Daydreams from the Ashes
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Work of a Daughter"Poems and meditations
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Comment from Kaiku
Very nice. Has to remind all who read of their parents and grandparents. You brought love front and center. It made me immediately think of my mom. Thanks
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Very nice. Has to remind all who read of their parents and grandparents. You brought love front and center. It made me immediately think of my mom. Thanks
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate it and your kindness. I hope you have a wonderful day.
Comment from lyenochka
This is so beautiful! A very moving poem for all of the children who have become caregivers for their parents as they succumb to the ravages of aging and even dementia. I especially liked:
"I say I love you,
because your loves live on in me,
indelibly imprinted on my soul,"
Hope this does well in he contest!
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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This is so beautiful! A very moving poem for all of the children who have become caregivers for their parents as they succumb to the ravages of aging and even dementia. I especially liked:
"I say I love you,
because your loves live on in me,
indelibly imprinted on my soul,"
Hope this does well in he contest!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate your time and kindness. The stanza you quoted is my favorite in it, so I'm glad it came out well. I hope you have a wonderful day.
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I just checked and saw that you won! Congratulations!!
Comment from Wendy G
Such a beautiful and compassionate post, and I agree with your thoughts. Love is much more than a fluttering feeling - it is expressed in actions of selfless service, especially when those actions are not recognised, not acknowledged, and there is no return. Beautiful writing, very moving.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Such a beautiful and compassionate post, and I agree with your thoughts. Love is much more than a fluttering feeling - it is expressed in actions of selfless service, especially when those actions are not recognised, not acknowledged, and there is no return. Beautiful writing, very moving.
Wendy
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your time and kindness, and I'm glad it moved you. Love should run deep. I hope you have a wonderful day.
Comment from Tara Maxfield
I truly appreciate the tone and depth of this poem. We all hope that a child would care for us in this way and that after we shed the flesh and move on that someone who remains would have the devotion to us to say these beautiful words about us. I think you've got a typo in the 6th stanza "loves" should be love? Not sure as you may mean it plural, but it may flow better with out the "s" and I believe would honor the intent either way.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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I truly appreciate the tone and depth of this poem. We all hope that a child would care for us in this way and that after we shed the flesh and move on that someone who remains would have the devotion to us to say these beautiful words about us. I think you've got a typo in the 6th stanza "loves" should be love? Not sure as you may mean it plural, but it may flow better with out the "s" and I believe would honor the intent either way.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate your time and kindness. I did intend to write that as "loves" instead of "love", because what parents pass on to their children is a multitude of them. Thank you for paying such close attention to it. I appreciated the suggestion. I hope you have a wonderful day.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is my first six I am giving away for a new week. This poem has a great sized font. The message is so clearly presented. I love how you take a present action you are doing and compare it to an action that was done for you as a child. Those lines pull at heartstrings and loving memories many may have. Your poem oozes love, and it has my vote. Well-done, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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This is my first six I am giving away for a new week. This poem has a great sized font. The message is so clearly presented. I love how you take a present action you are doing and compare it to an action that was done for you as a child. Those lines pull at heartstrings and loving memories many may have. Your poem oozes love, and it has my vote. Well-done, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your time and your kindness. I'm glad the love came through. I hope you have a wonderful day.
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You are welcome. That poem was so well done.
Comment from Bill Schott
This love poem, Work of a Daughter, is one that captures the readers' hearts as this scene may be familiar. This is love in its purest form.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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This love poem, Work of a Daughter, is one that captures the readers' hearts as this scene may be familiar. This is love in its purest form.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem. I really appreciate your time and your kindness towards it. I hope you have a wonderful day.
Comment from evilynne
Such a sad poem; it defines a daughter's love for her parents at the end of their lives as she becomes their caretaker. It is a well written and emotional work. Evi
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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Such a sad poem; it defines a daughter's love for her parents at the end of their lives as she becomes their caretaker. It is a well written and emotional work. Evi
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I know it's sad, but I hope it's also a testament to the love inherent in it. I really appreciate your time and your kindness, so thank you. I hope you have a wonderful day.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Love certainly shows when we have to clean up after another person to make them comfortable and we think only of their needs, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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Love certainly shows when we have to clean up after another person to make them comfortable and we think only of their needs, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your time and your kindness to it. I hope you have a wonderful day.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I just read your beautiful and love filled poem. A creative, brilliant approach expressing the love of your parents as they are needing assistance.
The last stanza is particularly powerful
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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I just read your beautiful and love filled poem. A creative, brilliant approach expressing the love of your parents as they are needing assistance.
The last stanza is particularly powerful
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate your time and kindness, and I hope you have a wonderful day.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I am crying so hard. That is how deeply your words [and your talent] have touched me with this gorgeous entry. I hope you win; you certainly deserve to. But if you don't, I hope you know that you won my heart in the biggest way. Xo
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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I am crying so hard. That is how deeply your words [and your talent] have touched me with this gorgeous entry. I hope you win; you certainly deserve to. But if you don't, I hope you know that you won my heart in the biggest way. Xo
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I cried writing it, so I feel you. I appreciate your time and your kindness, and I hope you have a wonderful day.