The Creation of Sam McGee
A Robert Service tale38 total reviews
Comment from Terry Broxson
Paul, you have done a very nice job with the story for the contest, good luck. I admit I did have to look up Robert Service and read his take on old Sam McGee.
If you do a follow-up, and I hope you do, consider what happens next after his buddy finds ole Sam sitting in the warm fire. That would be cool. Excellent work. Terry.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Paul, you have done a very nice job with the story for the contest, good luck. I admit I did have to look up Robert Service and read his take on old Sam McGee.
If you do a follow-up, and I hope you do, consider what happens next after his buddy finds ole Sam sitting in the warm fire. That would be cool. Excellent work. Terry.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Terry. That's a great idea that you have given me.
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Paul, it just occurred to me, given what the poems are about, maybe I should not have said "cool,"...make that, it would be warm. Good luck. Terry.
Comment from Fleedleflump
The format you've chosen, of rhyming couplets nested within broader couplets, does a great job of keeping the story moving along. It's a special skill, to impart narrative whilst maintaining a poetic form, but you make it look easy. I very much enjoyed.
Mike
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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The format you've chosen, of rhyming couplets nested within broader couplets, does a great job of keeping the story moving along. It's a special skill, to impart narrative whilst maintaining a poetic form, but you make it look easy. I very much enjoyed.
Mike
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Mike. I tried to keep with the original meter that Robert Service used.
Comment from nomi338
It was difficult to get to the end of this story for two main reasons.
1. Frequent breaks, where I sat laughing so hard I nearly soiled myself.
2. There was a reluctance to finish reading this because I knew it eventually had to end, and I did not want it to.
You sir, are a skilled storyteller, who should be getting paid for these marvelous stories. I feel lucky to have been able to read for free a story I would have paid to read.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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It was difficult to get to the end of this story for two main reasons.
1. Frequent breaks, where I sat laughing so hard I nearly soiled myself.
2. There was a reluctance to finish reading this because I knew it eventually had to end, and I did not want it to.
You sir, are a skilled storyteller, who should be getting paid for these marvelous stories. I feel lucky to have been able to read for free a story I would have paid to read.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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You are too kind, Nolan. I will try to have a few more, but it does take me awhile to write these.
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You cannot, nor should you try to rush perfection. Take your time, the end result is well worth the wait.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Excellent poem for the contest. Nice working of the rhyme throughout the poem. The story kept me engaged throughout the poem. Well done. I hope all is well with you.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Excellent poem for the contest. Nice working of the rhyme throughout the poem. The story kept me engaged throughout the poem. Well done. I hope all is well with you.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Ted. All is well so far.
Comment from dragonpoet
This story in rhyme flows well. To bad Sam never got the gold he wanted so bad. Maybe it was age and all that swearing.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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This story in rhyme flows well. To bad Sam never got the gold he wanted so bad. Maybe it was age and all that swearing.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Joan. I'm trying to think up something more from Robert Service poems.
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You're welcome, Paul.
Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your inventive tale of Sam McGee as it is entertaining and funny. Your metre is uneven in many places but this did not distract me from your fine story, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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I enjoyed your inventive tale of Sam McGee as it is entertaining and funny. Your metre is uneven in many places but this did not distract me from your fine story, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Christine. I knew that you might mention the meter. Many of the ballads by Robert Service use mixed meter. I had to stay with his form. It bothered me a little, but I got over it.
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It is a fine poem x x x
Comment from Frank Malley
"The Creation of Sam McGee" is an exceptional story poem that runs for 15 stanzas without a metric misstep or an ill-chosen word. Well, maybe one: I think that squaring the meter with words like 'did, does, or do' is cumbersome. "And the fierce Arctic gales did blow" would be better (I contend) with 'Man - those arctic gales can blow!' I hope this one ends up in some Americana anthology.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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"The Creation of Sam McGee" is an exceptional story poem that runs for 15 stanzas without a metric misstep or an ill-chosen word. Well, maybe one: I think that squaring the meter with words like 'did, does, or do' is cumbersome. "And the fierce Arctic gales did blow" would be better (I contend) with 'Man - those arctic gales can blow!' I hope this one ends up in some Americana anthology.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thanks for your kind words, Frank. I was quite awhile composing this poem.
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My pleasure, Paul. Frank
Comment from karenina
Doggone it of you don't finesse FIFTEEN six line stanzas and do it so well I flew down the page holding on to your solid rhymes and even meter for balance!
Super entry for this contest! Hope I'm back to congratulate you on the win!
Karenina
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Doggone it of you don't finesse FIFTEEN six line stanzas and do it so well I flew down the page holding on to your solid rhymes and even meter for balance!
Super entry for this contest! Hope I'm back to congratulate you on the win!
Karenina
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thanks for your kind words, Karenina.
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You bet!
Comment from Wendy G
This is fine story in a poem as you reveal the initial meeting and the ensuing experiences and adventures very well, in smoothly rhyming ballad-style format. Well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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This is fine story in a poem as you reveal the initial meeting and the ensuing experiences and adventures very well, in smoothly rhyming ballad-style format. Well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Wendy. First contest in awhile.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
I enjoyed reading this poem. To me it told a story well, and the words were written so perfectly the way they came out. I enjoyed the way that you used a lot of descriptive words to create such imagery, and I could picture the snow, and almost feel the cold of winter. Thank you for sharing. Hope to read more of your work.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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I enjoyed reading this poem. To me it told a story well, and the words were written so perfectly the way they came out. I enjoyed the way that you used a lot of descriptive words to create such imagery, and I could picture the snow, and almost feel the cold of winter. Thank you for sharing. Hope to read more of your work.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Jacquelyn. I'll try to put some more stuff out there.
