cold, and probably when Covid was running rampant. The personalized care in the hospital isn't bad, but who the hell can sleep through all the damn confusion and noise. LOL. Have a wonderful week! It's always a pleasure, my dear! Ric
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Well, I hope you haven't been in the hospital. But it sounds like this was back in January, it was cold, and probably when Covid was running rampant. The personalized care in the hospital isn't bad, but who the hell can sleep through all the damn confusion and noise. LOL. Have a wonderful week! It's always a pleasure, my dear! Ric
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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This is fiction. I have never been in hospital except when giving birth. In fact I am very lucky, I have never had anything wrong with me. Thanks Ric for reviewing and the super 6. Have a great evening. Your devoted fan and friend. Jen.X
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry, Jen. I'm not
sure if this is biographical, about a friend, or anyone in
the hospital. However, your words were applicable to all.
I liked the formatting of lines and the POV of the one who
was leaving the hospital--even though where s/he was going
would be quite different from the stay there.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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You did a great job with your contest entry, Jen. I'm not
sure if this is biographical, about a friend, or anyone in
the hospital. However, your words were applicable to all.
I liked the formatting of lines and the POV of the one who
was leaving the hospital--even though where s/he was going
would be quite different from the stay there.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much Jan. It is not biographical. I?ve never been in hospital apart from when giving birth. Take care. Jen.
Comment from Sally Law
Jen, I'm sorry I don't have as six for this heartbreaking poem. So many old people are left alone in the hospitals to fend for themselves. It's a wonder they get well or summon the constitution to live. It's the angels like Stacey that make the difference. Sending you my best today as always and blessings for the day,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Jen, I'm sorry I don't have as six for this heartbreaking poem. So many old people are left alone in the hospitals to fend for themselves. It's a wonder they get well or summon the constitution to live. It's the angels like Stacey that make the difference. Sending you my best today as always and blessings for the day,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much Sally for your kind words. Take care. Jen.