A Passing
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Comment from Michael Cassar
A poem touching a few nerves in our lives. I love your reference to mask, the masks of life. I trained parents and foster parents groups. I taught them about the multiple masks we wear, the mask for our family, our friends, and employers/society. Your statement about morality is decisive and full of meaning. Great poem
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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A poem touching a few nerves in our lives. I love your reference to mask, the masks of life. I trained parents and foster parents groups. I taught them about the multiple masks we wear, the mask for our family, our friends, and employers/society. Your statement about morality is decisive and full of meaning. Great poem
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you very, very much.
I am, naturally pleased this comes from someone who understands masks.
victor touche (Doug)
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I take my mask off. Thank you. 😊
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is well composed, written, and presented.
The theme is relatable to all, as we have all lost some one in our lives whom we have loved.
The rhymes work well without force and create a timbre that is smooth as silk.
I may consider a larger font, this size is a little hard to read.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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This is well composed, written, and presented.
The theme is relatable to all, as we have all lost some one in our lives whom we have loved.
The rhymes work well without force and create a timbre that is smooth as silk.
I may consider a larger font, this size is a little hard to read.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Sorry, thank you.
Yes, I think the normal fonts are too small also
Comment from GWHARGIS
Very astute. I really liked the evocative lines. The line about the teacher as mortality was perfect. There is no escaping it. Well done. Gretchen
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Very astute. I really liked the evocative lines. The line about the teacher as mortality was perfect. There is no escaping it. Well done. Gretchen
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you
Comment from harmony13
The poem is thought provoking! I found words of truth throughout the author's words. The way I see the quote is that we always need to be open to a new direction when life presents it. It is trail and error as the author states. I feel prayer and openness will help one to step out of what's familiar! I really liked stanza 7 which is so hard to do yet I believe it starts with awareness. I do think no one is finished until death!
This was an Exceptional Poem!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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The poem is thought provoking! I found words of truth throughout the author's words. The way I see the quote is that we always need to be open to a new direction when life presents it. It is trail and error as the author states. I feel prayer and openness will help one to step out of what's familiar! I really liked stanza 7 which is so hard to do yet I believe it starts with awareness. I do think no one is finished until death!
This was an Exceptional Poem!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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I thank you most sincerely.
I learn more from readers comments than you might believe. So, there is no one interpretation-what you extract, feel from the poem is just as relevant as my intention.
Thank you,
Doug
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We know we don't live for ever but when the time comes to die we don't want to do it, I am sorry for your loss. We leave the world with all our unfinished deeds, I know my father felt that way, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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We know we don't live for ever but when the time comes to die we don't want to do it, I am sorry for your loss. We leave the world with all our unfinished deeds, I know my father felt that way, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Dolly.
You get it.
Doug
Comment from nomi338
The story of our life in present society is one that ends in only one way, our demise. It is however, not the only story. I am told in scripture that there will be a resurrection. It is a story I cling to as it is an affirmation of no this is not all there is. There is more, decidedly more.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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The story of our life in present society is one that ends in only one way, our demise. It is however, not the only story. I am told in scripture that there will be a resurrection. It is a story I cling to as it is an affirmation of no this is not all there is. There is more, decidedly more.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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I actually agree...now. Before, initially, I believed, (youth).
Then, with education, doubted.
Severely doubted. Then, in 2010, at 55, I had an undeniable vision during the day, as I stepped out of my car.
The world changed for 20 minutes. And...so did I. I wrote a poem about it-Parking Lots, Dusk, and Dusk. A woman wrote a review of it and...told me exactly what I saw, how I felt, and then said she had the same experience. Which is simply not possible, unbelievable, but true. I think I felt a bit of the "Rapture." Truly.
It was that unbelievable. But...why? Why would I be so fortunate? A gift of incomprehensible value. To see with "eternal" eyes for twenty minutes.
Thank you my friend.
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The revelation is rapturous is it not?
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Yes, it is. I actually felt the rapture. Internally, in body. Complete lack of anxiety, no problems, no worries, just the most peaceful, joyous feeling I've ever had-by miles.
Comment from mermaids
Excellent free verse form that makes the reader think. How often we go through life wearing a mask and do we have the courage to remove it? "We have but one teacher, mortality" is a wonderful use of words and is a true line.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Excellent free verse form that makes the reader think. How often we go through life wearing a mask and do we have the courage to remove it? "We have but one teacher, mortality" is a wonderful use of words and is a true line.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you so very much.
It is always quite wonderful when a reviewer "gets it."
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your poem. My sincere condolences
on the loss of your friend. Your words were well thought out with
great imagery. Those words speak to the lives all of us live before
passing. The picture was perfect for your poem. Since your mentioned
you can't put a number with the quote, maybe you could put * after the
quotation marks then explain it in notes.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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You did a great job with your poem. My sincere condolences
on the loss of your friend. Your words were well thought out with
great imagery. Those words speak to the lives all of us live before
passing. The picture was perfect for your poem. Since your mentioned
you can't put a number with the quote, maybe you could put * after the
quotation marks then explain it in notes.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Well, Miss Jannypan,
(lol) have I called you that before?
Thank you. And your suggestion
of the * is so obvious, I am afraid to admit, I never thought of it. Oops.
Comment from royowen
Oh yes indeed, when I becam aware of another existence and source of wisdom, nearly 40 years ago, I was already married with two kids and some ideas which I needed to discard, (which I did) I'm sure I would be dead now if I hadn't, beautifully written Doug, we should be prepared to be "adjusted" till the day we die, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Oh yes indeed, when I becam aware of another existence and source of wisdom, nearly 40 years ago, I was already married with two kids and some ideas which I needed to discard, (which I did) I'm sure I would be dead now if I hadn't, beautifully written Doug, we should be prepared to be "adjusted" till the day we die, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Roy.
I appreciate it.
How are you?
Seems like it has been ages.
Doug
Comment from barbara.wilkey
In my humble opinion, you did a great job with the quotation notation. I doubt there is a better way to do it. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I hope you're doing okay. I have missed your poems.
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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In my humble opinion, you did a great job with the quotation notation. I doubt there is a better way to do it. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I hope you're doing okay. I have missed your poems.
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Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Barbara. I have missed writing them, painting, and all of my right side. I...have not laid aside enough time for the right side of my brain. Perhaps, I will do better.
Lol,
Doug
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I hope so.
