A Passing
a friend moves on20 total reviews
Comment from estory
Loved the impressionistic, ambiguity of the language here. It's hard to make sense of life and its pain sometimes, and I liked how your construction in its fractured form underscores the theme. Also liked the images of the cracked masks, and that last line 'unfinished sentences hanging in mid air' was terrific. estory
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Loved the impressionistic, ambiguity of the language here. It's hard to make sense of life and its pain sometimes, and I liked how your construction in its fractured form underscores the theme. Also liked the images of the cracked masks, and that last line 'unfinished sentences hanging in mid air' was terrific. estory
Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much, my friend.
Comment from Spitfire
I like the invitation to strip off our masks and find the true purpose of our mortality. Some refer to it as a 'calling'. The opening word wakes up the reader and gives solid advice. I never heard that quote but calling us
unfinished sentences is right.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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I like the invitation to strip off our masks and find the true purpose of our mortality. Some refer to it as a 'calling'. The opening word wakes up the reader and gives solid advice. I never heard that quote but calling us
unfinished sentences is right.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Yes, I think so too.
Wish I had thought of it first,
but we ALL are given different
gifts, no harm in recognizing such.
Thank you,
Doug
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Your poem challenged me to reexamine my own masks, particularly the one created upon the passing of a close friend not long ago. This was a difficult topic handled masterfully. Congrats.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Your poem challenged me to reexamine my own masks, particularly the one created upon the passing of a close friend not long ago. This was a difficult topic handled masterfully. Congrats.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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I am humbly honored by your review.
Doug
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Doug,
This poem describes the sadness of grief. It reminds us that it takes a while to accept a person is really gone, that you will never see him/her again. Some are strong and can hide the grief.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Hi Doug,
This poem describes the sadness of grief. It reminds us that it takes a while to accept a person is really gone, that you will never see him/her again. Some are strong and can hide the grief.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Joan.
U keep in touch.
Please.
Doug
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My pleasure, Doug.
I'll try.
Joan
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is very well done, my friend. You exhibit restraint with your choice of words which is useful when addressing the passing of a friend close to you. This is a mature subject worthy of your abilities and it brought a tear to my eye so I bow to your talent with this one.
Well written.
Jesse
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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This is very well done, my friend. You exhibit restraint with your choice of words which is useful when addressing the passing of a friend close to you. This is a mature subject worthy of your abilities and it brought a tear to my eye so I bow to your talent with this one.
Well written.
Jesse
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much, Jesse.
I really do appreciate it.
Doug
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My pleasure.
Jesse
Comment from Sugarray77
You have written a wonderful tribute to a passing friend. The raw honesty you include in your verse grabs the reader and causes him to ponder on your words. Well done Victor.
Melissa
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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You have written a wonderful tribute to a passing friend. The raw honesty you include in your verse grabs the reader and causes him to ponder on your words. Well done Victor.
Melissa
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Melissa.
Comment from Sanku
The quote is hard hitting , it fills one with unease.You are right about the masks.WE wear different masks for different roles that we have to play.When they fracture, the reality is scary..
I enjoyed reading and breaking my head over some lines1
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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The quote is hard hitting , it fills one with unease.You are right about the masks.WE wear different masks for different roles that we have to play.When they fracture, the reality is scary..
I enjoyed reading and breaking my head over some lines1
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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And thank you for reading and reviewing.
Doug
Comment from karenina
I love that final quote. I'd like to know the context from where it was pulled, but alas, had no luck in Google-village. Please send a link if you can!
I agree with it. We are not prepared for death, our own or someone we now--even though we know it is inevitable.
I have this wondrous sense that we'll be caught up "mid-sentence" and find ourselves in eternity...
Perhaps everything in this life is but a mask we will remove when freed from earthly ties...
I find that comforting. Faith tells me there is more... and thus I never say farewell... I say "Until then..."
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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I love that final quote. I'd like to know the context from where it was pulled, but alas, had no luck in Google-village. Please send a link if you can!
I agree with it. We are not prepared for death, our own or someone we now--even though we know it is inevitable.
I have this wondrous sense that we'll be caught up "mid-sentence" and find ourselves in eternity...
Perhaps everything in this life is but a mask we will remove when freed from earthly ties...
I find that comforting. Faith tells me there is more... and thus I never say farewell... I say "Until then..."
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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My dear, I am only too happy to provide U with details of where I found this quote. Hans Joachim Marseille was a Luftwaffe pilot in WWII.
He is also known as ghe Star of Africa. He died at 23. Not shot down, but bailing out of a new versioned fighter that had renowned engine problems. He officially requested not to be forced to fly ghis new version. He was denied. He died by bailing out and hitting the tail. He had about 356 air to air
kills. None comes close.
Believe it or not, he was a humanitarian. He was so good, he never shot at the enemy pilot. Only his engine. Decorated by Hitler, he confronted Hitler about his abismal treatment of people. As an example of Joachim, he was incessantly punished, but too talented to keep out of the sky. He was a prodigious lady?s man.
An example: he was confined to base, but decided to go out. Stole the base commander?s car. Went out nightclubbing and so forth. When he came back, a gorgeous leggy blonde was drunk and driving the car with a leg and a hand. Almost naked. Joachim was in the back seat half undressed with another drop dead looking brunette. He gets out, goes back for the other half of his clothes, then kisses pationately the blonde driving! Goes in three hours late for the briefing, which the commander held up for him, and answers what the F? were U doing?
Well sir, the girls wore me out, so I stopped for breakfast.
Doug
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Wow. Well! I've found several articles about him now--none as comprehensive as yours! Thanks...
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I am sorry about the loss of your friend, Doug.
-I think he/she would appreciate the image and your poem.
-As far as the quote, I think it is fine for a poem. I don't know
if there are any rules for that. You could give the credit in your notes, but it is also fine where it is in my opinion.
-I also think it is the perfect ending for your poem.
-From your images about the mask and beginning with "Hey...It's trial and error," there's a lot more going on that words can't express, and that is normal.
-I don't think anyone has the "right words" to say when someone they care about passes on. From my experience, it hurts to the core, and takes time to heal.
-I hope that writing the poem has helped ease the burden, if only for a brief time.
-Take care. Thoughts are with you.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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-I am sorry about the loss of your friend, Doug.
-I think he/she would appreciate the image and your poem.
-As far as the quote, I think it is fine for a poem. I don't know
if there are any rules for that. You could give the credit in your notes, but it is also fine where it is in my opinion.
-I also think it is the perfect ending for your poem.
-From your images about the mask and beginning with "Hey...It's trial and error," there's a lot more going on that words can't express, and that is normal.
-I don't think anyone has the "right words" to say when someone they care about passes on. From my experience, it hurts to the core, and takes time to heal.
-I hope that writing the poem has helped ease the burden, if only for a brief time.
-Take care. Thoughts are with you.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you
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You are welcome.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I read and comprehend a mist which allows a partial view but leaves the viewing what is seen unclear. There are many parts of this that show well whereas there is no string s, for me, that pulls the entirety together.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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I read and comprehend a mist which allows a partial view but leaves the viewing what is seen unclear. There are many parts of this that show well whereas there is no string s, for me, that pulls the entirety together.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you.
