Run Over
a 1-6-16 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed reading your poem. I especially like the wordplay with the meanings of slay/sleigh. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I especially like the wordplay with the meanings of slay/sleigh. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Jessizero
Comment from HarryT
In my opinion this write lacks originality using a image from a well-known song. Also slay, sleigh are homophones they do not rhyme therefore this effort does not follow the contest rules.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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In my opinion this write lacks originality using a image from a well-known song. Also slay, sleigh are homophones they do not rhyme therefore this effort does not follow the contest rules.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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I believe you have done two things wrong with your review. One, you point out a distinction without a difference. Homophones are, by definition, rhyming, as they sound exactly the same. There is also assonance rhyming and consonance rhyming which are more in use.
Two, my poem sets a tone of deliberate killing as opposed to being in the wrong place at the wrong time.
If I wrote a 5-7-5 encapsulating Macbeth, that would hardly be considered derivative. Except perhaps by you.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Oh my my my. You certainly made your point in eight syllables! This will be a strong competitor if people put it together. Initially I thought you had unresolved granny issues, then I got it. Looks like most of us went for humor on this one I shall see you on the field of poetry battle! Nice work!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Oh my my my. You certainly made your point in eight syllables! This will be a strong competitor if people put it together. Initially I thought you had unresolved granny issues, then I got it. Looks like most of us went for humor on this one I shall see you on the field of poetry battle! Nice work!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Douglas
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow poet a good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your 1-6-1 Poem contest entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Hello fellow poet a good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your 1-6-1 Poem contest entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks, 13
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and nice presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the rhyme.
-Good opening and closing words.
-Good description that describes a Christmas morning.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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-Good artwork and nice presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the rhyme.
-Good opening and closing words.
-Good description that describes a Christmas morning.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Pam
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You are welcome.
Comment from Fleedleflump
Lol, I love the play on slay/sleigh and the dark subject matter that's (hopefully) also tongue in cheek. Maybe Santa is playing his own version of Death Race 2000 :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Lol, I love the play on slay/sleigh and the dark subject matter that's (hopefully) also tongue in cheek. Maybe Santa is playing his own version of Death Race 2000 :-)
Mike
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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