Breaking Up with You
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry read well, Mystery Author, though it was
poignant. The picture was a perfect choice. Your words were
well thought out and descriptive of that sad event. Yes, when
one of the couple is out of sync, problems occur and must be
dealt with or. . . as you said.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Your contest entry read well, Mystery Author, though it was
poignant. The picture was a perfect choice. Your words were
well thought out and descriptive of that sad event. Yes, when
one of the couple is out of sync, problems occur and must be
dealt with or. . . as you said.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is quite nice but very straightforward. It left me looking for more, and I know fifteen words is not many to get a point across, and I commend you for that accomplishment, but perhaps another look at your word choices would carry this piece a bit further than its end. It's what I look for in these shorts because they are so short. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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This is quite nice but very straightforward. It left me looking for more, and I know fifteen words is not many to get a point across, and I commend you for that accomplishment, but perhaps another look at your word choices would carry this piece a bit further than its end. It's what I look for in these shorts because they are so short. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from GWHARGIS
Well, that was short and sweet. Lol. You got my attention and stated your case. There is no sense in pronging the relationship. This was a very direct poem. Kind of reminds me of the harshness of middle school. Fun read.
Gretchen
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Well, that was short and sweet. Lol. You got my attention and stated your case. There is no sense in pronging the relationship. This was a very direct poem. Kind of reminds me of the harshness of middle school. Fun read.
Gretchen
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
I'm really sorry this has to happen. Sometimes in life, this just has to happen for us to find the right partners. True love will definitely find you. all my very best in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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I'm really sorry this has to happen. Sometimes in life, this just has to happen for us to find the right partners. True love will definitely find you. all my very best in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review! I don't have a girlfriend I wrote this for the contest as a heartbreaking poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Aussie
Attractions come and go. It is hard to find one that both of you can share your love and like the same things. One day you will meet your soulmate and all will be well. Best wishes for your writing prompt short poem.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Attractions come and go. It is hard to find one that both of you can share your love and like the same things. One day you will meet your soulmate and all will be well. Best wishes for your writing prompt short poem.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from jessizero
Breaking up is never easy, even if one is wanting to be free. Romance is tricky, to say the least, and you captured that frustration here. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Breaking up is never easy, even if one is wanting to be free. Romance is tricky, to say the least, and you captured that frustration here. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Breaking up is really hard to do, more so for one half of the equation than the other. You picked a good picture where her sadness shows but he is hiding his thoughts. Wrong signal.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Breaking up is really hard to do, more so for one half of the equation than the other. You picked a good picture where her sadness shows but he is hiding his thoughts. Wrong signal.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from amahra
Nice artwork you chose for your writing. This poem is short but contains all the information needed to understand what's going on with the two lovers. Great job and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Nice artwork you chose for your writing. This poem is short but contains all the information needed to understand what's going on with the two lovers. Great job and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review! I'm happy you enjoyed it!
Comment from Gloria ....
This definitely fits the bill of a heartbreaking romance, particularly given the perfect artwork choice. I've never thought of it exactly that way before, but it works and in just fifteen words.
Wishing you all the best in the booths with this short heartbreaking romance.
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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This definitely fits the bill of a heartbreaking romance, particularly given the perfect artwork choice. I've never thought of it exactly that way before, but it works and in just fifteen words.
Wishing you all the best in the booths with this short heartbreaking romance.
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from harmony13
The first lines of these words flow and connect well. The last line says
it all! The author's words have a clear straight forward message! I liked
the explanation given which leads to the last line. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is awesome!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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The first lines of these words flow and connect well. The last line says
it all! The author's words have a clear straight forward message! I liked
the explanation given which leads to the last line. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is awesome!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
